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[At the end of my time, I still meet you...] At the end of the story, this sentence appears at the end of the empty text, and a striking paragraph of text occupies the page alone... Leaving only... Shocking...
Hahaha, this dream is so scary.
Looking back, I have been waiting in the pit for eight years (′ﾟдﾟ`)
Before clicking into the main text, browse the full text on the home page of the article, and the basic impression you can get is as follows: This is a first-person article about ancient beauty that is more literary and artistic. Of course, this is just the first impression this article gives. Whether this is actually the case will need to be verified or falsified in subsequent readings.
The content of the article is not obvious from the copywriting, but the antique-style words are very consistent with the first impression of the article, and it should be said that it is relatively targeted. It should be said that the author grasped this point well.
Of course, to be frank, the words themselves are still a bit over-exaggerated and avoid the truth. For those who have read the article and understand the situation, they may be able to understand it; but for others who do not know the truth and are reading this article for the first time, they will inevitably be confused.
But this doesn't matter. As the saying goes, "There is no best, only the most suitable." Today's people imitate the ancient style, mostly focusing on freehand brushwork, which just highlights a mood or sets a general tone. As long as the author likes it and the readers for whom it is intended accept it, then there's nothing wrong with it.
But when I saw the preface, I was suddenly shocked.
It is obviously an ancient novel, but it uses a very modern statement, especially a contemporary statement about the pain of youth, as the preface. The author himself said that the reason for doing this was because he "saw such a sentence". However, in the process of practicing the doctrine of borrowing, one must also consider coordination and proportionality. Facing a gentleman in a tuxedo, top hat, bow tie and sunglasses, it is really unimaginable that he would have long hair, a high hat, a high crown, and flowing sleeves, leaning on the railing and lamenting.
The preface is the general introduction of an article. It can outline the main points, catch people's attention, or explain the author's thoughts. If used improperly, it is worse than nothing.
The self-narration at the beginning is eloquent, smooth and soothing. But if you judge it from the perspective of a novel, it seems that it is inevitably a bit prose. The biggest risk of first-person writing, besides God's perspective, is the risk of writing it as a memoir or diary rather than a novel.
Nowadays, God's perspective has become a cliché, and except for artificial mines, everyone has deliberately avoided it. However, when a novel is written as a memoir, it is still inevitable to appear in the first-person narrative. This article, "Recalling a Long Farewell·Xue Jun", seems to have this tendency.
Readers of online articles probably want to hear stories, not listen to the author murmuring and expressing his feelings while immersed in his own memories. Of course, this is the author's speculation. The author cannot represent any person or any group. I just put forward a possibility for the author to grasp.
Another characteristic of the opening part of this article is that it does not follow any kind of orderly time clue. It is neither a sequence nor a strict flashback, but a story about what comes to mind, interspersed with a large number of narrations, memories, and the protagonist's emotions and comments. This kind of structure gives people an intuitive feeling that there seem to be many fragments in the author's mind, and then the author puts all the fragments together without completely sorting them out. It's like talking to a friend: "Hey, when I talk about AA, I suddenly think of BB, that time BB and CC... By the way, do you know what happened to CC last year?"
This is the intuitive feeling of this structure.
Perhaps the author himself is familiar with the overall context and complete structure, because he thinks he can pick it up and unfold it freely. However, in fact, readers do not know what the world in the author's mind is like, so they will feel lost.
Just like the example just now, if the other person is someone who is not familiar with AA, doesn't know BB, and has never seen CC, nine times out of ten, he will look confused and innocently stare at the author and ask weakly: "What did you say?"
Looking at the entire text, it seems that the first person "I" as the narrator has no obvious masculine temperament. So what is the content of this article that is so beautiful that words cannot express it? Why does this article appear as Danmei? What distinguishes the protagonist from women other than their innate setting? It might be better if the author pays more attention to highlighting his gender characteristics as a man and thereby highlighting the inconsistency of writing this article in a beautiful way.
In addition, the author's personal feeling is that the writing style generally maintains the style of memories, with a literary tone and light text. There is a bit of character entanglement, a bit of foreshadowing and clues, nothing surprising, but there are also no faults. Overall, it should be a pretty good article.
Xiangxiang Comment Group: Chili in the Fire
So I decided on one article. By the way, this chapter is very short. .
Come on! And happy National Day!
Quick update in progress......................
It's okay, but I feel dizzy.
Hello, author^^ I am a writer on the HY forum. I like your works very much. I would like to apply to reprint the completed article of your non-V non-out to HY.
All rights reserved to modify, withdraw, etc., Indicate the first issue and column, I hope your permission will be granted, and you are welcome to come to HY (づ￣3￣)づ
Huh~ Sorry, I didn't understand. Is the little fox reincarnated? ?
Ah woo~~What a cup~~
Sometimes I feel sad~~ Come on, come on~~
General reviewer Soda Water commented on "Reminiscences of a Long Farewell"
The preface of the article begins with a passage, which is a bit sad. At first, I thought the title was just elegant and sad, but then I realized that Chang Farewell is the hometown of the protagonist Mo Li. In Changbie Mountain, whenever a demon goes down the mountain privately before going through the tribulation, he/she will lose the most important thing. Mo Li originally thought it was her face, but it was her eyes. In order to track down Yuan Jin, who had come down the mountain to save her life but whose whereabouts were unknown, she left Chang Farewell and came to the human world. When she opened her eyes again and met the man she was looking for, she found that he actually recognized the other person as herself.
It seems to be a destined mistake, the beginning has been scrutinized.
First, the article type.
Before reading this article, I didn't know much about it, so I clicked on it and started reading. It wasn't until I got to the middle of the article that I suddenly realized that the protagonist was not "she", but "he". Although it was related to my growth experience, it was inevitably one word - thunder. After all, he is still a man, no matter what, he is not a woman. This suddenly made me feel like a woman wearing a man's interpretation of a BL story. I hope the author can deal with this contradiction.
Of course, there's no point in guessing. However, I have to mention that after reading the whole story, only other people's titles such as "Qing Guan" and "Jun Gongzi" can make me feel that the protagonist's gender is "male" again.
But I personally think this is actually a BG article. I don't know whether the author intends to make the protagonist grow up to be more masculine or to continue the story in a "motherly" style?
Secondly, let's talk about the plot
In fact, the author's writing style is relatively fresh and natural, with some recall-like writing methods, which is rare and very easy for readers to resonate with.
But there are some flaws in the plot - such as.
The environment that exists at the beginning of the protagonist's story has the flavor of a farming novel, but the author's idea is obviously not to make the article seem so bland. When arranging Yuan Jin to go down the mountain, the story begins to twists and turns.
Later, I saw Yuan Jin entangled with the person she mistakenly identified as the prince, and later Mo Li left alone and met the emperor and was brought back to the palace. For a moment, I had the illusion of a "palace novel". I wonder what the author's arrangements and ideas were?
The protagonist's birthplace suddenly changes from the wilderness to the palace and then to the palace. This transition may be difficult for some readers to accept. The article seems to have no direction. If the author has not made up his mind where to set the stage, the readers will be even more confused.
Third, let's talk about foreshadowing
There are a lot of foreshadowings in the article, such as the backgrounds and relationships of various characters, the civet cat Feng Er, Sister Li and others, as well as the words left by the monk - the secret of Changbie Mountain?
If the following can be connected in series and mirrored before and after, it will surprise the readers, remind them of the previous plot, and elevate the article to a certain height.
Regarding the foreshadowing laid by the author, I can already expect the wonderfulness of the following chapters, and this is a highlight that I have to say.
Some other small suggestions.
As for some suggestions about the article, the JJ chapter should be about 3,000 words or more. Since I downloaded it, I didn't pay much attention to it, but the last two chapters are too short... It can be said that it is impressive.
And it's about copywriting. In fact, the direct and clear introduction in the first two sentences can be enlarged a bit, but the complex words below are really not noticed in online literature.
All that needs to be said has been said, and I would like to note that the author enjoyed writing. Just one family's opinion!
Yuanmu, I have been looking through the comments recently and found that Nai's comments have not been posted. Sorry it's a bit late. I probably did it at night the past two days.
But the BS search didn't work at night. I couldn't find the original post, so it was late.
He said silently, I came here yesterday, just for ejaculation, not to mention leaving messages, I can't think of anything to collect.
Receive article~
Dad, have you traveled through time?
Who is the Immortal Lord? I thought Dieyi was the reincarnation of Amoniang!
I would like to ask the author, could you please repost this article to "Shivering is annoying"? All rights reserved to the author
I came here to collect the article. It's a little late. Don't blame me.
The writing is good~
It's a pity that I am the first person
I guess I would have liked it more~
Maybe there will be a long comment about determined to code more than 2,000 yuan.
Okay, forgive me. I was put off when I saw the first person version~
The article is indeed what I am looking for.
The little fox and the emperor! The prince is already so old, so who is the emperor? Handsome uncle!
My uncle controls!
Stay tuned for the next post!
[At the end of my time, I still meet you...] At the end of the story, this sentence appears at the end of the empty text, and a striking paragraph of text occupies the page alone... Leaving only... Shocking...
Hahaha, this dream is so scary.
Looking back, I have been waiting in the pit for eight years (′ﾟдﾟ`)
Before clicking into the main text, browse the full text on the home page of the article, and the basic impression you can get is as follows: This is a first-person article about ancient beauty that is more literary and artistic. Of course, this is just the first impression this article gives. Whether this is actually the case will need to be verified or falsified in subsequent readings. The content of the article is not obvious from the copywriting, but the antique-style words are very consistent with the first impression of the article, and it should be said that it is relatively targeted. It should be said that the author grasped this point well. Of course, to be frank, the words themselves are still a bit over-exaggerated and avoid the truth. For those who have read the article and understand the situation, they may be able to understand it; but for others who do not know the truth and are reading this article for the first time, they will inevitably be confused. But this doesn't matter. As the saying goes, "There is no best, only the most suitable." Today's people imitate the ancient style, mostly focusing on freehand brushwork, which just highlights a mood or sets a general tone. As long as the author likes it and the readers for whom it is intended accept it, then there's nothing wrong with it. But when I saw the preface, I was suddenly shocked. It is obviously an ancient novel, but it uses a very modern statement, especially a contemporary statement about the pain of youth, as the preface. The author himself said that the reason for doing this was because he "saw such a sentence". However, in the process of practicing the doctrine of borrowing, one must also consider coordination and proportionality. Facing a gentleman in a tuxedo, top hat, bow tie and sunglasses, it is really unimaginable that he would have long hair, a high hat, a high crown, and flowing sleeves, leaning on the railing and lamenting. The preface is the general introduction of an article. It can outline the main points, catch people's attention, or explain the author's thoughts. If used improperly, it is worse than nothing. The self-narration at the beginning is eloquent, smooth and soothing. But if you judge it from the perspective of a novel, it seems that it is inevitably a bit prose. The biggest risk of first-person writing, besides God's perspective, is the risk of writing it as a memoir or diary rather than a novel. Nowadays, God's perspective has become a cliché, and except for artificial mines, everyone has deliberately avoided it. However, when a novel is written as a memoir, it is still inevitable to appear in the first-person narrative. This article, "Recalling a Long Farewell·Xue Jun", seems to have this tendency. Readers of online articles probably want to hear stories, not listen to the author murmuring and expressing his feelings while immersed in his own memories. Of course, this is the author's speculation. The author cannot represent any person or any group. I just put forward a possibility for the author to grasp. Another characteristic of the opening part of this article is that it does not follow any kind of orderly time clue. It is neither a sequence nor a strict flashback, but a story about what comes to mind, interspersed with a large number of narrations, memories, and the protagonist's emotions and comments. This kind of structure gives people an intuitive feeling that there seem to be many fragments in the author's mind, and then the author puts all the fragments together without completely sorting them out. It's like talking to a friend: "Hey, when I talk about AA, I suddenly think of BB, that time BB and CC... By the way, do you know what happened to CC last year?" This is the intuitive feeling of this structure. Perhaps the author himself is familiar with the overall context and complete structure, because he thinks he can pick it up and unfold it freely. However, in fact, readers do not know what the world in the author's mind is like, so they will feel lost. Just like the example just now, if the other person is someone who is not familiar with AA, doesn't know BB, and has never seen CC, nine times out of ten, he will look confused and innocently stare at the author and ask weakly: "What did you say?" Looking at the entire text, it seems that the first person "I" as the narrator has no obvious masculine temperament. So what is the content of this article that is so beautiful that words cannot express it? Why does this article appear as Danmei? What distinguishes the protagonist from women other than their innate setting? It might be better if the author pays more attention to highlighting his gender characteristics as a man and thereby highlighting the inconsistency of writing this article in a beautiful way. In addition, the author's personal feeling is that the writing style generally maintains the style of memories, with a literary tone and light text. There is a bit of character entanglement, a bit of foreshadowing and clues, nothing surprising, but there are also no faults. Overall, it should be a pretty good article. Xiangxiang Comment Group: Chili in the Fire
So I decided on one article. By the way, this chapter is very short. .
Come on! And happy National Day!
Quick update in progress......................
It's okay, but I feel dizzy.
Hello, author^^ I am a writer on the HY forum. I like your works very much. I would like to apply to reprint the completed article of your non-V non-out to HY. All rights reserved to modify, withdraw, etc., Indicate the first issue and column, I hope your permission will be granted, and you are welcome to come to HY (づ￣3￣)づ
Huh~ Sorry, I didn't understand. Is the little fox reincarnated? ?
Ah woo~~What a cup~~ Sometimes I feel sad~~ Come on, come on~~
General reviewer Soda Water commented on "Reminiscences of a Long Farewell" The preface of the article begins with a passage, which is a bit sad. At first, I thought the title was just elegant and sad, but then I realized that Chang Farewell is the hometown of the protagonist Mo Li. In Changbie Mountain, whenever a demon goes down the mountain privately before going through the tribulation, he/she will lose the most important thing. Mo Li originally thought it was her face, but it was her eyes. In order to track down Yuan Jin, who had come down the mountain to save her life but whose whereabouts were unknown, she left Chang Farewell and came to the human world. When she opened her eyes again and met the man she was looking for, she found that he actually recognized the other person as herself. It seems to be a destined mistake, the beginning has been scrutinized. First, the article type. Before reading this article, I didn't know much about it, so I clicked on it and started reading. It wasn't until I got to the middle of the article that I suddenly realized that the protagonist was not "she", but "he". Although it was related to my growth experience, it was inevitably one word - thunder. After all, he is still a man, no matter what, he is not a woman. This suddenly made me feel like a woman wearing a man's interpretation of a BL story. I hope the author can deal with this contradiction. Of course, there's no point in guessing. However, I have to mention that after reading the whole story, only other people's titles such as "Qing Guan" and "Jun Gongzi" can make me feel that the protagonist's gender is "male" again. But I personally think this is actually a BG article. I don't know whether the author intends to make the protagonist grow up to be more masculine or to continue the story in a "motherly" style? Secondly, let's talk about the plot In fact, the author's writing style is relatively fresh and natural, with some recall-like writing methods, which is rare and very easy for readers to resonate with. But there are some flaws in the plot - such as. The environment that exists at the beginning of the protagonist's story has the flavor of a farming novel, but the author's idea is obviously not to make the article seem so bland. When arranging Yuan Jin to go down the mountain, the story begins to twists and turns. Later, I saw Yuan Jin entangled with the person she mistakenly identified as the prince, and later Mo Li left alone and met the emperor and was brought back to the palace. For a moment, I had the illusion of a "palace novel". I wonder what the author's arrangements and ideas were? The protagonist's birthplace suddenly changes from the wilderness to the palace and then to the palace. This transition may be difficult for some readers to accept. The article seems to have no direction. If the author has not made up his mind where to set the stage, the readers will be even more confused. Third, let's talk about foreshadowing There are a lot of foreshadowings in the article, such as the backgrounds and relationships of various characters, the civet cat Feng Er, Sister Li and others, as well as the words left by the monk - the secret of Changbie Mountain? If the following can be connected in series and mirrored before and after, it will surprise the readers, remind them of the previous plot, and elevate the article to a certain height. Regarding the foreshadowing laid by the author, I can already expect the wonderfulness of the following chapters, and this is a highlight that I have to say. Some other small suggestions. As for some suggestions about the article, the JJ chapter should be about 3,000 words or more. Since I downloaded it, I didn't pay much attention to it, but the last two chapters are too short... It can be said that it is impressive. And it's about copywriting. In fact, the direct and clear introduction in the first two sentences can be enlarged a bit, but the complex words below are really not noticed in online literature. All that needs to be said has been said, and I would like to note that the author enjoyed writing. Just one family's opinion! Yuanmu, I have been looking through the comments recently and found that Nai's comments have not been posted. Sorry it's a bit late. I probably did it at night the past two days. But the BS search didn't work at night. I couldn't find the original post, so it was late.
He said silently, I came here yesterday, just for ejaculation, not to mention leaving messages, I can't think of anything to collect. Receive article~
Dad, have you traveled through time?
Who is the Immortal Lord? I thought Dieyi was the reincarnation of Amoniang!
I would like to ask the author, could you please repost this article to "Shivering is annoying"? All rights reserved to the author
I came here to collect the article. It's a little late. Don't blame me.
The writing is good~ It's a pity that I am the first person I guess I would have liked it more~ Maybe there will be a long comment about determined to code more than 2,000 yuan. Okay, forgive me. I was put off when I saw the first person version~ The article is indeed what I am looking for.
The little fox and the emperor! The prince is already so old, so who is the emperor? Handsome uncle! My uncle controls! Stay tuned for the next post!
Love this article!!!