How Could a Straight Man Have a Crush on His Deskmate?

Tied. The overall feeling is not bad, pretty good. But emmm, even though I decided to cut the outline because I was defeated, there was so much foreshadowing and it was said that it was going to be finished not long after the battle for hegemony finally started. This is too top-heavy, right? As an unpopular fan of Wenpu Street, I really don't understand the problem, but I can tell you what I feel is the possible reason (please forgive me for the non-professional comments below mixed with many personal opinions, and I will make a long review so the details will be repeated). First, the summary: 1. The subject matter is cold 2. The cover title and introduction are not attractive enough 3. The depth of the characterization is not enough 4. The basic introduction of the first few chapters is not clear 5. The writing power in the middle and late stages begins to fail to carry the content 6. The emotional lines and processes between the characters are not rich and exciting enough 7. The flow of the plot is okay, but the description and plot content are insufficient. 8. The characters are flat. 9. The plot of frustration is insufficient (assuming this is not a standard happy article). 10. The second key point is insufficient. 1. The subject matter is too cold. Although I have read this kind of subject matter, I really haven't seen much of it. If you look at it in a big circle, few people will patronize it. What's more, this is a type where history has been changed by magic. 2. The influence of the book title and introduction on the cover. A good-looking cover can even make people try it when the content is not clear. The cover of this book has the feeling of Liu Han but it is not attractive enough to me. This is why I have collected it for so long and only picked it up in the past few days. 3. The beginning is not attractive enough. I was confused for several chapters before I gradually got into it. There was a bit too much verbosity, and the introduction of the current situation was also mixed with historical content, which was easy to understand and seemed to be a show. 4. Some things, such as the cheat system, are also very vaguely explained. I didn't even understand how this cheat works. I just pulled it out for a walk when I needed it later and then disappeared again. 5. The stamina is insufficient. After the first few chapters, the content gradually gets better and is very smooth to read, but then it becomes difficult and boring. 6. Plot issues, this needs to be mixed with character issues. The protagonist seems to be in constant turmoil, but in fact, it is all smooth sailing. Moreover, the author underestimates the ancients. In the plot, except for the people around the protagonist, other people are not only portrayed in a flat plot, but also very average. It seems that the competition in the Central Plains at the beginning actually gives me the feeling that the protagonist is still the protagonist. Family Story 7. Character design, the protagonist's character is a bit false, and the relationship between the heroine and the heroine's transformation (except for a small part at the beginning) is not clearly written. The supporting cast also gives me a feeling that there is a plot but actually there is nothing. The character creation is also a bit average, like a popular setting is applied to the top, and the shaping of other characters outside the protagonist group is also not good. It's great. Needless to say, the cannon fodder is all standard. There aren't many characters in the setting. Except for the parents of the fifth elementary school, the other characters are a bit random and poor. There are no mortal flesh-and-blood, loyal, treacherous, or free and easy capable people and aliens who are not outside the main characters (by the way, death is an important portrayal of a character, but even if it is a second-line character) I don't seem to have seen anyone die in the supporting cast. The death of no important character is not soulful enough for a book with this theme). It seems that the protagonist came out to do two things and said a few words before he was grateful and joined voluntarily. There are many protagonists in other novels who are like succubus and attractive to follow, but the author's description is not deep enough, making it feel light. 8. In addition to the red star that has been repeatedly emphasized, the author's introduction to the article also mentions the description of the increase in the status of women with equal rights for men and women. However, this is not obvious in the article. In fact, men are still the main focus. This point can be briefly mentioned at the beginning. However, the highlight of women is mainly in the auxiliary aspect. The care for women in the public is shown by medical schools and art soldiers? ? ? Obviously there are so many female characters with bright spots in reality, and they compete in different ways to show who says women are inferior to men. When the author feedbacks to the article, only medical drama assistants are the main ones. It is true that the protagonist is a man, but the author tentatively thinks it should be a woman. However, in addition to the slightly inferior portrayal of the male side of the protagonist, the author's care for women through the protagonist is also a bit insufficient. 9. The way of dialogue has changed. The first few chapters of the article have a more ancient feel, but the later on, the dialogue between the characters begins to become more modern. The author did not hold it back later. These are all just my humble opinions, crude and sloppy, and I still hope that I can improve my shortcomings.

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I never expected that this book would be finished.

I saved up for a few days and then disappeared again [crying]

Nice! ! ! Finished squatting