The voiceless voice of Widow Liu's family is in the eyes of everyone
She is just a quiet and almost dull girl
She hides her face under dust and oil
Guarding my mother who is seriously ill
Live an ordinary life
I thought this life would be over like this
The turning point came that day
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The author of this article is an idiot and the copywriting is the limit.
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A certain guy continued to blow kisses at his classmates who were cheating on him
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Sanliang, I came across your article by accident. The descriptions are quite detailed, and there is no verbosity. The title of the book is also interesting. But I think your paragraphs are worth more points. It is tiring to read them together. It is also best to leave a blank line in each paragraph. You have a lot of dialogue, I think it can be less, and it is all in one paragraph. I think it can be divided into paragraphs.
I hope you don't mind. I'm also a new author, so I'm just saying it casually. Come on.
Finished reading it in one sitting.
I feel that the development is a bit fast in the later part. Although it is the best Fate fanfic I have seen recently, I always feel that the later part is not as enjoyable as watching the protagonist before he goes back to the past.
Still very interesting www
Orz. . . . Is the truth of history = =
If you don't commit suicide, you will die. Why don't people named Zhu understand...
There will be a true end tomorrow. Isn't this ending a true end now? Is the true end be? Su Lin finally stayed in the virtual world? I remember Zhinao seemed to have said that he brought many people in. Can these people be rescued? The previous worlds continued after Su Lin left, so what will happen after Su Lin leaves the last world? Is it decomposed directly? If it's still going on, can you write it as a side story? I feel like Qi Haoran over there will also go crazy after losing Su Lin.
How much of a role does Mei Chaofeng in blue dress play?
What other conditions does Mr. Cen have?
It's so hard to see people through the crack in the door, haha
It seems like I need to add points more often...
(^_^Come on~~)
Sanliang, I came across your article by accident. The descriptions are quite detailed, and there is no verbosity. The title of the book is also interesting. But I think your paragraphs are worth more points. It is tiring to read them together. It is also best to leave a blank line in each paragraph. You have a lot of dialogue, I think it can be less, and it is all in one paragraph. I think it can be divided into paragraphs. I hope you don't mind. I'm also a new author, so I'm just saying it casually. Come on.
Finished reading it in one sitting. I feel that the development is a bit fast in the later part. Although it is the best Fate fanfic I have seen recently, I always feel that the later part is not as enjoyable as watching the protagonist before he goes back to the past. Still very interesting www
Orz. . . . Is the truth of history = =
If you don't commit suicide, you will die. Why don't people named Zhu understand...
There will be a true end tomorrow. Isn't this ending a true end now? Is the true end be? Su Lin finally stayed in the virtual world? I remember Zhinao seemed to have said that he brought many people in. Can these people be rescued? The previous worlds continued after Su Lin left, so what will happen after Su Lin leaves the last world? Is it decomposed directly? If it's still going on, can you write it as a side story? I feel like Qi Haoran over there will also go crazy after losing Su Lin.
How much of a role does Mei Chaofeng in blue dress play?
What other conditions does Mr. Cen have?
It's so hard to see people through the crack in the door, haha
It seems like I need to add points more often... (^_^Come on~~)