First of all, this is a spur-of-the-moment fan story. The background is very different from the original text. The two villains turn out to be the protagonists. The author must whitewash them and then... Force them to have a good and serious relationship!
On a whim these days, I found Feng Nong's "The Golden Jade Dynasty" which I had read when I was in school, and casually flipped through it again.
The writing style is as smooth and refreshing as the first time I saw it, and I am immersed in it...
However, I didn't have the patience to read 30% of it (I originally went there to eat meat), but I never expected the result! !
Not only did I fall in love with the two villains in the book, but I also couldn't let go of the love they had for a long time because of the plot... No, maybe that's not even love.
Seeing Zhan Luzhao's stupid look of being possessed by evil, seeing Xuan Huaifeng as if he had taken some kind of medicine, and seeing Xuan Huai's suffocating bear look,
I'm so angry!
How in the world can there be such Xiao Gong and Xiao Shou (although they are villains and supporting characters to set off the protagonist)
I just can't figure it out. What did Commander Zhan like about Xuan Huaifeng?
In my text, you two have to be one on one! ! You must give me HE! ! Give me sweet wow wow~
(The full text is short and Qingshui has no car, well... Because the scumbag author is inspired to be a Qingshui scumbag author)
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? I originally liked Jinyu and came to read the fanfic, but I was really speechless. If you don't like Jinyu, why would you want to belittle the protagonist? . You said you think Zhan should be upright, big girl. Who else is the normal military commander in the article besides Xiaobai? Everyone in the Bai family has bad tempers and beats women and children. Do you think that Xiaobai, who has a good nature, is the weak one? [Cracked] I really don't understand. Why do you want to worsen our pregnancy of Fengfeng again and again? In the text, either the third brother looks at the third brother with disgust or he responds coldly. Sister, this is still in Chinese. . Huaifeng's family had already gone and only his elder sister and third brother were left to kiss him. He always cared about whether he was studying and how his life was. In your article, he is the vicious male supporting character. It's not me who said that. . If you hate the protagonist, can you write your own story about the character? Don't use the skin of gold and jade to disgust people who really like books. Let's declare 99 haha, WB has never seen anything like this...
No. I wonder if these two are poisoned? Why do you still need to clean up? ? Instead, belittle the original protagonist who has national righteousness? Totally ooc
From your statement, I can also feel that you are a reader who loves and admires Nongda very much, and is also a person who reads novels very carefully, so I will seriously write you a long review and mention my opinions on this article. First of all, as someone who also likes Jin Yu and has read the original text carefully, I can understand your desire to give a good ending to Zhan Xuan, who has few emotional lines in the text and an unsatisfactory story. I also think that their relationship is full of regrets (it seems like this at the moment, because the original text has not been updated yet). But after all, we are writing a fanfic of someone else's original novel. In order to show respect for the original work, we should try to avoid OOC issues, especially for the two protagonists Xuan Huaifeng and Bai Xuelan. I personally think that your writing of Xuan Huaifeng is a bit OOC. Xuan Huaifeng is a very soft-hearted person. Many people who were new to Jinyu even gave up writing because of his mother. In the original work, even though Xuan Huaifeng's mother took over the family property, he did not have anything to do with Xuan Huaifeng. No complaints, even though a lot of self-interests have been harmed by this younger brother, I still don't resent him. However, there are several plots in your fanfic where Xuan Huaifeng bullies Xuan Huaipin, which feels very OOC and makes me feel uncomfortable when reading it. It feels like a drama. Secondly, you said that you think the capitalization of Xuan Huaimin and Zhan Luzhao is mainly to set off the love between the two protagonists. I think you are wrong. I personally think that the characters in Feng Nong's works are flesh and blood, and each character has his own meaning of existence. Feng Nong will not write such two characters for no reason. In order to "set off", the love between the two of them is not cheap. Needless to say, Xuan Huaizhao's feelings for Zhan Luzhao, and then in the original text, we can actually feel that Zhan Luzhao cares about Xuan Huaixin. There is one detail (Zhan Luzhao met Xuan Huaifeng for the first time under Xuan Huaixin's setup. He got up very early to choose his outfit and did not let Xuan Huaipin slept in and asked him to choose with him) and major events (Xuan Huaipin was suspected of being a spy by Commander Zhan, Zhan Luzhao confronted his own uncle, and committed suicide in the presence of all the old officers to prove Xuan Huaipin's innocence. I don't know if you have noticed, and I think, I will definitely add more love scenes between these two when it gets bigger. In summary, I think if you are still interested in writing this article or starting a new fanfic about them, you'd better pay attention to the OOC issue. I'm actually very happy to see that you wrote Jinyu's article with great care, and I sincerely give you suggestions.
This is too short...
Will you update this article again?
Come on, please do more. Looking forward to the next chapter. Any more?
Finished? I haven't read enough. I don't want to consider writing another article. I am raising a big banner for DaDa and hitting a big wall for DaDa.
In fact, I like Xuan Huaifeng and Bai Xuelan very much. They have nothing wrong with them. But I also think there is something wrong with Zhan Luzhao's attitude that Xuan Huaifeng is the only one, and Xuan Huaimin's feelings for Zhan Luzhao are also real, and there is no conflict between the two couples having a good relationship together! So when I read the original text, I felt that this couple had a lot of disagreements. They are both very three-dimensional and individual people. Why can't they live a good life?
I think generally the villain's character in the novel is more outstanding, but I didn't like Huai Feng very much when he appeared.
? I originally liked Jinyu and came to read the fanfic, but I was really speechless. If you don't like Jinyu, why would you want to belittle the protagonist? . You said you think Zhan should be upright, big girl. Who else is the normal military commander in the article besides Xiaobai? Everyone in the Bai family has bad tempers and beats women and children. Do you think that Xiaobai, who has a good nature, is the weak one? [Cracked] I really don't understand. Why do you want to worsen our pregnancy of Fengfeng again and again? In the text, either the third brother looks at the third brother with disgust or he responds coldly. Sister, this is still in Chinese. . Huaifeng's family had already gone and only his elder sister and third brother were left to kiss him. He always cared about whether he was studying and how his life was. In your article, he is the vicious male supporting character. It's not me who said that. . If you hate the protagonist, can you write your own story about the character? Don't use the skin of gold and jade to disgust people who really like books. Let's declare 99 haha, WB has never seen anything like this...
No. I wonder if these two are poisoned? Why do you still need to clean up? ? Instead, belittle the original protagonist who has national righteousness? Totally ooc
From your statement, I can also feel that you are a reader who loves and admires Nongda very much, and is also a person who reads novels very carefully, so I will seriously write you a long review and mention my opinions on this article. First of all, as someone who also likes Jin Yu and has read the original text carefully, I can understand your desire to give a good ending to Zhan Xuan, who has few emotional lines in the text and an unsatisfactory story. I also think that their relationship is full of regrets (it seems like this at the moment, because the original text has not been updated yet). But after all, we are writing a fanfic of someone else's original novel. In order to show respect for the original work, we should try to avoid OOC issues, especially for the two protagonists Xuan Huaifeng and Bai Xuelan. I personally think that your writing of Xuan Huaifeng is a bit OOC. Xuan Huaifeng is a very soft-hearted person. Many people who were new to Jinyu even gave up writing because of his mother. In the original work, even though Xuan Huaifeng's mother took over the family property, he did not have anything to do with Xuan Huaifeng. No complaints, even though a lot of self-interests have been harmed by this younger brother, I still don't resent him. However, there are several plots in your fanfic where Xuan Huaifeng bullies Xuan Huaipin, which feels very OOC and makes me feel uncomfortable when reading it. It feels like a drama. Secondly, you said that you think the capitalization of Xuan Huaimin and Zhan Luzhao is mainly to set off the love between the two protagonists. I think you are wrong. I personally think that the characters in Feng Nong's works are flesh and blood, and each character has his own meaning of existence. Feng Nong will not write such two characters for no reason. In order to "set off", the love between the two of them is not cheap. Needless to say, Xuan Huaizhao's feelings for Zhan Luzhao, and then in the original text, we can actually feel that Zhan Luzhao cares about Xuan Huaixin. There is one detail (Zhan Luzhao met Xuan Huaifeng for the first time under Xuan Huaixin's setup. He got up very early to choose his outfit and did not let Xuan Huaipin slept in and asked him to choose with him) and major events (Xuan Huaipin was suspected of being a spy by Commander Zhan, Zhan Luzhao confronted his own uncle, and committed suicide in the presence of all the old officers to prove Xuan Huaipin's innocence. I don't know if you have noticed, and I think, I will definitely add more love scenes between these two when it gets bigger. In summary, I think if you are still interested in writing this article or starting a new fanfic about them, you'd better pay attention to the OOC issue. I'm actually very happy to see that you wrote Jinyu's article with great care, and I sincerely give you suggestions.
This is too short...
Will you update this article again?
Come on, please do more. Looking forward to the next chapter. Any more?
Finished? I haven't read enough. I don't want to consider writing another article. I am raising a big banner for DaDa and hitting a big wall for DaDa.
In fact, I like Xuan Huaifeng and Bai Xuelan very much. They have nothing wrong with them. But I also think there is something wrong with Zhan Luzhao's attitude that Xuan Huaifeng is the only one, and Xuan Huaimin's feelings for Zhan Luzhao are also real, and there is no conflict between the two couples having a good relationship together! So when I read the original text, I felt that this couple had a lot of disagreements. They are both very three-dimensional and individual people. Why can't they live a good life?
I think generally the villain's character in the novel is more outstanding, but I didn't like Huai Feng very much when he appeared.