Remaining Bones

I would like to give some small suggestions to the author, (no malice, but you can refuse to accept them). First of all, I have been reading the article for many years. According to the current popular trend, the sadistic attack part is very enjoyable, but the villain's disgusting operations are too many and too trivial. The feeling of interspersed among them is like a cake with coriander in it, and I bite it from time to time. Coriander, a little bit at a time, but a little bit is enough to make it uncomfortable (I don't mean to say that coriander is bad, you can replace it with onions, ginger and garlic that you don't eat, please bear with your personal taste), or we can focus on writing the villain's actions and then cover them up, and then pull them out next time when we need to promote the plot, or just bury a little foreshadowing in the article. This book is generally very good, but the details could be improved upon. After looking at the author's situation, it can only be regarded as a matter of experience. 1. The protagonists in the dialogue are sometimes easily confused, and the role switching is too fast and confusing. 2. The self often appears in psychological descriptions, but this "self" is just like the previous article. It takes several readings to figure out who the self refers to. 3. The villain is too disgusting and appears too many times, which may lead to the loss of some readers who just want to read sour and sour stories. 4. The plot advancement is a bit stiff Excellent aspects: 1. The characters are well drawn, at least they stand up and have distinct personalities. 2. The transitions are written very smoothly. I personally don't like to read interludes, but it's acceptable here. 3. The words and sentences are very fluent, and the writing style is relatively mature. The above are all personal opinions. I don't know if my expression is clear enough. If the author feels that something is wrong or the expression is unclear, you are welcome to communicate with me [Compare your heart]

In fact, it can be seen that the writing power is a bit lacking in the middle and later stages, and it is not as compact and attractive as it was in the early stage. But overall, the pull between the protagonists is still very gripping. I hope that in the future, the author and teacher of Small World will do well.

"Although" is a big thorn in the side of the author~ Take it with you

Ahhhh! ! ! Shiyuan! Great!

It's really hard to explain to the ancients that a kiss will have a baby_(:з)∠)_

Touch the mulberry tree and have a good rest [please]

Has the memory been restored? Still have amnesia

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