Well, first of all, this is my pot! I posted it once before, but because the ending was a bit unfinished, I decided to commit suicide under a pseudonym. Now the ending has been changed, so I'm posting it again!
1. I am terrible at copywriting, so I will get straight to the point.
2. The protagonist of this article is Su Ancheng, Su Mian's sister
3. Su Mian did not go undercover in the Alphabet Group, but was already married to Han Chen! ! !
4. Xin Jia has never liked Han Chen, and is lovers with Ji Zichang! ! !
There are only so many lightning points at the moment. Above, I accept those who are incompetent to count the red crosses. Thank you for your cooperation!
Conception:
Reader comments
After reading it, I feel that the author is a scumbag's mother, who made the heroine weak and brainless.
You're willing to wait as long as you want just for this meal.
Happy New Year Oh Oh Oh Oh~
Fighting is very interesting, big woman Flora [Spread flowers]
I am inexplicably ashamed as I write this (Chi v Chi)???(●˙?˙●)??? Happy Lantern Festival
The male protagonist is 19 years old. In ancient times, everyone had a family and started a career. I thought the male protagonist was about the same age as the female protagonist.
Do they like the original owner or Tutu [question mark]
Forgive me for being obsessed with money again. I feel really bad if I don't get that money back.
Just gone? That's it? That's it? You know what I mean? !
Hahahahahaha I confessed my love hahahahaha
What the hell? Damn, is it over?
The writing is so great, teacher! Looking forward to updates
From "The World Sown" to here, reading all the way, it can be said that the author has made great progress.
I think "The Demon Lord Couple" is a good peak. I like the character creation, plot arrangement and writing style. First, especially the portrayal of Naofeng, it can be said that it is relatively plump. Although Naifeng is young, his entire character is very distinct. His distinctiveness is well reflected in his "childish" details. For example, he likes to drink Wahaha AD calcium from the fairy world, but he doesn't drink it. One drink at a time, for example, he is as small as a pheasant, but he still wants to fight with his real body, thinking that he is very intimidating... Secondly, the storyline of "The Demon King" is relatively full, with a clear context across the board, and more than one conflict point.
In comparison, "Flowers and Demons" may be darker - perhaps due to length. The portrayal of the protagonist is relatively weak, and the main story line is clear but lacks more conflict points.
Here are some immature suggestions:
First, in terms of character creation. Make the characters come alive on the screen through more psychological descriptions and detailed action descriptions. Every character created by the author has a very cute personality, such as Naifeng. But the reason why Naifeng is more impressive is probably because of the full details. I think it would be better to use some details to depict the character's personality~ The author is very good at describing the character's action language through a third party, so there may be less description of the protagonist's heart, making the character appear thin? Highlight the character's characteristics~ It doesn't necessarily mean that the protagonist's childhood experience is turned into various tragic stories to have a full-bodied character. A full-bodied character is more impressive!
Second, the storyline. I have to say that I really love the author's jokes! ! The protagonist setting of each novel is very unique! ! Therefore, in terms of the story, it may appear that it is "written for the purpose of the plot, and written for the setting", and the story is a little full and insufficient. The memes are certainly cute, but maybe there could be more conflicts in the storyline? Can the expansion be richer? Maybe the story line could be more complex? We can reach the ending of the story by choosing various strange forks, which may be more interesting than reaching it straight away.
Written at the end: I hope these immature comments won't offend you, and I'm really sorry that the narrative is terrible (from this aspect, I don't seem qualified to give you suggestions and opinions on your writing), but! ! ! I like you! ! New work on Umbilical Cord! ! Please remember to fill in the phoenix general chicks! ! ! !
First long review ~ Hey
It's great, can't wait for the next chapter!
Hahaha, kids, don't ask so many questions [dog head]
Okay, will there be an extra chapter at the end of the main story? Star Eyes Looking forward. Jpg
It's been 23 years. Woooooooooooooooooo XX
"It's not just appropriate" is a big bug for the author~
Weiwei really realizes her own problems and avoids them, come on
Madam, please update, don't stop here
Dafujin is not named Dong E, Sanfujin is. The first great fortune should be the Irgun Jia Luo family.
This part is so realistic...
Madman: Are you two polite?
How did "Qiao Haiyun" catch the author so hard~
Qiao Haizhen, the name was typed wrong
After reading it, I feel that the author is a scumbag's mother, who made the heroine weak and brainless.
You're willing to wait as long as you want just for this meal.
Happy New Year Oh Oh Oh Oh~
Fighting is very interesting, big woman Flora [Spread flowers]
I am inexplicably ashamed as I write this (Chi v Chi)???(●˙?˙●)??? Happy Lantern Festival
The male protagonist is 19 years old. In ancient times, everyone had a family and started a career. I thought the male protagonist was about the same age as the female protagonist.
Do they like the original owner or Tutu [question mark]
Forgive me for being obsessed with money again. I feel really bad if I don't get that money back.
Just gone? That's it? That's it? You know what I mean? !
Hahahahahaha I confessed my love hahahahaha
What the hell? Damn, is it over?
The writing is so great, teacher! Looking forward to updates
From "The World Sown" to here, reading all the way, it can be said that the author has made great progress. I think "The Demon Lord Couple" is a good peak. I like the character creation, plot arrangement and writing style. First, especially the portrayal of Naofeng, it can be said that it is relatively plump. Although Naifeng is young, his entire character is very distinct. His distinctiveness is well reflected in his "childish" details. For example, he likes to drink Wahaha AD calcium from the fairy world, but he doesn't drink it. One drink at a time, for example, he is as small as a pheasant, but he still wants to fight with his real body, thinking that he is very intimidating... Secondly, the storyline of "The Demon King" is relatively full, with a clear context across the board, and more than one conflict point. In comparison, "Flowers and Demons" may be darker - perhaps due to length. The portrayal of the protagonist is relatively weak, and the main story line is clear but lacks more conflict points. Here are some immature suggestions: First, in terms of character creation. Make the characters come alive on the screen through more psychological descriptions and detailed action descriptions. Every character created by the author has a very cute personality, such as Naifeng. But the reason why Naifeng is more impressive is probably because of the full details. I think it would be better to use some details to depict the character's personality~ The author is very good at describing the character's action language through a third party, so there may be less description of the protagonist's heart, making the character appear thin? Highlight the character's characteristics~ It doesn't necessarily mean that the protagonist's childhood experience is turned into various tragic stories to have a full-bodied character. A full-bodied character is more impressive! Second, the storyline. I have to say that I really love the author's jokes! ! The protagonist setting of each novel is very unique! ! Therefore, in terms of the story, it may appear that it is "written for the purpose of the plot, and written for the setting", and the story is a little full and insufficient. The memes are certainly cute, but maybe there could be more conflicts in the storyline? Can the expansion be richer? Maybe the story line could be more complex? We can reach the ending of the story by choosing various strange forks, which may be more interesting than reaching it straight away. Written at the end: I hope these immature comments won't offend you, and I'm really sorry that the narrative is terrible (from this aspect, I don't seem qualified to give you suggestions and opinions on your writing), but! ! ! I like you! ! New work on Umbilical Cord! ! Please remember to fill in the phoenix general chicks! ! ! ! First long review ~ Hey
It's great, can't wait for the next chapter!
Hahaha, kids, don't ask so many questions [dog head]
Okay, will there be an extra chapter at the end of the main story? Star Eyes Looking forward. Jpg
It's been 23 years. Woooooooooooooooooo XX
"It's not just appropriate" is a big bug for the author~
Weiwei really realizes her own problems and avoids them, come on
Madam, please update, don't stop here
Dafujin is not named Dong E, Sanfujin is. The first great fortune should be the Irgun Jia Luo family.
This part is so realistic...
Madman: Are you two polite?
How did "Qiao Haiyun" catch the author so hard~ Qiao Haizhen, the name was typed wrong