I will move to glutinous rice dumpling creation, um, I will prepare it recently
——This is a story about teasing and mutual teasing
Meng De has a girlfriend, a blonde and blue-eyed sweetheart who is both sweet and salty.
Every time I send flowers, write love letters, sing songs, and coax my girlfriend
Sean "We do simple things, go to Paris to Amsterdam"
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In fact, this article is semi-realistic, and it mainly satisfies my girlish heart, Su Tian, childish, immature, haha
Intention:
Reader comments
Hello author, I am the window writing this long review. I hope my review can help you. In fact, I just happened to read a heavy-handed newspaper article before, and I didn't feel well after that. Then when I read your article, I felt like my whole mood improved. So what I mean is, I quite like your writing. I will talk about the main topic below in two parts: First, as a reader, I have some feelings after reading your article. The second is some personal suggestions for you as a reviewer.
Part one:
I actually prefer the drama style, so I fell in love with it as soon as I saw your writing. Judging from the copywriting, I actually thought at first that you were going to start writing about the growing discord and breakup of a pair of lovers from the beginning. But when I clicked into the text, it was a bit unexpected. Then I was tortured by your copywriting==. When I was reading the copy, I originally thought that Zhou Jingshen was the attacker. But then I saw that your text was written from Zhou's perspective, plus the description of Fu Zhichen, I thought again qaq.
The writing style is quite smooth. Reading the whole chapter makes people feel visually comfortable. And your style is very definite. I basically don't read articles in Jinjiang, but I have read a few drama articles in the past because of writing reviews or other things, and I feel that the style is not that stable. It's obviously supposed to be a gloomy tone, but I don't know if it's to cater to the readers or my own writing taste, but I have to add a bit of fun and excitement. The result makes me feel very "unlike". Then I feel that after reading your article, I feel that the occasional humorous jokes are not so inconsistent. It goes well with the tone of this article, which is currently very painful. So I feel like a great god...
After reading it now, I am also looking forward to the following chapters. Regarding the secrets of Zhou Jingshen's past, I always feel that Zhou Jingshen only attacks when I look at your descriptions... Or maybe he later met Fu Cai and became a victim [Pfft, what are you writing?
And Fu Zhichen feels so mysterious... If he kissed Zhou without hesitation to protect Zhou, then there is a high probability that he was gay in the past. Then what happened to him in the past to make him become such a sophisticated person now. By the way, I'm asking if I'm too imaginative... [Dirt]
There are also Yang Chao... And Wang Bo who shocked me. What is the relationship between these two, but no matter what the relationship is, it is not a good thing. When I read the description of Yang Chao, I really didn't understand it for a while. I went back and read it several times before I understood it.
At present, it seems that it is not difficult for Zhou and Fu to be together. Author, if you add the promotion scene of the health club, the two of them might go out for a meal and it might be done right away. I even feel that if Fu Zhichen really misunderstood Zhou because of what he said about killing Matt, they would have become friends immediately. However, the confession of the past still needs to be expanded in length to outline it, and there is also the resistance of the Zhou family. And Fu's physical condition is 0.0...
As a reader, that's all I can say at the moment. I hope I'm not just imagining things randomly.
Part 2:
There's nothing wrong with the writing. I've said before that I think your writing feels smooth and mature. There's nothing wrong with it.
I feel there is a bit of a bug or maybe it is the part you want to explain later - about the first kiss in the alley. It satisfies the reader though, as progress speeds up abruptly. Suddenly the protagonist became intimate... I was suddenly excited while watching it. I thought this Fu was looking at the depth of field last week, but later I found out that it might be because of Shen Yun's request.
But it still seemed a bit abrupt... I only met him twice. Not to mention whether Zhou has a shadow and should avoid suspicion or... Reject it? Let's just say that Fu is the kind of calm and self-possessed person, so it's not very... Scientific to be so sudden. After all, this is a danbi novel, and even if it is a romance novel between men and women, it won't be too sudden. But this is between people of the same sex. I hope you, the author, can understand what I mean. If you can give me a hug here, or just rub my cheek, add a psychological description of the week. It feels very natural. Getting closer and closer became smoother. Of course this is my personal opinion.
Another point is the name and introduction of your article. I said before that I was fascinated by your copywriting, which shows that I actually quite like your copywriting. But this is just my personal taste. But in fact, objectively speaking, the copywriting is too one-sided. I can't tell from the copy what kind of story you want to tell. This is neither attractive nor does it summarize the direction of the article. There is a risk of losing readers. What I say next may be a little hurtful, but it is my sincere words - if I just looked at the title of your article, I would definitely not click on it. [Hey] It's obviously a very good story, even if the author wants to use a literary name or a concise collection of the names of the protagonists. I don't think it has such a big impact. But the current one... I personally don't think it's very good.
So if possible, revise the copy... I feel it will add color to the entire article.
There is also the development of relationships, but this is a common problem in novels. Inexplicable love. There is no source, just fall in love with it. If Zhou is interested in Fu, I can see some reasons. It has the same surname as my previous lover (I hope I remember it correctly), and has an unpredictable temperament that makes people immersed and pursued. But Fu's feelings are a bit difficult to understand. There are many passers-by in everyone's life, and they can't meet and become lovers after meeting each other for a while. If this is true, then he is really a passionate person to a certain extent. But you may have to explain the reasons later. So I'm still looking forward to it.
Also, you said that Shen Yun and her boyfriend are very important driving roles. I hope they can really play a big role in the future... Such as bringing these two together. Another example is persuading Zhou's parents to accept same-sex love.
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The general outline of the article can actually be revealed. I hope you, the author, can finish this story and give the characters a happy ending. I will continue to follow your articles. Come on.
10.14 Windows.
Hello author, I am the window writing this long review. I hope my review can help you. In fact, I just happened to read a heavy-handed newspaper article before, and I didn't feel well after that. Then when I read your article, I felt like my whole mood improved. So what I mean is, I quite like your writing. I will talk about the main topic below in two parts: First, as a reader, I have some feelings after reading your article. The second is some personal suggestions for you as a reviewer. Part one: I actually prefer the drama style, so I fell in love with it as soon as I saw your writing. Judging from the copywriting, I actually thought at first that you were going to start writing about the growing discord and breakup of a pair of lovers from the beginning. But when I clicked into the text, it was a bit unexpected. Then I was tortured by your copywriting==. When I was reading the copy, I originally thought that Zhou Jingshen was the attacker. But then I saw that your text was written from Zhou's perspective, plus the description of Fu Zhichen, I thought again qaq. The writing style is quite smooth. Reading the whole chapter makes people feel visually comfortable. And your style is very definite. I basically don't read articles in Jinjiang, but I have read a few drama articles in the past because of writing reviews or other things, and I feel that the style is not that stable. It's obviously supposed to be a gloomy tone, but I don't know if it's to cater to the readers or my own writing taste, but I have to add a bit of fun and excitement. The result makes me feel very "unlike". Then I feel that after reading your article, I feel that the occasional humorous jokes are not so inconsistent. It goes well with the tone of this article, which is currently very painful. So I feel like a great god... After reading it now, I am also looking forward to the following chapters. Regarding the secrets of Zhou Jingshen's past, I always feel that Zhou Jingshen only attacks when I look at your descriptions... Or maybe he later met Fu Cai and became a victim [Pfft, what are you writing? And Fu Zhichen feels so mysterious... If he kissed Zhou without hesitation to protect Zhou, then there is a high probability that he was gay in the past. Then what happened to him in the past to make him become such a sophisticated person now. By the way, I'm asking if I'm too imaginative... [Dirt] There are also Yang Chao... And Wang Bo who shocked me. What is the relationship between these two, but no matter what the relationship is, it is not a good thing. When I read the description of Yang Chao, I really didn't understand it for a while. I went back and read it several times before I understood it. At present, it seems that it is not difficult for Zhou and Fu to be together. Author, if you add the promotion scene of the health club, the two of them might go out for a meal and it might be done right away. I even feel that if Fu Zhichen really misunderstood Zhou because of what he said about killing Matt, they would have become friends immediately. However, the confession of the past still needs to be expanded in length to outline it, and there is also the resistance of the Zhou family. And Fu's physical condition is 0.0... As a reader, that's all I can say at the moment. I hope I'm not just imagining things randomly. Part 2: There's nothing wrong with the writing. I've said before that I think your writing feels smooth and mature. There's nothing wrong with it. I feel there is a bit of a bug or maybe it is the part you want to explain later - about the first kiss in the alley. It satisfies the reader though, as progress speeds up abruptly. Suddenly the protagonist became intimate... I was suddenly excited while watching it. I thought this Fu was looking at the depth of field last week, but later I found out that it might be because of Shen Yun's request. But it still seemed a bit abrupt... I only met him twice. Not to mention whether Zhou has a shadow and should avoid suspicion or... Reject it? Let's just say that Fu is the kind of calm and self-possessed person, so it's not very... Scientific to be so sudden. After all, this is a danbi novel, and even if it is a romance novel between men and women, it won't be too sudden. But this is between people of the same sex. I hope you, the author, can understand what I mean. If you can give me a hug here, or just rub my cheek, add a psychological description of the week. It feels very natural. Getting closer and closer became smoother. Of course this is my personal opinion. Another point is the name and introduction of your article. I said before that I was fascinated by your copywriting, which shows that I actually quite like your copywriting. But this is just my personal taste. But in fact, objectively speaking, the copywriting is too one-sided. I can't tell from the copy what kind of story you want to tell. This is neither attractive nor does it summarize the direction of the article. There is a risk of losing readers. What I say next may be a little hurtful, but it is my sincere words - if I just looked at the title of your article, I would definitely not click on it. [Hey] It's obviously a very good story, even if the author wants to use a literary name or a concise collection of the names of the protagonists. I don't think it has such a big impact. But the current one... I personally don't think it's very good. So if possible, revise the copy... I feel it will add color to the entire article. There is also the development of relationships, but this is a common problem in novels. Inexplicable love. There is no source, just fall in love with it. If Zhou is interested in Fu, I can see some reasons. It has the same surname as my previous lover (I hope I remember it correctly), and has an unpredictable temperament that makes people immersed and pursued. But Fu's feelings are a bit difficult to understand. There are many passers-by in everyone's life, and they can't meet and become lovers after meeting each other for a while. If this is true, then he is really a passionate person to a certain extent. But you may have to explain the reasons later. So I'm still looking forward to it. Also, you said that Shen Yun and her boyfriend are very important driving roles. I hope they can really play a big role in the future... Such as bringing these two together. Another example is persuading Zhou's parents to accept same-sex love. -------- The general outline of the article can actually be revealed. I hope you, the author, can finish this story and give the characters a happy ending. I will continue to follow your articles. Come on. 10.14 Windows.
No, Shaoyin belongs to Shen Yu.