Please give advance notice of new article: Her biscuits are poisonous
＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝
But after a car crash, Ming Yixin returned to the year when she was 18 years old
Looking back on the past, I realized that I was actually a great writer, and I would never give up until I risked myself to death.
So this time, she decided to keep a low profile and do things in a high profile... No, she wanted to be a good person, do good things, and make up for the past.
However, looking at those false reports, she wondered: Why is it so difficult to be a good person?
=================================
The extra chapters have been completed, with a total of 7 chapters. You can choose the ones you are interested in reading.
Conception:
Reader comments
Oh my god, it's so beautiful and the plot is so awesome
Finished spreading flowers! ! ! Thank you, the author and teacher, for bringing them such wonderful things!
Madam, I'm really looking forward to the novel. Please update it.
[Title of Work]: "The Crazy Husband Is at Side"
Author's name：Double Windmill
[Work link]: http://www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=2308547
[Commentator]: Wangchuan
[Number of chapters read]: Chapter 47
Xinxing Literary Club is a learning review club. It aims to learn the advantages of articles in the process of reviewing articles, point out the shortcomings of articles, communicate with the authors personally, and make progress together~
[Book Title]: The title of the book is very good and highlights the theme.
[Copywriting]: The copywriting is also good. It highlights the main content of the story, including main lines and contradictions.
[Opening]: In the early part of the first chapter, the description before the time travel is interesting, the text is humorous, and it highlights the heroine's character.
[Writing Style] The writing is relatively smooth, but the description of the situation is not in place. The situation is the plot and scenery. The plot includes what is happening and the behavior of the characters. The scenery includes the environmental objects where what is happening, the character who is doing the behavior, his clothes, dress, and behavior, etc.
It is recommended that the author describe the situation a little bit to enhance the reader's impression of the event.
[Contradiction]: There is no suspense in the contradictions and conflicts in the first thirty chapters. It is not attractive at all and makes me sleepy. But when I read the thirty chapters, it finally became interesting.
The exciting plot begins with the appearance of the female supporting character. The heroine's crazy husband finally recovers, but the female supporting character appears, uses her family background to sneak the heroine away, and replaces the heroine as the male protagonist's wife. The male protagonist was originally stupid, but after he was rescued, he not only lost his memory, but also became blind. After taking strong medicine, his ears were also deaf. When he was about to fix his eyes and ears, the female supporting character appeared and cut her off halfway. The heroine worked hard in vain and got nothing. She had to be replaced and became a gangster.
What bad luck!
Although the writing style of this part of the conflict is very rough and the description of the situation is lacking, it at least arouses the anger of the readers and arouses the readers' expectations for how the plot will develop next.
□ Whether romance novels are about house fighting or farming, the routines are basically the same. There is a triangle law. This is what I summarized myself, as follows:
First, the female supporting character abuses the female protagonist, stirs up the readers' feelings of hatred and hatred, and creates suspense. This is anger.
Second, the male protagonist abuses the female protagonist, instigating the readers to take revenge, and you have the emotion that you deserve it today, creating a sense of satisfaction, and at the same time making the readers like the male protagonist more, this is fun.
Third, the heroine can be troubled wherever she goes, and the heroine can be jealous and resentful by doing anything, which makes the readers nervous and fearful. This is scary.
Mastering the above three points, coupled with a certain writing style, a certain scene description, and a certain narrative structure, it is basically too difficult to achieve some results.
The author has only scratched the surface of the first point since Chapter 30. I hope that the author will continue to work hard and make persistent efforts.
[Main Line]: I have read all the forty-seven chapters of the author's published content. The first thirty chapters are just watering down, and the main line is unclear. In fact, the author can completely describe the plot before the heroine's time travel, and then write directly from the age when the heroine grows up and can get married. He writes that she has just traveled through time and found that she is a fourteen-year-old farm girl. The heroine thought it was a farming novel. , But immediately her parents told her that your biological father has come to pick you up. The plot directly states that the heroine returns to Su Mansion, so why does her biological father want to take her back? The author might as well be cruel and write that because her biological father wants to curry favor with Nie Mansion and is unwilling to marry his biological daughter, he thinks of the heroine as an abandoned child and takes her back to marry a fool for happiness. What a good reason to kill two birds with one stone!
Darkening the biological father can enhance the crisis level of the heroine's situation. The more crisis the heroine is in, the more readers will worry about the heroine. Once the reader's emotions are stirred up, it is tantamount to capturing the reader's heart. Are you afraid that the reader will not click to favorites and will not be updated every day?
If an author can stir up readers' emotions and capture their hearts, it will be difficult for the book not to become popular.
Next, the heroine is married to a fool by her biological father, but the heroine has a golden finger, she has a portable space and so on, and saves the hero. Here, we might as well improve the status of the hero. The hero is the eldest son of the Nie family. When the hero is cured, he is no longer stupid and smart, then, does the status of the heroine mean that he is no longer worthy of the hero?
The male protagonist's family decided to divorce the female protagonist and marry another official girl, so it was natural. Here the heroine is pushed into another crisis.
But one thing to remember is that when you abuse a heroine, you need to know how to handle it. The key to abusing a heroine is to seem to defeat the heroine, not to actually defeat the heroine. Therefore, everyone in the Nie family must divorce the heroine. This is the sense of crisis, which is the bamboo pole that stirs up the readers' emotions. Although everyone is acting to divorce the heroine, as long as the heroine is divorced, If the heroine is not divorced, then the reader will continue to worry and keep reading. The moment when the male protagonist cures all the diseases and clearly shows that he is not willing to divorce the female protagonist, it will be the climax that the reader has been waiting for. The reader will feel that this male protagonist is affectionate and righteous, and is a good male protagonist. It is not in vain for him to read the book all the way!
So, if the male protagonist expresses his intention not to divorce his wife, and the female protagonist's crisis is temporarily relieved, can the male protagonist's family just let it go?
They will definitely propose to marry equal wives and take concubines to destroy the relationship between the heroine and the hero, so the crisis will naturally arise again.
If the male protagonist refuses to marry an equal wife or take a concubine, then the male protagonist's family will say that the female protagonist is jealous and secretly encourages the maids at home to crawl into bed and destroy their relationship. This contradiction and conflict will arise.
If you write about maids crawling into bed, you can write a lot, and there will be no suspicion of inflating the story.
In short, it is about the heroine and the hero's family members playing tricks, about the male protagonist's family plotting, framing, and destroying the relationship between the heroine and the hero, creating suspense, and about how the heroine uses wisdom to break the situation in the face of the plot and frame-up, and creating a sense of satisfaction.
This is a commonly used routine in otaku writing. I hope it will be helpful to the author.
I won't continue to analyze other issues. The main problem is that the plot is not exciting enough, or the bland and boring foreshadowing is too lengthy. Why can't the most exciting plot be presented to the readers from the beginning?
Are the plots that preceded the contradictions and conflicts really irreplaceable and cannot be deleted?
Can't the novel continue without those lengthy foreshadowings?
Even if it is a very important foreshadowing, if it is too lengthy, it will make people lose interest in reading.
The above words are for reference only. If there are any inappropriate words, please forgive Xiaofengchechejun, okay!
Damn, our school doesn't allow papers to be submitted in advance. Every time during the second half of the exam, there are a bunch of people lying on the table.
Grandma's sister is not his old aunt, catching insects.
Oh my god, it's so beautiful and the plot is so awesome
Finished spreading flowers! ! ! Thank you, the author and teacher, for bringing them such wonderful things!
Madam, I'm really looking forward to the novel. Please update it.
[Title of Work]: "The Crazy Husband Is at Side" Author's name：Double Windmill [Work link]: http://www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=2308547 [Commentator]: Wangchuan [Number of chapters read]: Chapter 47 Xinxing Literary Club is a learning review club. It aims to learn the advantages of articles in the process of reviewing articles, point out the shortcomings of articles, communicate with the authors personally, and make progress together~ [Book Title]: The title of the book is very good and highlights the theme. [Copywriting]: The copywriting is also good. It highlights the main content of the story, including main lines and contradictions. [Opening]: In the early part of the first chapter, the description before the time travel is interesting, the text is humorous, and it highlights the heroine's character. [Writing Style] The writing is relatively smooth, but the description of the situation is not in place. The situation is the plot and scenery. The plot includes what is happening and the behavior of the characters. The scenery includes the environmental objects where what is happening, the character who is doing the behavior, his clothes, dress, and behavior, etc. It is recommended that the author describe the situation a little bit to enhance the reader's impression of the event. [Contradiction]: There is no suspense in the contradictions and conflicts in the first thirty chapters. It is not attractive at all and makes me sleepy. But when I read the thirty chapters, it finally became interesting. The exciting plot begins with the appearance of the female supporting character. The heroine's crazy husband finally recovers, but the female supporting character appears, uses her family background to sneak the heroine away, and replaces the heroine as the male protagonist's wife. The male protagonist was originally stupid, but after he was rescued, he not only lost his memory, but also became blind. After taking strong medicine, his ears were also deaf. When he was about to fix his eyes and ears, the female supporting character appeared and cut her off halfway. The heroine worked hard in vain and got nothing. She had to be replaced and became a gangster. What bad luck! Although the writing style of this part of the conflict is very rough and the description of the situation is lacking, it at least arouses the anger of the readers and arouses the readers' expectations for how the plot will develop next. □ Whether romance novels are about house fighting or farming, the routines are basically the same. There is a triangle law. This is what I summarized myself, as follows: First, the female supporting character abuses the female protagonist, stirs up the readers' feelings of hatred and hatred, and creates suspense. This is anger. Second, the male protagonist abuses the female protagonist, instigating the readers to take revenge, and you have the emotion that you deserve it today, creating a sense of satisfaction, and at the same time making the readers like the male protagonist more, this is fun. Third, the heroine can be troubled wherever she goes, and the heroine can be jealous and resentful by doing anything, which makes the readers nervous and fearful. This is scary. Mastering the above three points, coupled with a certain writing style, a certain scene description, and a certain narrative structure, it is basically too difficult to achieve some results. The author has only scratched the surface of the first point since Chapter 30. I hope that the author will continue to work hard and make persistent efforts. [Main Line]: I have read all the forty-seven chapters of the author's published content. The first thirty chapters are just watering down, and the main line is unclear. In fact, the author can completely describe the plot before the heroine's time travel, and then write directly from the age when the heroine grows up and can get married. He writes that she has just traveled through time and found that she is a fourteen-year-old farm girl. The heroine thought it was a farming novel. , But immediately her parents told her that your biological father has come to pick you up. The plot directly states that the heroine returns to Su Mansion, so why does her biological father want to take her back? The author might as well be cruel and write that because her biological father wants to curry favor with Nie Mansion and is unwilling to marry his biological daughter, he thinks of the heroine as an abandoned child and takes her back to marry a fool for happiness. What a good reason to kill two birds with one stone! Darkening the biological father can enhance the crisis level of the heroine's situation. The more crisis the heroine is in, the more readers will worry about the heroine. Once the reader's emotions are stirred up, it is tantamount to capturing the reader's heart. Are you afraid that the reader will not click to favorites and will not be updated every day? If an author can stir up readers' emotions and capture their hearts, it will be difficult for the book not to become popular. Next, the heroine is married to a fool by her biological father, but the heroine has a golden finger, she has a portable space and so on, and saves the hero. Here, we might as well improve the status of the hero. The hero is the eldest son of the Nie family. When the hero is cured, he is no longer stupid and smart, then, does the status of the heroine mean that he is no longer worthy of the hero? The male protagonist's family decided to divorce the female protagonist and marry another official girl, so it was natural. Here the heroine is pushed into another crisis. But one thing to remember is that when you abuse a heroine, you need to know how to handle it. The key to abusing a heroine is to seem to defeat the heroine, not to actually defeat the heroine. Therefore, everyone in the Nie family must divorce the heroine. This is the sense of crisis, which is the bamboo pole that stirs up the readers' emotions. Although everyone is acting to divorce the heroine, as long as the heroine is divorced, If the heroine is not divorced, then the reader will continue to worry and keep reading. The moment when the male protagonist cures all the diseases and clearly shows that he is not willing to divorce the female protagonist, it will be the climax that the reader has been waiting for. The reader will feel that this male protagonist is affectionate and righteous, and is a good male protagonist. It is not in vain for him to read the book all the way! So, if the male protagonist expresses his intention not to divorce his wife, and the female protagonist's crisis is temporarily relieved, can the male protagonist's family just let it go? They will definitely propose to marry equal wives and take concubines to destroy the relationship between the heroine and the hero, so the crisis will naturally arise again. If the male protagonist refuses to marry an equal wife or take a concubine, then the male protagonist's family will say that the female protagonist is jealous and secretly encourages the maids at home to crawl into bed and destroy their relationship. This contradiction and conflict will arise. If you write about maids crawling into bed, you can write a lot, and there will be no suspicion of inflating the story. In short, it is about the heroine and the hero's family members playing tricks, about the male protagonist's family plotting, framing, and destroying the relationship between the heroine and the hero, creating suspense, and about how the heroine uses wisdom to break the situation in the face of the plot and frame-up, and creating a sense of satisfaction. This is a commonly used routine in otaku writing. I hope it will be helpful to the author. I won't continue to analyze other issues. The main problem is that the plot is not exciting enough, or the bland and boring foreshadowing is too lengthy. Why can't the most exciting plot be presented to the readers from the beginning? Are the plots that preceded the contradictions and conflicts really irreplaceable and cannot be deleted? Can't the novel continue without those lengthy foreshadowings? Even if it is a very important foreshadowing, if it is too lengthy, it will make people lose interest in reading. The above words are for reference only. If there are any inappropriate words, please forgive Xiaofengchechejun, okay!
Damn, our school doesn't allow papers to be submitted in advance. Every time during the second half of the exam, there are a bunch of people lying on the table.
Grandma's sister is not his old aunt, catching insects.