The Demon Lord Always Wants a Hug (Time Travel)

In order not to waste words and go directly to the beginning, the label on the copy says that the article is written with Tsuna as the protagonist, focusing on the plot flow, and the love line and other things depends on the author. But until now, it is almost 30,000 words, and I only see that the author has been describing the main line of daily teasing between the protagonist and the supporting role, and there is no plot. At the beginning of the first chapter of the wedge, it can be understood that the author wrote an ending in a parallel time and space. The three characters that leave people in suspense are well designed. In addition, although the author's writing is not very good, it is not bad, which makes people want to read on. Although the following plot is somewhat consistent with the anime, it can be regarded as cutting off the track. At first, when I saw the plot flow marked on the text and the part where the author said that he had read the manga after the anime, I thought that the author wanted to just restore the scenes of the anime. Unexpectedly, it started in a new time and space. It can be seen that your settings are good, new and interesting, but the connected ones are all daily warmth, which makes people feel a bit boring. When reading, I do not feel the passion in the text. The author does not describe many scenes, so it cannot fully create the feeling of scenes and pictures, and there is not much sense of substitution. If possible, it is recommended to add some scene descriptions. It does not require complicated vocabulary, just simple descriptions. It must be possible to create it with the author's writing style. Although the daily plot seems to have changed a bit, it is still very much the same as the anime. As the guardians join one by one, it may be because of the relationship between watching it. Most of them feel boring and want to rush through it. With the flow of daily life, I can also see a little bit of the drama. It is finally no longer the interaction between the protagonist and the supporting characters. Although there is a warm and sweet feeling flowing through it, it may be because of the reviewer himself, who prefers plot flow, so I don't feel much. Chapter 7 is finally here! ! Finally saw the plot I wanted to watch! The scene where Gang meets his true inner self, you can feel the plot bacteria coming to you at last! It's really comforting, but the scene writing is still not perfect enough. I think some emotions and on-site elements can be added to make it look cool and cool. After all, it's cool to watch the scene. Since the number of words written by the author is really too small, there is really nothing to comment on the plots of a few chapters. They are all necessary for daily plot tutoring. They are quite satisfactory and not out of the ordinary. It is recommended that the author add some new settings to enrich the entire content. Until now, there is still nothing eye-catching about Tsunayoshi's character setting. The early transitional chapters do not reveal the highlights of Tsunayoshi's character. I hope the author can enter the plot as soon as possible and stop the transition, which will turn the entire plot into a running account. As for the character settings and highlights of other supporting characters, they are the same as those of the protagonist. Because they are all transitional chapters, there is really no color to them. We still need to wait for the real plot to come before we can comment. The above is the review of the main text, followed by the copy and some suggestions for the author. The text font of the copy is too small, and the color of the food instructions is too bright, which makes it easy to ignore. I suggest the author to check an article called "Jinjiang Column Code", which There is a special setting for teaching coding. If you don't understand, you can also ask questions on the copywriting. Copywriting is the essence of an article. If the copywriting is not good, readers will leave after just one glance and stop lingering. It is recommended that the author pay more attention to the copywriting even though he needs to put more thought into the text. In fact, the introduction of the copywriting is not very good at highlighting what the author wants to write. It is recommended to add some plot in the main text. The emotions of the protagonist alone make the copywriting feel bland and uninteresting. PS: Because the above word count has exceeded the standard for long reviews, I would like to express my inner thoughts. I don't like to be cute in my reviews to get the word count. If the author likes to be cute, I'm really sorry (≧ω≦*)

I've seen it in LOF, but I didn't expect to see it on LJJ