Jiang Fengyuhuo Versus Choumian [Entertainment Circle]

Damn, you haven't updated anymore. I almost forgot the plot.

我也最爱你了大兔子

Here I come, the protagonist in this chapter is so awesome!

Tobirama-san is so miserable after being hit by two people with the highest combat power~

This is bs. After reading the first three chapters, it was really, uh... Painful to write. The imagination is good, but this kind of imagination description should not focus on the differences in x characteristics and stereotypes, otherwise it will give people a strong sense of ws. Let me just talk about what I find uncomfortable from a reader's perspective. 1. Don't have too much urine or vomit! The picture should be beautiful! Even if there is no beauty, there should be a clean feeling! ! ! You can mention the poor environment but never describe these disgusting things in detail! It can feel real but not disgusting! Let me give you the simplest example. For example, when describing a dirty alley, write about its dim light, sewage, and smell, but never expand on it to write about these things. Just give everyone a "this place is dirty" feeling. 2. I know, I know, that when you change gender, you will definitely notice the difference in the most obvious features, but the description of this kind of thing actually needs to be very restrained, and what you want to create is a sense of aesthetics. But I don't know how to create this feeling. I only know that your description is more like H-writing. And one thing that must be mentioned is, replace the adjective you use for your figure! What soft little feet, charming voice, smooth skin, replace it! Replace them all! This kind of adjective has a sense of déjà vu in H-style! You can read more Jinjiang romance novels and learn how the female authors describe their appearance and praise their bodies. 3. Don't stereotype! The part about the taxi driver you wrote is completely unacceptable! It's absolutely not okay to act coquettishly like that! This paragraph has an ironclad male author's sense of déjà vu. I also recommend reading gold-listed romance novels and learning their methods. 4 In fact, this idea can be taken in a deeper direction. When I saw your title and copywriting, I thought you would explore something, such as the common plight of women, discrimination, and even the plight of men. These are all areas that can be explored in depth. Regarding psychological changes, you set up the mutual influence of different gender psychology, which is good. But don't write too superficially. You can completely amplify women's delicate sensitivity, and then explore the causes of this sensitivity from a male perspective to reflect some realities. (This is my own feeling. I have a little idea as I comment. If the author can accept my suggestion, I will talk about it.) 5. A little suggestion, daily descriptions actually feel better if they are sand sculptures, and sand sculptures will neutralize the sense of wusiness very well. ↑Above.