Hands-on, any advice is welcome.
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Yao Si Yao Si, Yunyao Si.
Yunyao's mind can understand the thoughts of thousands of horses. Whether it is a famous horse in the world or a divine horse from ancient times, thousands of horses obey orders and gallop like thousands of armies.
Because of this, some people kneel down, some people worship her, some people chase her, some people love her, she is a legend in the world, and it is understandable.
It's a pity that she can't do it now.
It's not that it can't be achieved, it's that the time has not come yet and the truth is not yet known.
Yunyao's truth is the truth of this continent, so she can only slowly uncover her own truth, and also slowly uncover the secrets of this continent.
Fortunately, there are people who are willing to give up their country to be with her.
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1 1V1 at the end of this article, HE
2 Because of the overhaul, the male protagonist officially appeared later... In fact, I think this article has been written without a male protagonist hahaha.
3 Heat very slowly.
4 Thank you to my friends and little pink fans for the above constantly revised copy.
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Reader comments
Although I was a little confused at the end, it was really good
The description of the scenery in the opening chapter is very detailed, but the emotional foreshadowing is not enough, so that the sense of substitution is not strong. Moreover, the heroine's emotional ups and downs were not smooth enough. It was not until the heroine called out her parents that Koi discovered that the heroine was not a cold and powerful persona.
I suggest the author to develop more characters, practice more plots, and take a bow.
Falling red - sauce red, or magenta, not falling red
I feel so good after the modification, I almost cried while watching it, come on!
Although I was a little confused at the end, it was really good
The description of the scenery in the opening chapter is very detailed, but the emotional foreshadowing is not enough, so that the sense of substitution is not strong. Moreover, the heroine's emotional ups and downs were not smooth enough. It was not until the heroine called out her parents that Koi discovered that the heroine was not a cold and powerful persona. I suggest the author to develop more characters, practice more plots, and take a bow.
Falling red - sauce red, or magenta, not falling red
I feel so good after the modification, I almost cried while watching it, come on!