Someone rescued the young man in trouble, and finally he was reunited; someone rescued the prince who fell into the water, and finally turned into rose foam...
Also, don't guess the ending from the copy. The copy was written casually by me, and I haven't figured out the ending yet. Did you just see the rose bubble? It's also possible that it's Golden Wind and Jade Dew.
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The male protagonist ruthlessly created a big net to trap Lillian. This is not the mutual redemption of two flawed people, it is real and helpless.
Finished reading it in one sitting! ! !
There's no extra story?
It's good to read. It's a 16-year-old article. It's really good.
Did I not understand? Did she die because she was going to pick flowers?
大大，更新好不好?
Does Feilai have a Weibo account? Does anyone know?
Do two ginseng fruits mean having two children?
. . . Author. Maybe you can read the novels of Star Apothecary and Reborn Apothecary. Although the subject matter is different, you can learn from it. Nanzhu's psychology is described in a very low-grade way. The heroine's character left me speechless. You said if she became a little colder or less lively or something - ugh. The writing is not very good. Come on.
Ahhh, who could it be, the Lightning Angel? Uriel was born relatively early...
This chapter is relatively compact and has many doubts. Meow meow, please forgive me for being too small-minded and unable to guess anything...
I still like Uriel very much. Although he has done many things wrong, he has been working hard.
Xinxing Literary Society Feng Juan Xilian
[Xinxing Literary Society] Commentator: Fengjuan Xilian
In the second grade of junior high school, this was the most youthful time. At that time, I had a soft spot for Qiong Yao and Xi Juan. Just like the heroine in the novel, I had a secret love and fantasy, but I didn't dare to take action. At the age of 23, I welcomed my first love, but the heroine was reborn. Sometimes I also wonder, will I become better and more fulfilled if I go back to my student days? Hehe! End of emotion!
In fact, adolescence is a very youthful time period, and the author has shown the youthfulness and ignorance of this period! Some of the plots are what happened to us in junior high school. Seeing these, west Lian'er's mouth couldn't help but turn up. The same youth, different people, have similar experiences, and there is a certain sense of identity for those who are nostalgic. The shots of the article are all around the protagonist, with radiation, but will not deviate from the protagonist. This is worth learning from west Lian'er.
About rebirth
Girls, young girls, and women have completely different perceptions in their thoughts. The thoughts and psychology of women who have experienced human affairs are also different from those who have not. After reading the update, the overall feeling of the heroine is that of a fifteen-year-old girl, without bringing back the experience she had before her rebirth. A twenty-three-year-old soul should be more mature, better at dealing with things, and more tolerant than a teenage boy or girl. The protagonist does not have these specific post-rebirth traits.
If the author insists on rebirth of the protagonist, then he must pay attention to a few points:
1. Psychological differences. The psychological generation gap between the protagonist's 23-year-old psychological age and the fourteen-year-old and fifteen-year-old boys and girls. This is a psychological gap of nearly ten years, and there must be a generation gap in many things.
2. Differences in temperament. Adults have traces of time deposited on their bodies. Even if their appearance remains the same, their temperament must have changed. At least it won't be the youthful sunshine of boys and girls.
3. Differences in doing things. The most concrete manifestation of adults being more mature than teenagers is their tact and tact in doing things. This is the growth that time and experience give to people.
If the author's setting must be the rebirth of an adult, the author's character setting must be re-done. Xilian does not recommend this, because it will inevitably lead to overthrow and rewrite. Then Xilian gave a patch method, using the 23-year-old Tiantian as a golden finger hidden in the body of the 15-year-old Tiantian, to help Tiantian when he was confused and scared. In this way, the protagonist still has the characteristics of a 15-year-old and has abilities higher than ordinary people. In this way, even those relatively immature actions in the article can find support.
About the plot
The function of plot is to promote the development of the plot and to highlight the character of the characters. So what is the author's plot layout? Looking at the first ten chapters, the plot is too scattered, and some things are crammed in. From the next twenty chapters, everything will be added regardless of whether it has anything to do with the main plot. The overall feeling is that it is chaotic, and there is no strong plot that can promote the development of the plot, that is, there is no foreshadowing and lack of (climax). The most important thing is that the protagonist is not well highlighted. For example, when facing the handsome guy Wu, he likes her; when comparing, facing the ancient beauty who is embarrassed and framed; for example, when dealing with classmate Xue; for example, when she is about to lose Xu Yan's friendship. These can well highlight the difference between the protagonist and his peers, but the author only makes the protagonist more emotional about junior high school life and worried about the trivial matters of life. And how many of these plots play a role in promoting the plot? The author must learn to write in detail, and understand what must be highlighted and what must be mentioned in one stroke!
About the main line
What is the main thread of this article? It was Shen Rutian who wanted to have his first love with the boy he had a crush on. So before the two fell in love, all the storylines revolved around this. So there must be a branch line problem. Is there a branch line in this article? Yes, there are many, but they have little connection with the main plot. It should be said that there is a connection in the author's mind, but it cannot be seen in the writing. Branch one, the emotional disorder of Handsome Wu. This is the first obstacle between Squad Leader Gu and Shen Rutian. This is clearly pointed out in the article. This subplot did not play a catalytic role. Including the branch line Gu Yan's dilemma, there is no relationship with the main line. Xilian guessed that Gu Yan's embarrassment was because of unwillingness, because of the close relationship between Shen and Gu, or because of unwillingness and jealousy over Shen becoming more outstanding. The author did not explicitly point out or imply this. Branch line Xu Yan, she is the person closest to the protagonist and an important functional figure, so she solves the first obstacle for the protagonist, handsome guy Wu. The betrayal of friendship is too overwhelming. This does not mean that you should not write about friendship, but it means that friendship is interspersed throughout the article, which is far more profound than listing it separately. The protagonist discovers that the butterfly effect is triggered after rebirth. This is the most powerful supporting point for conflicts in the entire article. I hope the author will make good use of it.
Speaking of the butterfly effect, the author needs to rewrite your introduction. You should add the butterfly effect to let readers look forward to a life that is different from the previous life.
Finally, the author, don't forget to reply and receive comments!
Xinxing Literary Society Feng Juan Xilian
I didn't expect it to be with Xiao Xie... Well done Lillian
I don't know what to say after reading this
Warmth is an unusual person in their family, but it is everyone's favorite. I really like that arrogant sister! Update soon. Sit back and wait
Yunxiu did a great job
It's really satisfying
Talk about Zhonggu's friends
Can you barely count as one?
Who else?
I worked from freshman year to graduation
I found that the author's recent update time is a bit long
Sky! I'm done! I think the scenes written by the author are so beautiful and high-spirited!
我的天！从头哭到尾！最后女主岂不是变成僵尸了，男主这占有欲太强太强
Not bad, come on, author~
Why only show part of the prototype? ? ?
? ? Why haven't I seen the update after seven o'clock? Woohoo.
The old emperor is so cunning. He started to talk about the candidate for the crown prince but then stopped talking about it. Is he trying to make another conspiracy? Xiaoqing has been whitewashing him. She doesn't like him no matter how affectionate they are. She shows no affection at all.
The male protagonist ruthlessly created a big net to trap Lillian. This is not the mutual redemption of two flawed people, it is real and helpless.
Finished reading it in one sitting! ! !
There's no extra story?
It's good to read. It's a 16-year-old article. It's really good.
Did I not understand? Did she die because she was going to pick flowers?
大大，更新好不好?
Does Feilai have a Weibo account? Does anyone know?
Do two ginseng fruits mean having two children?
. . . Author. Maybe you can read the novels of Star Apothecary and Reborn Apothecary. Although the subject matter is different, you can learn from it. Nanzhu's psychology is described in a very low-grade way. The heroine's character left me speechless. You said if she became a little colder or less lively or something - ugh. The writing is not very good. Come on.
Ahhh, who could it be, the Lightning Angel? Uriel was born relatively early... This chapter is relatively compact and has many doubts. Meow meow, please forgive me for being too small-minded and unable to guess anything... I still like Uriel very much. Although he has done many things wrong, he has been working hard.
Xinxing Literary Society Feng Juan Xilian [Xinxing Literary Society] Commentator: Fengjuan Xilian In the second grade of junior high school, this was the most youthful time. At that time, I had a soft spot for Qiong Yao and Xi Juan. Just like the heroine in the novel, I had a secret love and fantasy, but I didn't dare to take action. At the age of 23, I welcomed my first love, but the heroine was reborn. Sometimes I also wonder, will I become better and more fulfilled if I go back to my student days? Hehe! End of emotion! In fact, adolescence is a very youthful time period, and the author has shown the youthfulness and ignorance of this period! Some of the plots are what happened to us in junior high school. Seeing these, west Lian'er's mouth couldn't help but turn up. The same youth, different people, have similar experiences, and there is a certain sense of identity for those who are nostalgic. The shots of the article are all around the protagonist, with radiation, but will not deviate from the protagonist. This is worth learning from west Lian'er. About rebirth Girls, young girls, and women have completely different perceptions in their thoughts. The thoughts and psychology of women who have experienced human affairs are also different from those who have not. After reading the update, the overall feeling of the heroine is that of a fifteen-year-old girl, without bringing back the experience she had before her rebirth. A twenty-three-year-old soul should be more mature, better at dealing with things, and more tolerant than a teenage boy or girl. The protagonist does not have these specific post-rebirth traits. If the author insists on rebirth of the protagonist, then he must pay attention to a few points: 1. Psychological differences. The psychological generation gap between the protagonist's 23-year-old psychological age and the fourteen-year-old and fifteen-year-old boys and girls. This is a psychological gap of nearly ten years, and there must be a generation gap in many things. 2. Differences in temperament. Adults have traces of time deposited on their bodies. Even if their appearance remains the same, their temperament must have changed. At least it won't be the youthful sunshine of boys and girls. 3. Differences in doing things. The most concrete manifestation of adults being more mature than teenagers is their tact and tact in doing things. This is the growth that time and experience give to people. If the author's setting must be the rebirth of an adult, the author's character setting must be re-done. Xilian does not recommend this, because it will inevitably lead to overthrow and rewrite. Then Xilian gave a patch method, using the 23-year-old Tiantian as a golden finger hidden in the body of the 15-year-old Tiantian, to help Tiantian when he was confused and scared. In this way, the protagonist still has the characteristics of a 15-year-old and has abilities higher than ordinary people. In this way, even those relatively immature actions in the article can find support. About the plot The function of plot is to promote the development of the plot and to highlight the character of the characters. So what is the author's plot layout? Looking at the first ten chapters, the plot is too scattered, and some things are crammed in. From the next twenty chapters, everything will be added regardless of whether it has anything to do with the main plot. The overall feeling is that it is chaotic, and there is no strong plot that can promote the development of the plot, that is, there is no foreshadowing and lack of (climax). The most important thing is that the protagonist is not well highlighted. For example, when facing the handsome guy Wu, he likes her; when comparing, facing the ancient beauty who is embarrassed and framed; for example, when dealing with classmate Xue; for example, when she is about to lose Xu Yan's friendship. These can well highlight the difference between the protagonist and his peers, but the author only makes the protagonist more emotional about junior high school life and worried about the trivial matters of life. And how many of these plots play a role in promoting the plot? The author must learn to write in detail, and understand what must be highlighted and what must be mentioned in one stroke! About the main line What is the main thread of this article? It was Shen Rutian who wanted to have his first love with the boy he had a crush on. So before the two fell in love, all the storylines revolved around this. So there must be a branch line problem. Is there a branch line in this article? Yes, there are many, but they have little connection with the main plot. It should be said that there is a connection in the author's mind, but it cannot be seen in the writing. Branch one, the emotional disorder of Handsome Wu. This is the first obstacle between Squad Leader Gu and Shen Rutian. This is clearly pointed out in the article. This subplot did not play a catalytic role. Including the branch line Gu Yan's dilemma, there is no relationship with the main line. Xilian guessed that Gu Yan's embarrassment was because of unwillingness, because of the close relationship between Shen and Gu, or because of unwillingness and jealousy over Shen becoming more outstanding. The author did not explicitly point out or imply this. Branch line Xu Yan, she is the person closest to the protagonist and an important functional figure, so she solves the first obstacle for the protagonist, handsome guy Wu. The betrayal of friendship is too overwhelming. This does not mean that you should not write about friendship, but it means that friendship is interspersed throughout the article, which is far more profound than listing it separately. The protagonist discovers that the butterfly effect is triggered after rebirth. This is the most powerful supporting point for conflicts in the entire article. I hope the author will make good use of it. Speaking of the butterfly effect, the author needs to rewrite your introduction. You should add the butterfly effect to let readers look forward to a life that is different from the previous life. Finally, the author, don't forget to reply and receive comments! Xinxing Literary Society Feng Juan Xilian
I didn't expect it to be with Xiao Xie... Well done Lillian
I don't know what to say after reading this
Warmth is an unusual person in their family, but it is everyone's favorite. I really like that arrogant sister! Update soon. Sit back and wait
Yunxiu did a great job It's really satisfying Talk about Zhonggu's friends Can you barely count as one? Who else?
I worked from freshman year to graduation
I found that the author's recent update time is a bit long
Sky! I'm done! I think the scenes written by the author are so beautiful and high-spirited!
我的天！从头哭到尾！最后女主岂不是变成僵尸了，男主这占有欲太强太强
Not bad, come on, author~
Why only show part of the prototype? ? ?
? ? Why haven't I seen the update after seven o'clock? Woohoo.
The old emperor is so cunning. He started to talk about the candidate for the crown prince but then stopped talking about it. Is he trying to make another conspiracy? Xiaoqing has been whitewashing him. She doesn't like him no matter how affectionate they are. She shows no affection at all.