That means it's already written very well! When reviewing the article, I really saw a lot of emm (light cigarette. Jpg). The writing style is a bit immature. It will definitely be better after writing more. However, as a reader, I feel that there are two parts of this article that are not handled well. One is the description of sea water. Although I know it is intended to metaphor some astringent things, it looks really embarrassing orz. It would be better to polish this description. The second one is the parent-teacher meeting, which feels like a forced intelligence reduction, because Since Mr. Jiang has come to hold a parent-teacher meeting in person to prove that Mr. Jiang loves his son, how could someone who is not a more important person come to hold a parent-teacher meeting for Mr. Jiang's own son? Therefore, this conflict seems to be really intellectually depressing. I feel that as a cookie, this plot is dispensable. If it is to reasonably let Zaizai be kidnapped, it is better to just write some common jokes, such as being late to pick up the child, or since the kidnapper is an insider of the school, it can be said that he went out from somewhere else.
These are some of my tips! Not very mature, just speaking from a personal perspective! I hope you don't mind!
俺爱甜美的文……最近可憋屈了，每次睡前看文都遇上大雷，都酥了，这文好治愈，泪流满面o>_
额……没想到天云也生了个....
Even though it's been a long time since I wrote it, I still cried when I read it again.
Good-looking(??ω??)??
Yue Lao did it on purpose. It turned out that he was just putting aside his acting skills.
Come on, I like this idea
? ? ? Is this the end? ? ? ... Have Liu found her manager from her previous life? Did she fix it? A little bit unfinished
That means it's already written very well! When reviewing the article, I really saw a lot of emm (light cigarette. Jpg). The writing style is a bit immature. It will definitely be better after writing more. However, as a reader, I feel that there are two parts of this article that are not handled well. One is the description of sea water. Although I know it is intended to metaphor some astringent things, it looks really embarrassing orz. It would be better to polish this description. The second one is the parent-teacher meeting, which feels like a forced intelligence reduction, because Since Mr. Jiang has come to hold a parent-teacher meeting in person to prove that Mr. Jiang loves his son, how could someone who is not a more important person come to hold a parent-teacher meeting for Mr. Jiang's own son? Therefore, this conflict seems to be really intellectually depressing. I feel that as a cookie, this plot is dispensable. If it is to reasonably let Zaizai be kidnapped, it is better to just write some common jokes, such as being late to pick up the child, or since the kidnapper is an insider of the school, it can be said that he went out from somewhere else. These are some of my tips! Not very mature, just speaking from a personal perspective! I hope you don't mind!
俺爱甜美的文……最近可憋屈了，每次睡前看文都遇上大雷，都酥了，这文好治愈，泪流满面o>_
额……没想到天云也生了个....
Even though it's been a long time since I wrote it, I still cried when I read it again.
Good-looking(??ω??)??
Yue Lao did it on purpose. It turned out that he was just putting aside his acting skills.
Come on, I like this idea
? ? ? Is this the end? ? ? ... Have Liu found her manager from her previous life? Did she fix it? A little bit unfinished
想看卡西粑粑网恋……