Qu Qi Leng unexpectedly saw her take back her hand and patted herself instead. The corners of her mouth couldn't help but raise, she took back her hand and looked at her. "Is it worth considering, girl?" This was the first time Liu Yiyi had seen him smile since last night. When you laugh, your majesty disappears. It is the spring breeze sweeping through the peach forest, and thousands of flowers are in full bloom. It's fatal, it's fatal! Liu Yiyi breathed a sigh of relief for herself, and finally raised a finger, pursed her lips and smiled: "Don't be too proud!" After saying that, Liu Yiyi turned around and ran away.
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Reader comments
Dear author, now that I read your article, I feel more and more something is wrong.
The feeling of separation is getting stronger and stronger, so strong that I can't read the article.
Later, I thought about it for a long time and finally figured it out
It seems that your writing setting is in conflict with your writing style.
You see, the protagonist is a domineering president in a shopping mall. Although he is a domineering president in a bloody novel, you have also described before that he has a big career and has to deal with the affairs of the shopping mall.
But your writing style is that of a fresh and sweet article.
Then there is a conflict. The protagonist has been tempered in the shopping mall for ten years. It is not a normal shopping mall, but a bloody shopping mall in bloody novels. Behavioral habits will definitely change.
Strangers may not understand it very well, but familiar people will know at a glance that something is definitely wrong.
In your novel, the description of the protagonist after returning to his own world is too much like a young boy. Or too weak.
It's not a weakness in strength, it's a weakness in character. It's as if nothing has changed about him in these ten years, but your assumption is that he has. There is a sense of conflict and fragmentation.
A wealthy CEO who has been tempered by extreme shopping malls for ten years would be so flirted with by a boy younger than him (mental age). . . Shy?
Especially in this filming and romance drama, the relationship progressed very quickly.
If he was just an ordinary sweet story, then this progress would actually be normal, but the story happened to last ten years.
It was a painful ten years of having to act like others and not being able to be yourself happily, having to deal with business in the mall, going through those bloody things, and in the end even being sick and lying in bed and dying directly. I think people would be numb then.
It has a bit of a sense of redemption, but there is no redemption in the article. It seems that the protagonist has recovered on his own. But I don't look like I've recovered, it's more like I haven't had the normal behavior pattern of this "decade" (the feeling of youth in the twenties, playing around and having fun? A young boy?)
Just, very fragmented.
Because I am more concerned about the setting of the article, but your writing style is really very small and fresh, and it is separated from this setting.
I hope you will read my comments carefully. I actually did not give detailed examples of the details in the article. I just felt that at the end of this chapter, the protagonist seemed to like each other.
Because I am asked to talk about the details of the article, but I can't remember it. I have read a lot of articles, and if I really want to grasp the details, I have to read the previous chapters again, and this is not necessary.
It's just that what I'm talking about now is that when I read this book, the impression it gave me was that it seemed to be disconnected and very abrupt.
Setting aside the setting, this book is very normal, just a cookie, sweet.
But once this setting of time travel was inserted, it was abrupt, too abrupt.
In the end, I discussed it rationally and did not mean to criticize. I just made a suggestion. (Wearing a vest, if you scold me, you are sick.)
Great job writing the article! I wish your writing will get better and better [Comparison of Hearts]
Looks good! Come on!
It's so beautiful. Do you want more updates? QAQ
Yiyi said, my boss is too difficult
Is Miss Yiyi going to make clothes for Mr. Qu?
Ah ah ah, are you going to have a little pink soon?
Dear author, now that I read your article, I feel more and more something is wrong. The feeling of separation is getting stronger and stronger, so strong that I can't read the article. Later, I thought about it for a long time and finally figured it out It seems that your writing setting is in conflict with your writing style. You see, the protagonist is a domineering president in a shopping mall. Although he is a domineering president in a bloody novel, you have also described before that he has a big career and has to deal with the affairs of the shopping mall. But your writing style is that of a fresh and sweet article. Then there is a conflict. The protagonist has been tempered in the shopping mall for ten years. It is not a normal shopping mall, but a bloody shopping mall in bloody novels. Behavioral habits will definitely change. Strangers may not understand it very well, but familiar people will know at a glance that something is definitely wrong. In your novel, the description of the protagonist after returning to his own world is too much like a young boy. Or too weak. It's not a weakness in strength, it's a weakness in character. It's as if nothing has changed about him in these ten years, but your assumption is that he has. There is a sense of conflict and fragmentation. A wealthy CEO who has been tempered by extreme shopping malls for ten years would be so flirted with by a boy younger than him (mental age). . . Shy? Especially in this filming and romance drama, the relationship progressed very quickly. If he was just an ordinary sweet story, then this progress would actually be normal, but the story happened to last ten years. It was a painful ten years of having to act like others and not being able to be yourself happily, having to deal with business in the mall, going through those bloody things, and in the end even being sick and lying in bed and dying directly. I think people would be numb then. It has a bit of a sense of redemption, but there is no redemption in the article. It seems that the protagonist has recovered on his own. But I don't look like I've recovered, it's more like I haven't had the normal behavior pattern of this "decade" (the feeling of youth in the twenties, playing around and having fun? A young boy?) Just, very fragmented. Because I am more concerned about the setting of the article, but your writing style is really very small and fresh, and it is separated from this setting. I hope you will read my comments carefully. I actually did not give detailed examples of the details in the article. I just felt that at the end of this chapter, the protagonist seemed to like each other. Because I am asked to talk about the details of the article, but I can't remember it. I have read a lot of articles, and if I really want to grasp the details, I have to read the previous chapters again, and this is not necessary. It's just that what I'm talking about now is that when I read this book, the impression it gave me was that it seemed to be disconnected and very abrupt. Setting aside the setting, this book is very normal, just a cookie, sweet. But once this setting of time travel was inserted, it was abrupt, too abrupt. In the end, I discussed it rationally and did not mean to criticize. I just made a suggestion. (Wearing a vest, if you scold me, you are sick.) Great job writing the article! I wish your writing will get better and better [Comparison of Hearts]
Looks good! Come on!
It's so beautiful. Do you want more updates? QAQ
Yiyi said, my boss is too difficult
Is Miss Yiyi going to make clothes for Mr. Qu?
Ah ah ah, are you going to have a little pink soon?