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Is this a trap?[{(>_
I participated in jj's review and read the first chapter, so I searched it and read it. The first chapter is amazing, a bit suspenseful and affectionate. Who knew the ending would be so bloody! What a waste of a good start!
The Thunder in the article should be the Thunder that was crystallized again at the last point in 13-2. If this is my first time writing, it is already very good. If nothing else, Lei Lei's character and thoughts are quite close to the original work, and the details are handled well. There is only one thing. The feeling of Lei Lei here is a little different. In 13-2, even if I can't stay with my sister, I will not be confused and lose the reason to fight again. The stronger, wiser and more beautiful Ikrel, her consciousness seems to have retreated further. Of course, this is just my feeling. It may be that what you express is not what I think but that there is something to be strengthened in your writing technique. You wrote about Lei Lei's imperceptible tenderness from the side and details, and you did a good job of it. It is precisely because Lei Lei has a gentle heart that cannot be lost to anyone that she becomes stronger. As strong as she is, there will be times when she is confused. Her sister, who has become increasingly estranged due to family, work, etc., Has always been a soldier's faith and a member of Cocoon. When she learned of Falsi's conspiracy, she finally ended the battle and could return to her relatives and classmates, but she was once again involved in a new incident. When the future that cannot protect everyone can only be crystallized again, at various times, as a sister, as a soldier, as a comrade, and as the Valkyrie, Thunder has been fighting for the justice or consciousness in her heart. It took me a long time to play from 13 to 13-2, and the main plot and branch plots were all gone. I have to say that in the second part, even if the protagonist is Sera, the production team gave enough role for Lei Lei. I will make a random comment here. The scene when Mao Lei Lei turns into a Valkyrie made me twitch at the corner of my eyes. The intrusion is complete. However, the last thing written in 13-2 is to be continue. I only hope that the ending of BE can be changed in the later DLC that will be released this year (probably) (Don't let your mother be tragic again, my heart will be broken when playing the 13 series, your sister! TAT) ps: Regarding the topic of rose petals, Fan also asked Lei Lei in Dissidia 2, laugh.
Is this a trap?[{(>_
I participated in jj's review and read the first chapter, so I searched it and read it. The first chapter is amazing, a bit suspenseful and affectionate. Who knew the ending would be so bloody! What a waste of a good start!
The Thunder in the article should be the Thunder that was crystallized again at the last point in 13-2. If this is my first time writing, it is already very good. If nothing else, Lei Lei's character and thoughts are quite close to the original work, and the details are handled well. There is only one thing. The feeling of Lei Lei here is a little different. In 13-2, even if I can't stay with my sister, I will not be confused and lose the reason to fight again. The stronger, wiser and more beautiful Ikrel, her consciousness seems to have retreated further. Of course, this is just my feeling. It may be that what you express is not what I think but that there is something to be strengthened in your writing technique. You wrote about Lei Lei's imperceptible tenderness from the side and details, and you did a good job of it. It is precisely because Lei Lei has a gentle heart that cannot be lost to anyone that she becomes stronger. As strong as she is, there will be times when she is confused. Her sister, who has become increasingly estranged due to family, work, etc., Has always been a soldier's faith and a member of Cocoon. When she learned of Falsi's conspiracy, she finally ended the battle and could return to her relatives and classmates, but she was once again involved in a new incident. When the future that cannot protect everyone can only be crystallized again, at various times, as a sister, as a soldier, as a comrade, and as the Valkyrie, Thunder has been fighting for the justice or consciousness in her heart. It took me a long time to play from 13 to 13-2, and the main plot and branch plots were all gone. I have to say that in the second part, even if the protagonist is Sera, the production team gave enough role for Lei Lei. I will make a random comment here. The scene when Mao Lei Lei turns into a Valkyrie made me twitch at the corner of my eyes. The intrusion is complete. However, the last thing written in 13-2 is to be continue. I only hope that the ending of BE can be changed in the later DLC that will be released this year (probably) (Don't let your mother be tragic again, my heart will be broken when playing the 13 series, your sister! TAT) ps: Regarding the topic of rose petals, Fan also asked Lei Lei in Dissidia 2, laugh.