The three views of this article have completely collapsed, and normal people are basically just passers-by.
Yanderes, tremors, tremors, and control freaks appear every day. Children with fragile hearts, please leave quickly.
How terrifying is the love world full of negative energy? ! Let's love each other until death.
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Let me tell you a joke. When a "good old man" is at home, he becomes incompetent and gets angry, yelling at his daughter and scolding his wife. If you say that he is a domestic violence man, it is more believable.
The college entrance examination is tomorrow. I wish all the seniors and readers who are taking the college entrance examination, good luck in the college entrance examination [red heart] (The next one will be either today or tomorrow. Since there are many references and points to be discussed, it will be slower)
The teacher's writing is really good, it has the feeling of a secret love, the emotion is very delicate [shy]
Such a lively writing style, I like it!
Please update please update, it looks good
I really like Ji Donghe! ! ! Feeling distressed!
First of all, I have read the first ten chapters and the last five chapters very carefully, but have not read the other chapters. The reason why I commented before I finished reading is because I got obsessive-compulsive disorder after seeing so many bugs...
I have a habit of reading articles. Generally, if the first few chapters do not satisfy me, I will read the ending first. If the ending is good, I will go back and read the middle content. However, the ending of the third young master is also full of bugs... Although the plot is very sad, I feel that if the third young master can make progress, I will not give him a life in vain, so I will give him a full banquet and hope that the third young master will accept it.
Let's start catching bugs: let's talk about San Shao's article [Structure]: It starts with Wen Hao getting into a car accident, and then suddenly it turns to Wen Hao's current life, a long series of several chapters, when I thought Xiao Shou was going to have an emotional entanglement with Hui Te, many, many chapters later, the real Xiao Gong appeared... As a reader, let me say... It flashed.
I have told others about turning too fast before. If the article is compared to a person, turning is likened to a person turning his head. Others turn their head 90 degrees, and your little person turned 180 degrees, so... It flashed... We watched... And felt his neck hurt... Throughout the article, many places where I saw the turning point were too large and abrupt. I hope that next time San Shao writes an article, he will pay attention to the transition.
Regarding the explanation of the characters, I felt that the explanation of the third young master was very unclear, which made me unable to help but complain again and again while reading. Huite didn't understand what was going on, but the real Xiaogong came, and the real Xiaogong started to explain, but Huite disappeared. In the end, the real Xiaogong finally got married to someone else, and Huite jumped out - saying, great! I have another chance... I said that even if I am a passerby, I still have dignity. The third young master came and left Hui Te as soon as he was called. Did he consider Hui Te's feelings? Is it really okay for a mother to be so partial? TAT also has some minor supporting characters, and I always feel like they suddenly appear and suddenly disappear, giving it a whack-a-mole feel, and it looks a bit messy.
The last point about the structure is that San Shao's writing is really too compact. It made me anxious and tired, and I couldn't keep up with my thoughts. I hadn't finished digesting the previous part, but a character suddenly popped up at the back. It's like crossing the road. Normally, cars would drive past me at a moderate speed, so I walked over easily. But suddenly when I was crossing the road, all the cars passed by me at the speed of light, one after another. So, I was furious... I said that if the rhythm is slower, the characters are explained more clearly, and the connection is better, the writing will make greater progress.
Then there is [Plot]: There are too many things that I really feel are unreasonable: How can a person with a poor memory get a degree in two years? There is a person around me who is just like the character in your novel. Maybe he can't remember what happened a few days ago, so he used to study very well and work very hard, but now he still studies hard, but fails many subjects, almost all subjects. This is how people with poor memory should behave. The character setting of San Shao is incorrect.
Then there was the real attack, and the knife almost hit the heart, which would have led to an emergency room visit! He wouldn't be able to leave the hospital even in a month, let alone half a month! Even if he figured it out, he couldn't bear the severe pain! Completely unreasonable plot.
In addition, it is still a normal attack. Is he from the criminal investigation department or some other department? Why is a police officer watching a driver's license test one moment and arresting gangsters the next? I don't understand the public security system, but I think it's unreasonable.
And then there is the genuine Xiaogong. He knows better than anyone else whether the child is his or her. Doesn't he know whether he has had sex with others or not? Xiao Gong's parents are not fools, so don't they know how to listen to their children's explanations? Parents care about their children. If Xiao Gong insists that the child is really not his, will Xiao Gong's parents have the heart to let their own son become a cuckold? The whole process of the quarrel made people feel that Xiao Gong was incompetent, weak, and unreasonable in speaking, and it also made people feel that it was not very reasonable.
Then came the passerby CP, the pair where one cheated and the other jumped into the river. It just passed without explaining everything, which made me feel very powerless! Moreover, kneeling down frequently means that such a person is very unmanly.
Then he said [Description]: The description of the third young master was not very accurate, and it was very hasty. Maybe it was because of laziness? Many things were vaguely explained without being explained clearly. Because there are too many examples, I will not give examples one by one. I want to say that when reading novels, readers must want to have a picture in their mind to know what the author wants to show them. But when I read San Shao's article, I said that what I was watching was a clip of the highlights - not a single complete frame. = =
Of course, San Shao's article is not full of shortcomings and advantages, but since it is a full-scale banquet, the advantages are not listed here. I am only responsible for catching bugs. Readers can see what San Shao writes well~ It means that San Shao doesn't cheat, which is also worthy of praise! If there are any mistakes in the writing, I would like to apologize to Haihan. I hope that San Shao's writing will become more and more exciting.
——Suzuki Yours sincerely
Aren't you crying = =
Monday is so embarrassing, hahaha! ! !
I also want to raise a dog... Teddy~~~~
I want to write a long review and cheat on points […]. But there have been a lot of things going on recently = = I was tricked to death by the activities in Jinjiang. . .
Ahhh, college is so troublesome.
Ahhhhh, is it gone? What happened to Cheng Xuyi? Then, the feeling of interweaving two time and space in the work is great. Anyway, the summary is, the author please update it as soon as possible.
I will go back and watch it again hahaha [star eyes] [star eyes] [star eyes] [shy] [shy] [shy]
For Yanyan, the past is past, the most important thing is to live in the present.
(*^.^*) Kiss~
Wow, the author has such a great idea, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, hehe
Let me tell you a joke. When a "good old man" is at home, he becomes incompetent and gets angry, yelling at his daughter and scolding his wife. If you say that he is a domestic violence man, it is more believable.
The college entrance examination is tomorrow. I wish all the seniors and readers who are taking the college entrance examination, good luck in the college entrance examination [red heart] (The next one will be either today or tomorrow. Since there are many references and points to be discussed, it will be slower)
The teacher's writing is really good, it has the feeling of a secret love, the emotion is very delicate [shy]
Such a lively writing style, I like it!
Please update please update, it looks good
I really like Ji Donghe! ! ! Feeling distressed!
First of all, I have read the first ten chapters and the last five chapters very carefully, but have not read the other chapters. The reason why I commented before I finished reading is because I got obsessive-compulsive disorder after seeing so many bugs... I have a habit of reading articles. Generally, if the first few chapters do not satisfy me, I will read the ending first. If the ending is good, I will go back and read the middle content. However, the ending of the third young master is also full of bugs... Although the plot is very sad, I feel that if the third young master can make progress, I will not give him a life in vain, so I will give him a full banquet and hope that the third young master will accept it. Let's start catching bugs: let's talk about San Shao's article [Structure]: It starts with Wen Hao getting into a car accident, and then suddenly it turns to Wen Hao's current life, a long series of several chapters, when I thought Xiao Shou was going to have an emotional entanglement with Hui Te, many, many chapters later, the real Xiao Gong appeared... As a reader, let me say... It flashed. I have told others about turning too fast before. If the article is compared to a person, turning is likened to a person turning his head. Others turn their head 90 degrees, and your little person turned 180 degrees, so... It flashed... We watched... And felt his neck hurt... Throughout the article, many places where I saw the turning point were too large and abrupt. I hope that next time San Shao writes an article, he will pay attention to the transition. Regarding the explanation of the characters, I felt that the explanation of the third young master was very unclear, which made me unable to help but complain again and again while reading. Huite didn't understand what was going on, but the real Xiaogong came, and the real Xiaogong started to explain, but Huite disappeared. In the end, the real Xiaogong finally got married to someone else, and Huite jumped out - saying, great! I have another chance... I said that even if I am a passerby, I still have dignity. The third young master came and left Hui Te as soon as he was called. Did he consider Hui Te's feelings? Is it really okay for a mother to be so partial? TAT also has some minor supporting characters, and I always feel like they suddenly appear and suddenly disappear, giving it a whack-a-mole feel, and it looks a bit messy. The last point about the structure is that San Shao's writing is really too compact. It made me anxious and tired, and I couldn't keep up with my thoughts. I hadn't finished digesting the previous part, but a character suddenly popped up at the back. It's like crossing the road. Normally, cars would drive past me at a moderate speed, so I walked over easily. But suddenly when I was crossing the road, all the cars passed by me at the speed of light, one after another. So, I was furious... I said that if the rhythm is slower, the characters are explained more clearly, and the connection is better, the writing will make greater progress. Then there is [Plot]: There are too many things that I really feel are unreasonable: How can a person with a poor memory get a degree in two years? There is a person around me who is just like the character in your novel. Maybe he can't remember what happened a few days ago, so he used to study very well and work very hard, but now he still studies hard, but fails many subjects, almost all subjects. This is how people with poor memory should behave. The character setting of San Shao is incorrect. Then there was the real attack, and the knife almost hit the heart, which would have led to an emergency room visit! He wouldn't be able to leave the hospital even in a month, let alone half a month! Even if he figured it out, he couldn't bear the severe pain! Completely unreasonable plot. In addition, it is still a normal attack. Is he from the criminal investigation department or some other department? Why is a police officer watching a driver's license test one moment and arresting gangsters the next? I don't understand the public security system, but I think it's unreasonable. And then there is the genuine Xiaogong. He knows better than anyone else whether the child is his or her. Doesn't he know whether he has had sex with others or not? Xiao Gong's parents are not fools, so don't they know how to listen to their children's explanations? Parents care about their children. If Xiao Gong insists that the child is really not his, will Xiao Gong's parents have the heart to let their own son become a cuckold? The whole process of the quarrel made people feel that Xiao Gong was incompetent, weak, and unreasonable in speaking, and it also made people feel that it was not very reasonable. Then came the passerby CP, the pair where one cheated and the other jumped into the river. It just passed without explaining everything, which made me feel very powerless! Moreover, kneeling down frequently means that such a person is very unmanly. Then he said [Description]: The description of the third young master was not very accurate, and it was very hasty. Maybe it was because of laziness? Many things were vaguely explained without being explained clearly. Because there are too many examples, I will not give examples one by one. I want to say that when reading novels, readers must want to have a picture in their mind to know what the author wants to show them. But when I read San Shao's article, I said that what I was watching was a clip of the highlights - not a single complete frame. = = Of course, San Shao's article is not full of shortcomings and advantages, but since it is a full-scale banquet, the advantages are not listed here. I am only responsible for catching bugs. Readers can see what San Shao writes well~ It means that San Shao doesn't cheat, which is also worthy of praise! If there are any mistakes in the writing, I would like to apologize to Haihan. I hope that San Shao's writing will become more and more exciting. ——Suzuki Yours sincerely
Aren't you crying = = Monday is so embarrassing, hahaha! ! ! I also want to raise a dog... Teddy~~~~ I want to write a long review and cheat on points […]. But there have been a lot of things going on recently = = I was tricked to death by the activities in Jinjiang. . . Ahhh, college is so troublesome.
Ahhhhh, is it gone? What happened to Cheng Xuyi? Then, the feeling of interweaving two time and space in the work is great. Anyway, the summary is, the author please update it as soon as possible.
I will go back and watch it again hahaha [star eyes] [star eyes] [star eyes] [shy] [shy] [shy]
For Yanyan, the past is past, the most important thing is to live in the present.
(*^.^*) Kiss~
Wow, the author has such a great idea, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, hehe
Wow, thank you madam for writing it down.