Under the eaves, I held my son's hand, watching the time fly by, listening to rumors, dust and tears from my sorrow;
Under the eaves, Bai Shou and I have equal eyebrows, watching the world turn around, listening to the beauty of things, summer flowers and autumn leaves, and spending time together;
Under the eaves, I have a mountain alliance with you, watching the sun and the moon rise and fall, listening to the water and wind falling in the sky, and we will never let go to the ends of the world.
Reader comments
Send flowers first~~
Well, I don't know why, but I always feel like I don't like the protagonist a bit. He's a bit frivolous if he's too happy, and he's obsessed with beautiful women... Maybe he wants to quickly escalate the relationship between the two, but this still feels a bit sudden. Sorry, I felt pretty good about the first chapter, but I didn't want to read it until the third chapter.
I saw that this is my first article, and it is very good~~ There are no big problems with the writing style, so keep up the good work!
To pick some minor flaws (ok, that's all I can do ╮(╯_╰)╭ It's really not nitpicking but my ability is limited, don't mind), it's this:
(Squirrel: Are you sure this is not how to raise rice insects...)
This will affect reading, that is, I was immersed in the situation described in the article, and when this happened, I was immediately pulled out of it. Believe me, this feeling is really bad and affects the reader's emotions. Of course, if you use it well, it can really add color to the article, but this technology needs more polish~~ Come on! That's all.
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Send flowers first~~ Well, I don't know why, but I always feel like I don't like the protagonist a bit. He's a bit frivolous if he's too happy, and he's obsessed with beautiful women... Maybe he wants to quickly escalate the relationship between the two, but this still feels a bit sudden. Sorry, I felt pretty good about the first chapter, but I didn't want to read it until the third chapter. I saw that this is my first article, and it is very good~~ There are no big problems with the writing style, so keep up the good work! To pick some minor flaws (ok, that's all I can do ╮(╯_╰)╭ It's really not nitpicking but my ability is limited, don't mind), it's this: (Squirrel: Are you sure this is not how to raise rice insects...) This will affect reading, that is, I was immersed in the situation described in the article, and when this happened, I was immediately pulled out of it. Believe me, this feeling is really bad and affects the reader's emotions. Of course, if you use it well, it can really add color to the article, but this technology needs more polish~~ Come on! That's all. [Receipt the article and leave a comment]