A collection of short stories, CPs I met in those years
1. "I used to like girls, but now I only like you!" A domineering confession came from Ling's mouth.
Li raised his head from his knees and looked at Ling in surprise: "But before you..."
"It was before!" Ling said domineeringly, "Now I won't like anyone else except you." He pulled Li up from the ground, picked him up and walked back to the tent.
2. It was night, with both eyes closed, Du Shang and I both had insomnia, tossing and turning in bed thinking about what happened during the day.
"Why didn't I bring him in during the day and drag him, a hostile person, into the stronghold?"
"Why didn't he beat me like before during the day and drag me into their stronghold to heal my injuries?"
"Why do I have to talk to him so much during the day? Does it have anything to do with me if he wants to die?"
"Why can't I help saying those things during the day?!"
Reader comments
I promised not to give up the trap_
At first, I thought Mo Li was a boy, and in the middle I thought he was a girl. Later, when I ran away, I realized that he was still a boy. It turns out that Ling likes a boy, which is a bit too messy.
(ーー゛) It's developing too fast
Dear, I haven't read Sword Three, and I haven't read any fanfics, so I will read them as if they are martial arts or fairy tales.
Therefore, my comments may be biased, please forgive me.
Regarding the Immortal Sword, I seem to have only paid attention to Xuan Xiao's part, and I like Xuan Xiao very much. I don't know why~~O(∩_∩)O~, so I took a look at it and found out that it should be a story about Xianxia, right?
Dear, the writing is very good, the writing is smooth, the ups and downs are orderly, and it is still very smooth to read. However, my article seems to have more exchanges of events (that is, using words to express the content) and less detailed descriptions. This makes it easy for people to read the dialogue without entering the atmosphere or scene. This is my feeling when reading the article. If you describe the atmosphere more appropriately, it is best to change some dialogues to non-dialogue expressions. Your article will be more vivid and imaginative. This is just my suggestion for reading the article.
Then, if there are some annotations or other things in parentheses, try not to add them to the text, which will affect the overall feeling. It is better to put them in the author's words.
I will pay attention to it from time to time, and also come to understand how to write fan fiction, haha, let's work together~~~
Cang Daddy is the first choice, Cang Yun shield flies up and dances with the shield (￣￣), the shield rises and kills the big windmill_(:_‖∠)_
I just want to come, hahaha, President
Jinjiang seems to be a little cramped. Let's make up for the flowers and points and go home.
Come on, I really want to keep watching. Yan Lili is so cute.
I promised not to give up the trap_
At first, I thought Mo Li was a boy, and in the middle I thought he was a girl. Later, when I ran away, I realized that he was still a boy. It turns out that Ling likes a boy, which is a bit too messy.
(ーー゛) It's developing too fast
Dear, I haven't read Sword Three, and I haven't read any fanfics, so I will read them as if they are martial arts or fairy tales. Therefore, my comments may be biased, please forgive me. Regarding the Immortal Sword, I seem to have only paid attention to Xuan Xiao's part, and I like Xuan Xiao very much. I don't know why~~O(∩_∩)O~, so I took a look at it and found out that it should be a story about Xianxia, right? Dear, the writing is very good, the writing is smooth, the ups and downs are orderly, and it is still very smooth to read. However, my article seems to have more exchanges of events (that is, using words to express the content) and less detailed descriptions. This makes it easy for people to read the dialogue without entering the atmosphere or scene. This is my feeling when reading the article. If you describe the atmosphere more appropriately, it is best to change some dialogues to non-dialogue expressions. Your article will be more vivid and imaginative. This is just my suggestion for reading the article. Then, if there are some annotations or other things in parentheses, try not to add them to the text, which will affect the overall feeling. It is better to put them in the author's words. I will pay attention to it from time to time, and also come to understand how to write fan fiction, haha, let's work together~~~
Cang Daddy is the first choice, Cang Yun shield flies up and dances with the shield (￣￣), the shield rises and kills the big windmill_(:_‖∠)_
I just want to come, hahaha, President
Jinjiang seems to be a little cramped. Let's make up for the flowers and points and go home.
Come on, I really want to keep watching. Yan Lili is so cute.