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Haha, these two little buns are so cute.
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Stop opening a trap, the people in the old trap will look at you with blood on their faces.
Do you still remember your beloved son Deyin? !
It's so sad to say. Over time, that's really what happened.
This kind of love... Makes me feel a little perverted. In fact, it is the self-righteous love of adults who imposes his subjective wishes on children. I don't know if it's his own pity or the child's pity. I think they will eventually live in the eyes of others and have no self.
Will the scarves be given away in the end? I have knitted them before. It was also an online relationship. We made an appointment to meet, but he disappeared.
I was attracted by what the author had to say! Girl! If I really lose ten pounds, I can shower you with flowers every day!
Let's get to the point, [The nest is also non-professional, just take a look, don't take it seriously.
First of all, the girl's writing style is good, her preparation is also very clear, and there are no problems with her sentences, which is very good. As long as she practices it slowly, she will definitely get better and better at writing.
The other thing is, girl, have you noticed that your writing is too bland!
The rhythm is not tight enough. The first three chapters of the article are very important. The first three chapters almost determine the following readership.
In many articles, the first three chapters set the tone, whether joy, evidence or sadness...
There must be something outstanding in the first three chapters.
You don't need to write so many descriptions in the article, but you must write the dialogue well. Once the dialogue is alive, the background will be blurred and others will not care. [The nest is in the crazy practice dialogue
Let's talk about these for today, and I'll look at them next.
Come on, girl, you will definitely write better and better~~~~
Haha, these two little buns are so cute.
┭┮┭┮ Stop opening a trap, the people in the old trap will look at you with blood on their faces. Do you still remember your beloved son Deyin? !
It's so sad to say. Over time, that's really what happened.
This kind of love... Makes me feel a little perverted. In fact, it is the self-righteous love of adults who imposes his subjective wishes on children. I don't know if it's his own pity or the child's pity. I think they will eventually live in the eyes of others and have no self.
Will the scarves be given away in the end? I have knitted them before. It was also an online relationship. We made an appointment to meet, but he disappeared.
Lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala~
I was attracted by what the author had to say! Girl! If I really lose ten pounds, I can shower you with flowers every day! Let's get to the point, [The nest is also non-professional, just take a look, don't take it seriously. First of all, the girl's writing style is good, her preparation is also very clear, and there are no problems with her sentences, which is very good. As long as she practices it slowly, she will definitely get better and better at writing. The other thing is, girl, have you noticed that your writing is too bland! The rhythm is not tight enough. The first three chapters of the article are very important. The first three chapters almost determine the following readership. In many articles, the first three chapters set the tone, whether joy, evidence or sadness... There must be something outstanding in the first three chapters. You don't need to write so many descriptions in the article, but you must write the dialogue well. Once the dialogue is alive, the background will be blurred and others will not care. [The nest is in the crazy practice dialogue Let's talk about these for today, and I'll look at them next. Come on, girl, you will definitely write better and better~~~~
Too little, please work harder