A short story about a foodie boy.
Tiandai's foodie attributes are super cute! And it's super easy to take care of!
A sweet short story, wishing everyone a Happy New Year~!
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This article should follow the line of refreshing writing. It is indeed interesting to read the introduction copy, but the beginning is not attractive enough, the same old routine and the same pattern. The beginning lacks new ideas, and the writing style does not have a special feeling. In terms of the feeling created by the language, it is not enough, and this aspect needs to be strengthened. For a cool formula of a slap in the face and a counterattack, it would be best to have more famous scenes. The example of the copywriting is good, but it needs more. If there is something like Shura Field, I will also feel excited and excited. If you start growing up from a talent show, I don't recommend growing up too fast. Firstly, the heroine is from ancient times to the present, and secondly, it is too exaggerated and has no sense of substitution. The author can refer to the experiences of powerful people in the entertainment industry, and just be a little more exaggerated than their quick rise to fame. Ah, I really don't know much about the entertainment industry, so I can't make any substantive suggestions. In terms of content, I suggest the author pay attention to the rhythm. Don't focus on the fun points, and don't overly disperse the fun points (although everyone's fun points are different)
By the way, can you live forever in Xiao Ming's hometown? Or will the male protagonist and Xiao Ming continue to travel quickly after they are almost the same age?
This article should follow the line of refreshing writing. It is indeed interesting to read the introduction copy, but the beginning is not attractive enough, the same old routine and the same pattern. The beginning lacks new ideas, and the writing style does not have a special feeling. In terms of the feeling created by the language, it is not enough, and this aspect needs to be strengthened. For a cool formula of a slap in the face and a counterattack, it would be best to have more famous scenes. The example of the copywriting is good, but it needs more. If there is something like Shura Field, I will also feel excited and excited. If you start growing up from a talent show, I don't recommend growing up too fast. Firstly, the heroine is from ancient times to the present, and secondly, it is too exaggerated and has no sense of substitution. The author can refer to the experiences of powerful people in the entertainment industry, and just be a little more exaggerated than their quick rise to fame. Ah, I really don't know much about the entertainment industry, so I can't make any substantive suggestions. In terms of content, I suggest the author pay attention to the rhythm. Don't focus on the fun points, and don't overly disperse the fun points (although everyone's fun points are different)
By the way, can you live forever in Xiao Ming's hometown? Or will the male protagonist and Xiao Ming continue to travel quickly after they are almost the same age?