Reincarnation

What a poor child~

Hello, author, I am Shidu, a commentator from Shicheng Studio. I am sorry that I have not commented until now because of some things in the third dimension. Please forgive me. Next, I will tell you my true feelings. I hope it can be of some help to you. What I have to say is that the author's writing is one of the top ones in terms of overall quality in the list I received. It is relatively accurate in terms of words and sentences. In addition, the writing is smooth and the structure is clear. The author has reached the most basic entry-level stage in the online literature world. Let's talk about the cover first, give it a thumbs up. I'm not an artist, so I don't understand the design of the cover, but the cover attracted me at first sight and made me want to open it to get a glimpse of the mysterious colors inside. To be honest, the copywriting is a bit complicated and not very concise, and the colorful fonts of various colors look really dazzling. I had to pull it twice before I could finish it. What is copywriting? It means to write out the highlights of the article, or to raise a question in the copywriting to attract people to click on it. But there are too many things in the author's copy, and I feel that each one is a key point, so there is no key point when summed up together. For example, for the main cp, when you publish the article, you will be asked to fill in the main characters in the form: xxxXxx, xxXxx... There is no need to write it out in a special font, which will cause the copy to be complicated. And when I was reading the author's article, I suddenly saw what the author said about promoting the article, saying that it was because the publicity was not strong enough. I just want to say silently that as long as the article is good, it can be ranked on the natural list. Because after signing the contract, there will be a lot of publicized collections that contain a lot of water and have no profit at all. By then, you will be crying and you will catch a lot of them. Therefore, the author does not have to worry about publicity issues and just needs to write the article carefully. Next, let's talk about the content of the text. In the second paragraph, I have already said that the author's level has reached the introductory stage of online writing, that is, the sentences are relatively smooth. Although some sentences are still too long and some words are quite prose-like, in general, I can still understand the story being told. But after reading the whole article, the text is unremarkable. I know what the story is, but I really just know what the story is. There are no ups and downs, no waves, so the reader is not interested in following the article. Except for the initial setting that is more attractive, the rest is like a bowl of plain boiled water. This is not to say that the author's plot design is not good, but that the plot is a bit lackluster, and the rhythm of the article is not very well controlled. There is no big climax, no small ups and downs, and there are no highlights. The author seems to just tell what he knows step by step, and the appearance of the little eunuch is designed to be "more beautiful than a woman". The first three chapters are a very important part. Editors read the first three chapters to sign a contract, and readers read the first three chapters to collect. So if you are a person who can write novels, then your first three chapters must have highlights [except the great masters, because there are original fans], and your first three chapters must not be incomprehensible to others, [the great masters cannot exclude this]. The first three chapters of the author are really too gentle. They only explain the place where the protagonist lives, was oppressed since childhood, and then entered the palace. Generally, it is best for the two protagonists to meet in the first three chapters to attract people to read on. The background can be added appropriately in the subsequent plot. For example, if you put the chapter about two pigs' feet laying lanterns by the river in the first chapter, and let the two pigs' feet meet before entering the palace, it can attract people and not affect the subsequent development. Although I think this encounter is really unremarkable and I don't understand why they are taken home directly, it is love at first sight, but if it is placed here and the order of the plot is slightly changed, it may be better. The author can also design more interesting plots to increase the readability of the article. Finally, I hope that the author will work hard and never give up writing, and he will become a god one day. ——Commentary by Shicheng Studio/Shidu

What a cruel, cruel name ===

Hey, hey, did I get a negative score? ! ! (°ο°)

I clicked in and found out that it was the beginning that I had read. When I read it for the first time, I thought this article would be helpful, so I just saved it to read. It's great to find out that so many updates have been made! Support, support, come on! !

The author's writing is great~~ I have read it before, I will continue to support you, please come on~

Very good! I support you (＾ω＾)

Great,,, continue to watch the next part tomorrow~,, come on~

After reading this chapter, I always feel that Jun Ziyuan is seducing (cough...) Lu Shang~

I really like this article when I see it~ It's so good~ Come on! Support!

Awesome~~ I haven't posted a comment yet. Post one. Come on, the author. I support you.

Judging from the title, it seems to be an ancient style chapter. The senses are biased toward sadomasochism or tragedy. I don't know if I guessed it right. The feeling of the copywriting gave me the illusion that I had strayed into a Qiong Yao Taiwanese romance novel. I don't know if Xiaosha read a lot of romance novels or novels before wanting to write an article of this type, but obviously in JJ, this is not very popular or popular. The beginning is very smooth. Although the feeling of hardship is coming, it makes people feel that there may be adventures later. Press curiosity and click on the following text. However, Xiaosha's wording often has problems with the arrangement of words, such as "for a while", "feeling anxious", "female voice sobbing quietly", etc., Which are awkward to read and hinder the reading effect throughout the text. It can be seen that Xiaosha hopes that the ancient style of writing should have the style and feel of ancient style writing, but this also limits the number of readers and clicks to a certain extent. Just like the comments below the article, readers who click on the title are destined to be fewer than other articles. Furthermore, Xiaosha strives to be rigorous, and in some aspects he does handle the details as he should. However, this treatment is too obvious, and the reasons why the characters do what they say are too blunt. It will make people feel that this is forcing an explanation, forcing everyone to think that this is indeed reasonable. Xiaosha has realized the importance of being rigorous and reasonable in the article, but don't forget to be natural when dealing with it. The author must understand the details of the description and grasp how the upper and lower parts are connected, but from the reader's point of view, he does not need to understand too much. As long as he can accept it and read it smoothly and smoothly, it is more important than how the article is written. This is also why we are reading a good novel. Why don't we think too much. After reading it quickly, we only have one thought in our mind: it is good to read. Another problem is that Xiaosha may have coded too quickly, and the typos are simply unbearable = =. One or two can be patiently guessed, but if there are too many, the writing will feel perfunctory, especially if it is an ancient style of writing. Try to catch as many bugs as you can when you have time. (One more word: revise the article three or four minutes before updating, and then update it immediately, so it is not a fake update.) Let's talk about the protagonist of this article, Toshang. His life experience was very tragic. His parents died young, his uncle treated him harshly, and his younger siblings couldn't help him at all, and even hindered him. Growing up in this environment, he was destined to have an unsatisfactory future. Hushang's character must have low self-esteem and a bit of pessimism. From the way he protects his sister, we can see his kind and gentle character. He firmly believes that people are inherently good, and even though he has suffered all the hardships in life, he is still not decadent and ignorant. It's just more forbearance and more acceptance of fate. I have to say that the description of the protagonist is very realistic and the portrayal is very natural. I hope Xiaosha can continue to do so! Therefore, in his future days, unless Xiaosha's biological mother does not explain, more hardships are still waiting for him. This is another reason for Wen Leng. Tragedy stories, eunuch stories, sadomasochistic stories (in the copywriting), these will obviously touch the different points of many people, attracting readers, and even fewer readers can guarantee to continue reading. After all, even classic abuse stories will not be acceptable to the public. Today's life is already very stressful. Reading articles is a pastime to relieve stress. How many people are willing to seek abuse in their spare time? This is not to deny that Xiaosha's settings are not good, but Wen Leng is indeed mostly due to abuse. According to the copywriting, Hu Shang's CP is Jun Fuxi, so Jun Chi is also cannon fodder. The cannon fodder fell in love with Hu Nao at first sight and secretly made a lifelong promise. This is also a surprise to some people. It can be said that Xiaosha's article is a good piece of sadistic writing, covered in a vulgar and naive style (title, copywriting, chapter names). The content is not as full of surprises as it appears on the surface. The writing is still good and the arrangement is very thoughtful. It's just that not everyone is willing to take the time to click and read. In fact, most of them look at the homepage and click the cross if they hit a minefield. This is also the reason why there is not much difference between the number of clicks on the opening and the next few pictures. Either you don't read it, or if you do, you may be attracted by the content. Xiaosha should probably put some thought into the superficial aspects of the copywriting, and not be influenced by other novels or things he has read, and form his own style. I hope it will be helpful to your article, keep up the good work! Illegal gathering long review shop by Kui Xi

This is a very good article. I like it very much. Come on, I will support you!

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We should change the title of the article. Few people will like it.

Well, I've read too many Xiaobai's articles, too many Mary Sues, and too many beautiful angels like Shenma. They attracted a large number of male fans as soon as we met. Shanggejun's articles gave me a refreshing feeling. It can be said to be a little green among thousands of flowers. The book begins with the daily life of the male protagonist (actually the female protagonist) Lu Shang. The first feeling I felt about Lu Shang was that he was extremely kind, so kind that he was too pure and too simple. Even if his family members were not good to him at all (when I saw his younger brother acting arrogantly, and when his family members wanted to sell him and his sister, I was so angry that I wanted to flip the table), he could still treat him with a kind heart. They had to say that this man was too kind. Perhaps it was this kindness that attracted the attention of the male protagonist and he began to care about Lu Shang. He always felt that the male protagonist told him that from now on when there are only two of them, he can call himself me, the most handsome, isn't it? It was a kind of self-confidence that he did not look down on the lowly people despite being in a high position. He instantly fell in love with this person who looked quite stern but was actually very gentle at heart. Lu Shang is kind, gentle, and strong. When encountering difficulties, the first reaction of most people is to escape, but Lu Shang's first reaction is how to solve it. This rare strength is faintly heartbreaking, especially when he is willing to become a eunuch in the palace in order to prevent his sister from being sold (cough...). This shows that his feelings for his family are deep to the bone. As long as you are good, it doesn't matter what happens to me. Later, his sister Sang could not escape his bad luck in the end, and Lu Shang's first reaction was not resentment, not wanting revenge, nor feeling that he should be retaliated against for being cheated, but silently accepted it, and silently made up his mind to find his sister. This hidden strength It touched me, and I couldn't help but feel sorry for this man who looked like a daffodil. At the same time, I was very sure that, in fact, Mr. Shangge was an out-and-out stepmother. The male protagonist (actually the female protagonist) in your novel was so miserable. I sincerely hope that as a stepmother, you can give your best friend (wow... ) A good ending for the girl, although I am very clear that if this routine is followed, Lu Shangsang's future destiny will definitely be more bumpy, not only due to the tragedy of his family background, but also due to being caught up in palace disputes, whether it is the male protagonist or the male supporting actor, their identity, their status , all decide that they cannot love someone wholeheartedly, even if they love to the core, they will be bound by this and that (although this is the plot of most ancient novels), but they still hope to abuse the girl less (whew...) So that she can live more comfortably. Let's talk about Shanggejun's writing style. This kind of light, elegant simplicity is one of my favorites. The whole article is as smooth as flowing clouds, the plot is well handled, and a lot of foreshadowing is laid in the beginning, which is fascinating. Regardless of the description of Lu Shang's heart or appearance, I still can't finish the encounter between Jun Ziyuan and Lu Shang. Jun Ziyuan actually looked at the back of a man in a daze. This is absolutely true (wow...) Love, although I still prefer the cool male protagonist (I will not admit that a certain fish is a prince). I hope that the two of them can stay together well, grow old together, be united forever, and then find a way to have children... The writing style is my favorite, and the character of the male (actually the female protagonist) protagonist is my favorite. He is not pretentious, neither a virgin nor a queen. He is always light and fresh, and silently accepts his fate. It seems that he passively follows his fate, but in fact he is also working very hard to live, whether it is for himself, his family or the future male protagonist. Lu Shangsang is working very hard to live. Well, this is my first time coding a long review, and I don't know what to pay attention to. Mr. Shangge, please work hard, our Lu Shangsang's happiness will be left to you. ——An irresponsible fish.