He is a ghost who died in vain. Just because he was a beautiful immortal in his previous life, but when he came down to earth, he was injured by the vicious pangolin demon. He missed the time of reincarnation and randomly entered the body of a human to save his life. His birth became an unrecorded mystery in the underworld. The Three Realms and the like have no ties to him, and he has become a soul that is truly not bound by the Three Realms. However, by some strange combination of circumstances, he was seduced by the wrong soul by a confused ghost, and now he can only be a lonely night ghost and cannot be reincarnated! However, he was very popular in his previous life. The Emperor of Heaven gave him an armor of immortal energy, which condensed his original spirit and soul into a peach tree. He obtained a body through the spiritual energy of the peach tree, and then became a banished immortal who was not controlled by the three realms...
Reader comments
Xiao Nizi's writing style. . . . . . Praise! Is this the beginning?
I found that your narrative ability is very strong. .
I like that princess's brother very much.
Come on. .
It's great that the heroine can see people who care about her and decide to cherish her and live a good life for them. "Losing is not about losing someone who doesn't love you, but losing someone who loves you deeply." It would be good to understand this, so that you will not hurt yourself because of someone who is not worthy of it:)
The childhood sweetheart's dream in the previous chapter was the memory of Nanping and his consort, right? That dream was so sweet. These two people really loved each other, right? How did it get to this point? Even though the Silver-faced King still had feelings for the princess, and even though he destroyed the royal family, he still wanted to keep her. But before he made these decisions, did he ever think that by killing his sweetheart's family, he had forced the two of them into a desperate situation, and that they would never be able to go back to the past? What made him finally take action? Why is he wearing a mask? Especially the mask with scratches on it, I feel like there must be a story in it...
The heroine has Nanping's memory. Is it left behind by this physical body, or is Nanping's soul just hiding in the body and unwilling to come out, as the heroine suspects, and has not disappeared? If it's the latter, how will the heroine handle herself later?
Is the person with a similar face to Xu Nuo really him? Is this person just a reason to lure the heroine to the capital, or does he really have anything to do with the heroine? I think, if the faces just happen to be similar, placing your longing for another person on a similar person will only make you feel better, and it will not make up for anything or save anything. It may not be good for others to interfere with the life trajectory of another person in this way. But everything is still unknown. Even if the heroine saved the heroine once because of the man's temporary decision, it is natural for the heroine to want to plan for him. I just hope that after clarifying the relationship between this soldier and Xu Nuo, the heroine can think clearly...
I was also shocked when I found out that Chu Qin was a favored servant. This... What's going on? Is it superficial? Isn't there a consort in Nanping...
The author's writing style has a somewhat cold and luxurious feel, and his brushstrokes are also delicate. However, Shuqin (you don't mind being called that, right?) Seems to prefer to use a series of clause phrases to modify descriptions, which is a bit like the way of writing attributive clauses in English. Does Shuqin often come into contact with foreign works? However, such sentences sometimes do not conform to Chinese reading habits, and some such sentences in the article have lost their subjects, or it makes people feel that the subject is wrong when reading, or the subject is far behind the modifying clause, making it difficult to find it, making it a bit hard to read. If you don't mind, can I help catch a few? For example (well, it's not necessarily a good grasp, I'm just giving a few examples to express my feelings, and I'll try to see if they are the same… The brackets are where I think the subject should be added):
The first paragraph - "Hanging upside down on the guard's shoulder, as he was fighting, I looked at the source of the sound." This is really like the preposition of participles in English, but in Chinese, would it be smoother to put "I" earlier? For example, "I hung upside down on the guard's shoulder, looking at the source of the sound through the gap between him and the enemy", or "I hung upside down on the guard's shoulder, looking through..."
The second paragraph - "A long sword penetrated Bai'er's chest, and (she) collapsed in a pool of blood." If "she" is not added, does this sentence have a strange feeling that "long sword" is the subject?
Paragraph 6 - "I opened my eyes in surprise and saw only a vast white mist, which blurred my vision, and of course the vision of others." This is also the case. The subject seems a bit vague. Would it be clearer to write "I opened my eyes in surprise, only to see a vast white mist. I guess this fog also blurred the vision of others." Besides, since all I could see was white mist, of course I couldn't see anything in my sight, so there was no need to say it again.
In the middle of the article, I saw the Silver Faced King——
"The leader of the team rode in front, (with) an overwhelming momentum. For some reason, I couldn't help but tremble in my heart, and then a burst of pain and cruelty spread to the depths of my heart." Also, the "pain and cruelty" behind this sentence are "pain and hatred", right?
"Full of pain is how she feels at the moment, and I can't seem to find the expression I should have for a moment." This has not yet mentioned that the heroine suspects that Nan Ping is still in the body, so it is a bit strange to suddenly see this "her". As a bystander, what expression should the heroine have? What I want to write here is that the heroine suddenly feels that her body is filled with unfamiliar feelings, and her original conscious thinking has been squeezed out, right? How about writing something like "For a while, I could no longer continue my original thoughts, and my heart was filled with pain"?
The enemy searched there, "a group of orderly footprints made the sound of falling leaves, and the army's march of collecting was gradually approaching me." After the soldiers received the order, they conducted an orderly search, but this should be a net-like search, right? So even if the soldiers' movements are very organized, the footsteps should not sound orderly, and "a group of orderly footprints are covered with fallen leaves" is a bit weird to read. What if it is written as "listening to the sound of the fallen leaves made by the combat boots stepping on them, I know that the searching soldiers are gradually approaching"?
Maybe I'm a little picky, but I think Shuqin has paid so much attention to the delicacy of the descriptions. If you pay more attention to the Chinese language habits and the smoothness of the writing, the article will read very well:) Come on, Shuqin:)
Xiaoqiang's murmurings instantly made people sad.
One word! Top!
It's a pity that it's a bit short
After searching for a long time, I didn't know which chapter to go to to place an order, so I had to rely on my feeling.
◆Cover◆
[Article Title][Comprehensive] Even popular characters will die!
[Author name] Mori Toki
[Article address] □//www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=1917834
[Article Type/Sexuality] Doujin Beauty
StyleRelaxed~
[Recommended material picture (if not, please fill in the desired base picture, such as: color tone, whether there are characters)] For a boy who wants to hold a weapon, red background is the best. If it's hard to find, just use this one——□//www. Topit. Me/item/23182959
[Small print (please do not exceed 15 characters, depending on the situation)] You are dead
[Whether to add a border] Yes
[Whether it comes with a promotional note] The number of words is not enough.
[Remarks] Looking at the example pictures, I really like Migo Kyouya, Tetsuya, Xiaozheng, and Ginko.
I seem to be the first single?
I actually saw a fan of this TV series, Hao Xinghu o(≧v≦)o~~. When I first watched it, I couldn't help but masturbate all the way. However, the author himself said that it was very abusive in the early stage. For my heart that has been tortured recently, can the author indicate it in the title when the abuse stops?
The writing is good, but I'm not used to reading first-person writing.
Miao Jiang, there is a poison, the young master wants to become a puppet to find out the news [No
😱 Like it
Ah, I have already foreseen that bloody place and a room full of top-notch products.
Emma Emma! ! ! Pink bubbles all over the sky! ! !
Loving someone who doesn't love you back, is it happiness or pain? Maybe every girl has experienced the ignorant period of love.
Here comes a mistress~ I hate this kind of woman the most. Why did you go there earlier?
The child will not be taken away!
It's very well written. Did something happen? Everything is updated again today.
It's scary... But it's okay
Poor baby, I have a fever, and I happen to have an exam today and can't take leave. What a tragedy~~~~＞＿＜~~I look forward to the author Sang Jiangdongshan being released again! !
So happy, a big step forward
Feed it first and you will get fat soon.
I want to be the first person to comment, wow haha
Xiao Nizi's writing style. . . . . . Praise! Is this the beginning?
I found that your narrative ability is very strong. . I like that princess's brother very much. Come on. .
It's great that the heroine can see people who care about her and decide to cherish her and live a good life for them. "Losing is not about losing someone who doesn't love you, but losing someone who loves you deeply." It would be good to understand this, so that you will not hurt yourself because of someone who is not worthy of it:) The childhood sweetheart's dream in the previous chapter was the memory of Nanping and his consort, right? That dream was so sweet. These two people really loved each other, right? How did it get to this point? Even though the Silver-faced King still had feelings for the princess, and even though he destroyed the royal family, he still wanted to keep her. But before he made these decisions, did he ever think that by killing his sweetheart's family, he had forced the two of them into a desperate situation, and that they would never be able to go back to the past? What made him finally take action? Why is he wearing a mask? Especially the mask with scratches on it, I feel like there must be a story in it... The heroine has Nanping's memory. Is it left behind by this physical body, or is Nanping's soul just hiding in the body and unwilling to come out, as the heroine suspects, and has not disappeared? If it's the latter, how will the heroine handle herself later? Is the person with a similar face to Xu Nuo really him? Is this person just a reason to lure the heroine to the capital, or does he really have anything to do with the heroine? I think, if the faces just happen to be similar, placing your longing for another person on a similar person will only make you feel better, and it will not make up for anything or save anything. It may not be good for others to interfere with the life trajectory of another person in this way. But everything is still unknown. Even if the heroine saved the heroine once because of the man's temporary decision, it is natural for the heroine to want to plan for him. I just hope that after clarifying the relationship between this soldier and Xu Nuo, the heroine can think clearly... I was also shocked when I found out that Chu Qin was a favored servant. This... What's going on? Is it superficial? Isn't there a consort in Nanping... The author's writing style has a somewhat cold and luxurious feel, and his brushstrokes are also delicate. However, Shuqin (you don't mind being called that, right?) Seems to prefer to use a series of clause phrases to modify descriptions, which is a bit like the way of writing attributive clauses in English. Does Shuqin often come into contact with foreign works? However, such sentences sometimes do not conform to Chinese reading habits, and some such sentences in the article have lost their subjects, or it makes people feel that the subject is wrong when reading, or the subject is far behind the modifying clause, making it difficult to find it, making it a bit hard to read. If you don't mind, can I help catch a few? For example (well, it's not necessarily a good grasp, I'm just giving a few examples to express my feelings, and I'll try to see if they are the same… The brackets are where I think the subject should be added): The first paragraph - "Hanging upside down on the guard's shoulder, as he was fighting, I looked at the source of the sound." This is really like the preposition of participles in English, but in Chinese, would it be smoother to put "I" earlier? For example, "I hung upside down on the guard's shoulder, looking at the source of the sound through the gap between him and the enemy", or "I hung upside down on the guard's shoulder, looking through..." The second paragraph - "A long sword penetrated Bai'er's chest, and (she) collapsed in a pool of blood." If "she" is not added, does this sentence have a strange feeling that "long sword" is the subject? Paragraph 6 - "I opened my eyes in surprise and saw only a vast white mist, which blurred my vision, and of course the vision of others." This is also the case. The subject seems a bit vague. Would it be clearer to write "I opened my eyes in surprise, only to see a vast white mist. I guess this fog also blurred the vision of others." Besides, since all I could see was white mist, of course I couldn't see anything in my sight, so there was no need to say it again. In the middle of the article, I saw the Silver Faced King—— "The leader of the team rode in front, (with) an overwhelming momentum. For some reason, I couldn't help but tremble in my heart, and then a burst of pain and cruelty spread to the depths of my heart." Also, the "pain and cruelty" behind this sentence are "pain and hatred", right? "Full of pain is how she feels at the moment, and I can't seem to find the expression I should have for a moment." This has not yet mentioned that the heroine suspects that Nan Ping is still in the body, so it is a bit strange to suddenly see this "her". As a bystander, what expression should the heroine have? What I want to write here is that the heroine suddenly feels that her body is filled with unfamiliar feelings, and her original conscious thinking has been squeezed out, right? How about writing something like "For a while, I could no longer continue my original thoughts, and my heart was filled with pain"? The enemy searched there, "a group of orderly footprints made the sound of falling leaves, and the army's march of collecting was gradually approaching me." After the soldiers received the order, they conducted an orderly search, but this should be a net-like search, right? So even if the soldiers' movements are very organized, the footsteps should not sound orderly, and "a group of orderly footprints are covered with fallen leaves" is a bit weird to read. What if it is written as "listening to the sound of the fallen leaves made by the combat boots stepping on them, I know that the searching soldiers are gradually approaching"? Maybe I'm a little picky, but I think Shuqin has paid so much attention to the delicacy of the descriptions. If you pay more attention to the Chinese language habits and the smoothness of the writing, the article will read very well:) Come on, Shuqin:)
Xiaoqiang's murmurings instantly made people sad.
One word! Top! It's a pity that it's a bit short
After searching for a long time, I didn't know which chapter to go to to place an order, so I had to rely on my feeling. ◆Cover◆ [Article Title][Comprehensive] Even popular characters will die! [Author name] Mori Toki [Article address] □//www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=1917834 [Article Type/Sexuality] Doujin Beauty StyleRelaxed~ [Recommended material picture (if not, please fill in the desired base picture, such as: color tone, whether there are characters)] For a boy who wants to hold a weapon, red background is the best. If it's hard to find, just use this one——□//www. Topit. Me/item/23182959 [Small print (please do not exceed 15 characters, depending on the situation)] You are dead [Whether to add a border] Yes [Whether it comes with a promotional note] The number of words is not enough. [Remarks] Looking at the example pictures, I really like Migo Kyouya, Tetsuya, Xiaozheng, and Ginko. I seem to be the first single?
I actually saw a fan of this TV series, Hao Xinghu o(≧v≦)o~~. When I first watched it, I couldn't help but masturbate all the way. However, the author himself said that it was very abusive in the early stage. For my heart that has been tortured recently, can the author indicate it in the title when the abuse stops?
The writing is good, but I'm not used to reading first-person writing.
Miao Jiang, there is a poison, the young master wants to become a puppet to find out the news [No
😱 Like it
Ah, I have already foreseen that bloody place and a room full of top-notch products.
Emma Emma! ! ! Pink bubbles all over the sky! ! !
Loving someone who doesn't love you back, is it happiness or pain? Maybe every girl has experienced the ignorant period of love.
Here comes a mistress~ I hate this kind of woman the most. Why did you go there earlier?
The child will not be taken away!
It's very well written. Did something happen? Everything is updated again today.
It's scary... But it's okay
Poor baby, I have a fever, and I happen to have an exam today and can't take leave. What a tragedy~~~~＞＿＜~~I look forward to the author Sang Jiangdongshan being released again! !
So happy, a big step forward
Feed it first and you will get fat soon.
I want to be the first person to comment, wow haha
Xiaosi is very pitiful, I wish her happiness