A past event has flaws that can never be made up, a relationship has become a regret that can never continue, the wind is rustling, the rain is also rustling
Are careless people heartless?
I originally wanted to take a light-hearted route, but I found that there are inevitably joys and sorrows in life. I will try my best to write it as light-hearted as possible, but after thinking about it, I decided to keep it a serious drama.
It's written very plainly, so don't read it if you don't like it.
Reader comments
"..." Can she say that Su Xia Nuan with her bulging mouth looks like the cute pine tree in "Ice Age"? It's "squirrel"
Sister Hong, don't say anything else, okay! ! (
How did this get on the list? Why are your hands so mean?
Hello Yue-chan, this is Qianzhu. The cover is beautiful and the copy is concise and powerful. The novel is rich in depth, the author's writing is fluent, and the plot twists are well set up. Especially when Su Jing is a woman, Zhu Zhu really didn't expect it and was very surprised, which achieved a very good dramatic effect.
Let's first discuss the creation of the novel's protagonist. Jin Xi is portrayed in the article as a strong, ruthless, and resourceful queen with a multi-faceted personality. Various details in the article, as well as the analysis of Jin Xi's character from the supporting characters, all set off her image from the side. Just in the first part, Qian Zhu wondered why Yu Jinxi, who neither loved Jing Hao nor had any strong hatred for the people in the palace, was protecting the country so wholeheartedly. After a conversation with the author, I finally understood the author's idea. If the author explains clearly beforehand, intersperses memories between details and images, and strengthens his emotional context, the characters will be more touching.
However, compared with Jin Xi, Jing Hao's personality is slightly inferior. Jing Hao acts naively and is no match for Jin Xi in any aspect, resulting in a lack of tension in the article. In Qian Zhu's opinion, the first half of the novel does not have a strong sense of conflict. The reason is probably because there is no force that can compete with the powerful Jin Xizuo, which weakens the excitement of the novel.
I don't know how the author created it in the following text. Generally speaking, a novel has only one real protagonist. To apply script theory, that is the person whose personality changes the most. For some reason, Qian Zhu always had the feeling when reading the article that the person who had changed the most was Jing Hao rather than Jin Xi. Therefore, this creates a gap between the perception of the novel and the readers' expectations, and they always feel that something is lacking. The author uses Jin Xi as the protagonist. If he could put more emphasis on the character transformation, the effect would be better. But this may be Qian Zhu's personal opinion, and it does not represent all.
As a palace novel, there are too few supporting characters in the novel, and Su Jing is the only one who stands out in terms of character. Even if others appear, their impression is not very clear. The supporting roles can enrich the plot, such as the court officials and the concubines in the harem. Jin Xi's younger brother is a good chess piece. The author uses him to promote the development between Jin Xi and Jing Hao, but it only touches on the emotional aspects of the two people, which is somewhat single and regrettable. Characters like the lost family members, especially the sister and brother, could have shined in places like power, ethics, emotion, etc. The author likes Xinyiwu, and the character Ye Yun in "The Mountain and the Moon Don't Know What's In My Mind" is an example. The author can pay attention to this when writing the article.
Then let's talk about some of Qian Zhu's suggestions. It's not a big problem, the author can just refer to it.
This is an ancient novel. The author can use images from ancient poems to enhance the atmosphere of the times and implicitly show the mood of the characters. For example, Jin Xi's inability to control herself and Jing Hao's loss can be indirectly conveyed through imagery. For example, Jin Xi's unspeakable feelings about her unwillingness to consummate her marriage can be used to create a sense of melancholy through images such as moonlight, bronze mirrors, and paintings.
When changing scenes, you can also add more descriptions and a few words, which not only adds literary talent but also has a visual effect. The background can not be limited to palaces and temples, but can be expanded outwards, and there can even be action conflicts (not necessarily with people, but also with animals or something). The side profile of the characters can also increase the dramatic effect.
Overall, the author's writing is good, the plot could be more compact, and the characterization has strengths and areas for further improvement. As a family, I hope the author writes better and better.
——Qianzhu Caramel Not Sweet Long Review Shop
Damn, I really want to know how Liu Hui recognized Yueyue. He obviously didn't show any flaws.
Collect it first and wait for fattening o_O
Support the two fat guys, give them a thumbs up, I'm Ju'an
Although my biggest love is Brother Tu, my fellow card-carrying friends also love me very much! Like it very much! ! ! Come on! ! !
Uh-huh, the attack setting is the Holy Mother? ? Oh no, is it the attribute of the Holy Father? ? ?
Or an animal that thinks with its lower body... That's all I can say. But it can be better
Jojo, come on! Be sure to come back after the postgraduate entrance examination, we are waiting for you...
"..." Can she say that Su Xia Nuan with her bulging mouth looks like the cute pine tree in "Ice Age"? It's "squirrel"
Sister Hong, don't say anything else, okay! ! (
How did this get on the list? Why are your hands so mean?
Hello Yue-chan, this is Qianzhu. The cover is beautiful and the copy is concise and powerful. The novel is rich in depth, the author's writing is fluent, and the plot twists are well set up. Especially when Su Jing is a woman, Zhu Zhu really didn't expect it and was very surprised, which achieved a very good dramatic effect. Let's first discuss the creation of the novel's protagonist. Jin Xi is portrayed in the article as a strong, ruthless, and resourceful queen with a multi-faceted personality. Various details in the article, as well as the analysis of Jin Xi's character from the supporting characters, all set off her image from the side. Just in the first part, Qian Zhu wondered why Yu Jinxi, who neither loved Jing Hao nor had any strong hatred for the people in the palace, was protecting the country so wholeheartedly. After a conversation with the author, I finally understood the author's idea. If the author explains clearly beforehand, intersperses memories between details and images, and strengthens his emotional context, the characters will be more touching. However, compared with Jin Xi, Jing Hao's personality is slightly inferior. Jing Hao acts naively and is no match for Jin Xi in any aspect, resulting in a lack of tension in the article. In Qian Zhu's opinion, the first half of the novel does not have a strong sense of conflict. The reason is probably because there is no force that can compete with the powerful Jin Xizuo, which weakens the excitement of the novel. I don't know how the author created it in the following text. Generally speaking, a novel has only one real protagonist. To apply script theory, that is the person whose personality changes the most. For some reason, Qian Zhu always had the feeling when reading the article that the person who had changed the most was Jing Hao rather than Jin Xi. Therefore, this creates a gap between the perception of the novel and the readers' expectations, and they always feel that something is lacking. The author uses Jin Xi as the protagonist. If he could put more emphasis on the character transformation, the effect would be better. But this may be Qian Zhu's personal opinion, and it does not represent all. As a palace novel, there are too few supporting characters in the novel, and Su Jing is the only one who stands out in terms of character. Even if others appear, their impression is not very clear. The supporting roles can enrich the plot, such as the court officials and the concubines in the harem. Jin Xi's younger brother is a good chess piece. The author uses him to promote the development between Jin Xi and Jing Hao, but it only touches on the emotional aspects of the two people, which is somewhat single and regrettable. Characters like the lost family members, especially the sister and brother, could have shined in places like power, ethics, emotion, etc. The author likes Xinyiwu, and the character Ye Yun in "The Mountain and the Moon Don't Know What's In My Mind" is an example. The author can pay attention to this when writing the article. Then let's talk about some of Qian Zhu's suggestions. It's not a big problem, the author can just refer to it. This is an ancient novel. The author can use images from ancient poems to enhance the atmosphere of the times and implicitly show the mood of the characters. For example, Jin Xi's inability to control herself and Jing Hao's loss can be indirectly conveyed through imagery. For example, Jin Xi's unspeakable feelings about her unwillingness to consummate her marriage can be used to create a sense of melancholy through images such as moonlight, bronze mirrors, and paintings. When changing scenes, you can also add more descriptions and a few words, which not only adds literary talent but also has a visual effect. The background can not be limited to palaces and temples, but can be expanded outwards, and there can even be action conflicts (not necessarily with people, but also with animals or something). The side profile of the characters can also increase the dramatic effect. Overall, the author's writing is good, the plot could be more compact, and the characterization has strengths and areas for further improvement. As a family, I hope the author writes better and better. ——Qianzhu Caramel Not Sweet Long Review Shop
Damn, I really want to know how Liu Hui recognized Yueyue. He obviously didn't show any flaws.
Collect it first and wait for fattening o_O
Support the two fat guys, give them a thumbs up, I'm Ju'an
Although my biggest love is Brother Tu, my fellow card-carrying friends also love me very much! Like it very much! ! ! Come on! ! !
Uh-huh, the attack setting is the Holy Mother? ? Oh no, is it the attribute of the Holy Father? ? ?
Or an animal that thinks with its lower body... That's all I can say. But it can be better
Jojo, come on! Be sure to come back after the postgraduate entrance examination, we are waiting for you...
Su Zhi, why are you so arrogant? Ah Mi is crying~