First, my father died unjustly in prison, and my mother followed him.
Later, she was abandoned by her fiancé and was forced to leave the Lian family.
Su Ya was originally the favored daughter of a wealthy family.
She became a homeless orphan without a father or mother.
Unwilling to do so, she wanted to practice the art of holding a ji and invited a pen fairy to do so.
But she didn't know
What she invited was a nightmare
A nightmare that feeds on the breath of human emotions—Li Mo
★Let's talk about something off topic:
☆This text is set to be one of the volumes in the Seven Sorrows of Life. Later, the author was inspired by another idea, so he will release this volume of love and separation for the time being, and will add several others in the future. The beautiful face at the end of the article will be the soul character interspersed in all volumes.
☆The next volume is expected to be about the pain of life, the heroine is a blackmail beast, the outline has been drawn up, and it is expected to be released at the end of the year, it will also be a short story
This article is exclusively published by Jinjiang Literature City. Please avoid it if it is stolen.
P. S., Why don't you come to Jinjiang to see me? (⊙ｏ⊙) {Jinjiang pen name: Wuyue Shang}
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Sprinkle flowers again~
Hello, the author, I am the bandit from Sha Miao Chang Ping Pu.
This is my first time writing a long review, so I'm a bit nervous. I apologize if I'm wrong about anything. Please don't be angry or take it personally when you may have a bit of a venomous tongue.
When I first read this article, I thought the subject matter and copywriting were very novel. After reading it, I also felt that the nightmare was very fresh. The words behind the copywriting about favoring nightmares are quite attractive, but the font of this copywriting is really too small, making it a bit tiring to read.
The writing style is also very good, and the whole article is very smooth and natural to read. When I read Poison Wedge, I was stunned for a moment when I saw all the ancient texts, saying that I am illiterate in ancient texts and could only understand them roughly. But if I could understand them, I would almost understand your intention in writing this article.
Then I read the first chapter, and I felt that this chapter was a bit unappealing. The beginning was about the accident, and the accident was really outrageous. After reading the rest, I felt that it would be better to use a flashback method to write about the encounter with the ghost and the end, and then tell the past events in the heroine's memories. Also, too little is said about this incident. It would be better if it was explained in more detail.
When I saw the Nightmare coming out, I was really attracted to him. It was a very novel setting (maybe I didn't watch it much.), And I still felt it was very novel until I finished watching it. It was quite good when he absorbed the heroine's emotions in the middle, maybe because of the length setting. After reading the later part, I felt that the relationship progress between Su Ya and Li Mo was too fast, and it didn't feel like it was overdone. Li Mo could understand it, but Su Ya felt it was a bit too fast. It was obvious that he was in love with Lian Zixuan before, and it was an inexplicable feeling to fall in love with Li Mo. Also, I lied to her before Li Mo, and I understood that she didn't hate her later, but I couldn't understand that she didn't ask for the truth. Well, when I was writing about the scene between Li Mo and Su Ya, the male and female co-stars were not revealed, and some things felt unclear. Well, actually I was complaining about the male co-stars.
Moving on to the sweet chapters that follow, I feel that it is very unfair that Li Mo does not absorb the emotions of the heroine. In order to stay together for a long time, he should absorb a little bit, just to have good energy to deal with Gou Xu. After all, he knew what Gouxu was thinking about Su Ya. If something happened to him, Su Ya would be in trouble even more. (This may be a personal opinion, so just ignore it.)
I feel that the writing is a bit fast-paced, and many things are not explained clearly. There is also the incident in the heroine's family, which is not mentioned later. She has no intention of finding innocence for her parents. His father died unjustly. If I guessed correctly, the setting is that the prime minister killed his father. In fact, I quite admire the heroine's character of not hating, but I don't quite understand her subsequent changes. And what he said to Lian Zixuan was a bit far-fetched.
I just feel that if I write it longer and write things more clearly, some explanations that need to be explained will be much better. For example, I have an inexplicable feeling about the part with Lian Zixuan in the back, and I also feel that the character of the heroine in the back is different from the previous one.
In fact, the characters in this novel are pretty well created, and I quite like the heroine to have some personality.
I'm giving you these opinions from the perspective of a reader. If you feel uncomfortable in any way, please don't take it personally.
Writing is a long and lonely process. I hope to go further and further and write better and better!
——Simmiao Changping Shop-Bijun Jun's Commentary
Jinjiang took out the comment but did not post it to OTZ... Sprinkle flowers again~
Hello, the author, I am the bandit from Sha Miao Chang Ping Pu. This is my first time writing a long review, so I'm a bit nervous. I apologize if I'm wrong about anything. Please don't be angry or take it personally when you may have a bit of a venomous tongue. When I first read this article, I thought the subject matter and copywriting were very novel. After reading it, I also felt that the nightmare was very fresh. The words behind the copywriting about favoring nightmares are quite attractive, but the font of this copywriting is really too small, making it a bit tiring to read. The writing style is also very good, and the whole article is very smooth and natural to read. When I read Poison Wedge, I was stunned for a moment when I saw all the ancient texts, saying that I am illiterate in ancient texts and could only understand them roughly. But if I could understand them, I would almost understand your intention in writing this article. Then I read the first chapter, and I felt that this chapter was a bit unappealing. The beginning was about the accident, and the accident was really outrageous. After reading the rest, I felt that it would be better to use a flashback method to write about the encounter with the ghost and the end, and then tell the past events in the heroine's memories. Also, too little is said about this incident. It would be better if it was explained in more detail. When I saw the Nightmare coming out, I was really attracted to him. It was a very novel setting (maybe I didn't watch it much.), And I still felt it was very novel until I finished watching it. It was quite good when he absorbed the heroine's emotions in the middle, maybe because of the length setting. After reading the later part, I felt that the relationship progress between Su Ya and Li Mo was too fast, and it didn't feel like it was overdone. Li Mo could understand it, but Su Ya felt it was a bit too fast. It was obvious that he was in love with Lian Zixuan before, and it was an inexplicable feeling to fall in love with Li Mo. Also, I lied to her before Li Mo, and I understood that she didn't hate her later, but I couldn't understand that she didn't ask for the truth. Well, when I was writing about the scene between Li Mo and Su Ya, the male and female co-stars were not revealed, and some things felt unclear. Well, actually I was complaining about the male co-stars. Moving on to the sweet chapters that follow, I feel that it is very unfair that Li Mo does not absorb the emotions of the heroine. In order to stay together for a long time, he should absorb a little bit, just to have good energy to deal with Gou Xu. After all, he knew what Gouxu was thinking about Su Ya. If something happened to him, Su Ya would be in trouble even more. (This may be a personal opinion, so just ignore it.) I feel that the writing is a bit fast-paced, and many things are not explained clearly. There is also the incident in the heroine's family, which is not mentioned later. She has no intention of finding innocence for her parents. His father died unjustly. If I guessed correctly, the setting is that the prime minister killed his father. In fact, I quite admire the heroine's character of not hating, but I don't quite understand her subsequent changes. And what he said to Lian Zixuan was a bit far-fetched. I just feel that if I write it longer and write things more clearly, some explanations that need to be explained will be much better. For example, I have an inexplicable feeling about the part with Lian Zixuan in the back, and I also feel that the character of the heroine in the back is different from the previous one. In fact, the characters in this novel are pretty well created, and I quite like the heroine to have some personality. I'm giving you these opinions from the perspective of a reader. If you feel uncomfortable in any way, please don't take it personally. Writing is a long and lonely process. I hope to go further and further and write better and better! ——Simmiao Changping Shop-Bijun Jun's Commentary