Love is a geometric problem, you lead me towards the correct solution
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I have been silently waiting for the author to update the article~~ Finally I found another excellent Three Kingdoms travel article~ Come on, author~~!
Only by becoming human can we have the same life span, right?
Chapter 1 looks pretty good
... It was so refreshing to see it, but it's gone, Turtle
Well, just by looking at the copy, I can feel that the language of the stars is my favorite style. The cover is really beautiful.
I saw the recommendation of Jinjiang~ I liked it as soon as I saw the introduction. Hehe, spread the flowers.
Although the crime of being a refugee does not lead to death, greedy people must pay the price. It is only natural and right.
Na Kun's comments are incisive hhhhhh
So cute, so cute, so cute, so cute⊙▽⊙
Different from the author of the last long review, I really like this kind of classical and elegant writing style. Names like Mo Ziyu, Gu Qinglian, and Ji Zongjian, as well as various images in the article, make me feel familiar, probably because Zhu is a typical academic. The author's writing is beautiful, classical and fluent, and reading it is like slowly unfolding a picture scroll. Although the brushwork is immature, it also has its own foundation. If the author likes it and is good at it, then stick with that line. Although most online readers today are accustomed to fast-food reading, if the writing, characters, plots, structural proportions, etc. Are handled properly, they will achieve higher achievements than ordinary online novels, at least Qian Zhu thinks so.
First let's talk about the title and cover. The title of this article is best to have a classical charm and is appropriate and natural. It is best (best, but not mandatory) to allow readers to understand the key points of the article at a glance. The title seems to have been changed, right? The previous "Zi silently closed his eyes", although a little artificial, is the name of the protagonist. The current "Zi Wushang" makes people a little confused. It is neither the name of a certain type of object, nor the name of music or allusion (such as "Song of Everlasting Sorrow", "Thousand Paper Cranes", "Norwegian Wood"), nor is it a character or thing emphasized in the text. As far as Qian Zhu is concerned, it is difficult to inspire any associations. I hope the author can explain more. The cover picture is beautiful, but it doesn't seem to be the name (?) All in all, the author should carefully consider the title.
Compared with the slightly deficient title, the copy is concise and clear, and the general plot is clearly stated. For a 1V1 supporter like Qian Zhu, this is a very successful copywriting and can also create expectations among readers. Thumbs up for the copywriting! If you can add artistic effects, such as changing font size and color, adding pictures, etc., The effect will be better - but these are secondary to the content of the article itself.
Perhaps due to the limited number of words, the conflict in the article has not yet begun, so Qian Zhu will not discuss it further here and will wait for the update later. The problem I want to point out here is that the two people are overly emotional. Qian Zhu thinks that the author has some shortcomings, but after all, it is a family opinion, so the author can just take a look.
CP is already clear at the beginning. I have to say that the name Gu Qinglian feels a little inconsistent with his personality... But it is not the main problem. Although the author has explained what happened between Mo Ziyu and Gu Qinglian, why did he skip the important "classroom dispute" between the two and instead start with a scene of fisting and kicking in a few words? The fighting scenes, the actions of the characters, the conflicts in Ziyu's heart, the lines of the supporting characters, etc. Could have been written wonderfully, but they were stopped by Gu Qinglian in an understatement, and he said "Be my best friend."... Later, Gu Qinglian's kindness to Mo Ziyu also lacked due details.
The interaction between the two people, how should I put it, is inevitable, but it is too abrupt. The scene of the two kissing for the first time and falling in the snow. The writing style is beautiful and correct, but it seems too deliberate and too coincidental. The words Gu Qinglian and Mo Ziyu said when they slept together also made people feel weird and they didn't know why. All in all, the relationship between the two lacks a transitional period, making it difficult for readers to resonate with each other. However, given the author's writing skills, if he adds more ink and studies his techniques, I believe there will be considerable improvement.
The above is just the opinion of one person, so please bear with me. I believe that the author will write better and better.
Shicheng Studio/Qianzhu
Please comment~~
Damn author, you are a lot more diligent (๑•ั็ω•็ั๑)
The writing is so good, so good, so good, so good~~~~
I have been silently waiting for the author to update the article~~ Finally I found another excellent Three Kingdoms travel article~ Come on, author~~!
Only by becoming human can we have the same life span, right?
Chapter 1 looks pretty good
... It was so refreshing to see it, but it's gone, Turtle
Well, just by looking at the copy, I can feel that the language of the stars is my favorite style. The cover is really beautiful.
I saw the recommendation of Jinjiang~ I liked it as soon as I saw the introduction. Hehe, spread the flowers.
Although the crime of being a refugee does not lead to death, greedy people must pay the price. It is only natural and right.
Na Kun's comments are incisive hhhhhh
So cute, so cute, so cute, so cute⊙▽⊙
Different from the author of the last long review, I really like this kind of classical and elegant writing style. Names like Mo Ziyu, Gu Qinglian, and Ji Zongjian, as well as various images in the article, make me feel familiar, probably because Zhu is a typical academic. The author's writing is beautiful, classical and fluent, and reading it is like slowly unfolding a picture scroll. Although the brushwork is immature, it also has its own foundation. If the author likes it and is good at it, then stick with that line. Although most online readers today are accustomed to fast-food reading, if the writing, characters, plots, structural proportions, etc. Are handled properly, they will achieve higher achievements than ordinary online novels, at least Qian Zhu thinks so. First let's talk about the title and cover. The title of this article is best to have a classical charm and is appropriate and natural. It is best (best, but not mandatory) to allow readers to understand the key points of the article at a glance. The title seems to have been changed, right? The previous "Zi silently closed his eyes", although a little artificial, is the name of the protagonist. The current "Zi Wushang" makes people a little confused. It is neither the name of a certain type of object, nor the name of music or allusion (such as "Song of Everlasting Sorrow", "Thousand Paper Cranes", "Norwegian Wood"), nor is it a character or thing emphasized in the text. As far as Qian Zhu is concerned, it is difficult to inspire any associations. I hope the author can explain more. The cover picture is beautiful, but it doesn't seem to be the name (?) All in all, the author should carefully consider the title. Compared with the slightly deficient title, the copy is concise and clear, and the general plot is clearly stated. For a 1V1 supporter like Qian Zhu, this is a very successful copywriting and can also create expectations among readers. Thumbs up for the copywriting! If you can add artistic effects, such as changing font size and color, adding pictures, etc., The effect will be better - but these are secondary to the content of the article itself. Perhaps due to the limited number of words, the conflict in the article has not yet begun, so Qian Zhu will not discuss it further here and will wait for the update later. The problem I want to point out here is that the two people are overly emotional. Qian Zhu thinks that the author has some shortcomings, but after all, it is a family opinion, so the author can just take a look. CP is already clear at the beginning. I have to say that the name Gu Qinglian feels a little inconsistent with his personality... But it is not the main problem. Although the author has explained what happened between Mo Ziyu and Gu Qinglian, why did he skip the important "classroom dispute" between the two and instead start with a scene of fisting and kicking in a few words? The fighting scenes, the actions of the characters, the conflicts in Ziyu's heart, the lines of the supporting characters, etc. Could have been written wonderfully, but they were stopped by Gu Qinglian in an understatement, and he said "Be my best friend."... Later, Gu Qinglian's kindness to Mo Ziyu also lacked due details. The interaction between the two people, how should I put it, is inevitable, but it is too abrupt. The scene of the two kissing for the first time and falling in the snow. The writing style is beautiful and correct, but it seems too deliberate and too coincidental. The words Gu Qinglian and Mo Ziyu said when they slept together also made people feel weird and they didn't know why. All in all, the relationship between the two lacks a transitional period, making it difficult for readers to resonate with each other. However, given the author's writing skills, if he adds more ink and studies his techniques, I believe there will be considerable improvement. The above is just the opinion of one person, so please bear with me. I believe that the author will write better and better. Shicheng Studio/Qianzhu Please comment~~
Damn author, you are a lot more diligent (๑•ั็ω•็ั๑)
The writing is so good, so good, so good, so good~~~~
Hahaha, Dawn is indeed a pistachio