Pseudo Brothers|Next Year|Rebirth
In the previous life, I held a beautiful girl in my arms and watched with a smile as I was busy all my life. In the end, my busy life was used as my bride's dowry to accompany my concubine.
In this life, I vow to make up for my parents' filial piety and brotherly love.
In the end, Xiao Mo held his butt and cried silently: "Che, brother, I'm not using my body to compensate you."
Xiao Che: "But it was you who led me astray, and you have to take responsibility."
Xiao Mo bit his handkerchief: "Uh-huh-huh."
The two CPs in this article are the main recipients
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I have it, but I need to fatten up╮(╯_╰)╭
Silence... Touch
A magical horse appeared = =
Baiyunxi still has the advantage ^_^
Beautifully written. I'm also a sophomore in high school, let's work together (づ￣3￣)づ╭
Not bad, good, come on!
Dear author, come on~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
It's very beautiful. I just recommended it, Spreading Flowers~~
It felt good, the crying part was a bit off. Personally, I thought it was probably a trembling of excitement all over my body, but it turned out to be a free flow of money... I got a chill.
Only then did I realize that the author had not signed a contract. According to this level, signing a contract was enough.
It would be nice to ask for a cover or something appropriately.
Also, there can't be four characters on the protagonist's side, otherwise it will be considered 4P. Xiao Che and Xiao Mo are enough.
It happens to be a mainstream subject matter, and the writing style is quite correct. I am very optimistic about it.
The writing is good, but when I cry with my head in my arms, my feet are a bit thunderous~
However, personal cuteness is different, so I added some fuel =3=
Very good writing~^q^
Collection
[p. S I am the one with the ghoul avatar]
Bishui will stamp the receipt and collect it.
In fact, one chapter is almost 3,000 words long
The settings are still cute~
PS Deer antler and stuff... Isn't it true that you can't sleep in the fire at night? XDDD
It feels like a pretty boring article. . .
Collect decisively and fatten up!
Moma, collect, fatten up~~
Added some oil~~
The author grasped the wrong center and described too much in the sub-CP.
I'm here to visit. Come on. Not bad. Tang Lin's image has been well established.
Emma, I misunderstood ORZ and thought Yun An liked Xiao Mo a little bit.
Hehehehe, scatter flowers
Good Words Collection Shop | Cousin places orders
After reading the subject matter, I just want to say, Brother CP has always been one of my cute points~I really love it~
Let's talk about the CPs in the story first~ There are two pairs of CPs in the story, the main CP Xiao Mo and the brothers Xiao Che, and the deputy CPs Su Yun'an and Bai Yuanxi~ Let's talk about the main CP first. Xiao Mo was inexplicably reborn in high school. When recalling all the unbearable past events in his previous life, he vowed to compensate for his parents' filial piety and restore brotherhood~ So at the moment of his rebirth, he wanted to use all his strength to push the enemy who had dragged him into the abyss of eternal damnation. Hell ~ and in the process worked hard to mend the relationship with his brother Xiao Che ~ Little did he know that while filling the guilt, his brother Xiao Che's feelings for him were no longer pure brotherhood. The feelings beyond brotherhood hit Xiao Mo's ignorant inner world like a storm on the sea, trapping Xiao Mo in the center of the net like a big net, unable to move at all.
The plot is a bit bloody, and as the plot develops step by step, it inevitably involves some elements such as the business wars of wealthy families. The text is still short, and the content of the story is just the beginning. The writing style is relatively smooth, without too much stiffness. You just need to pay special attention to the integration of the psychological description of the characters and the storyline~ It is easy to write a running account if you are not careful~ This is a test of the author's writing skills~
When describing Xiao Mo's rebirth at the beginning of the first chapter, I felt that the plot was a little stiff and a bit awkward. When most rebirth articles describe the plot of the pig's foot being reborn, many of the feelings are not very smooth. This may be related to the author's own writing skills, or it may be related to the plot of the article. Some authors are very good at embedding the plot of the rebirth in a harmonious way into the story to be explained, rather than pulling it out to describe it separately. It may be that the connection is not good when described separately, which tests the author's writing skills~
I don't know what the author's next storyline will be like. Since the article is short, Xiao Mo and Xiao Che's character personality is not very obvious~ The author can actually consider how to express the character's personality more clearly and prominently in the story, such as using certain details to highlight the character's personality~ I can't explain it too specifically. I just describe a general description. Just use it as a reference for how you want to understand it~
There is also the storyline~ The plot is a bit bloody. Many articles about rebirth or involving wealthy and powerful families in business wars will use these memes. Although the memes are relatively cliché, the author can consider using writing to make up for this problem. Many clichéd plots can be modified by the writing style to become equally gripping and not boring~ Well~ this process may be a bit slow~ but the author will write more or read other good articles for reference. There will always be time to hone it~O(∩_∩)O~
By the way, there is also the deputy CP, well~ Bai Yuanxi and Su Yunan are childhood sweethearts~ Maybe due to the childhood environment, Bai Yuanxi showed the dark side of children, but in this unknown darkness, he retained a trace of sunshine and warmth for the purest angel in his heart~ Among these few Among the characters, he is the one with the most distinctive personality~ At present, I have only explained the past of Bai Yuanxi and Su Yun'an. Next, we will see the development of the story, so I won't speculate too much here. I hope the author can persevere and hone his writing skills. I also hope that my comments can give you good inspiration and reference~
I feel like it's a big negative. There are too many CPs written, why the main character Xiao Gong always plays soy sauce, and there are too few emotional scenes. Well, it's not enough to watch. Also, why does Xiao Gong have such a favorable impression of Xiao Shou...
Speaking of which, snakes are really annoying! ! ! ! ! ! !! !!
Big, I would like to remind you that there is a danger in brotherly writing on the net.
I also changed my name to a pseudo-brother after someone reminded me of it, so be careful, but the work is very good, please give it a thumbs up, keep it up!
Spread flowers~~~Come on, come on~~These two brothers are so in love~~~~
What are the QAQ brothers writing? Even if they are fake, they are still very loving.
Although it's finished, I still have a feeling that it's still unfinished. Please give me a sequel!!!
It was very exciting to read it and I still have more to say +1~\\(≧▽≦)/~
Congratulations on the completion
Okay~
Great love
I won't tell you what the year is, I'm the cutest one
Come on
I have it, but I need to fatten up╮(╯_╰)╭
Silence... Touch
A magical horse appeared = =
Baiyunxi still has the advantage ^_^
Beautifully written. I'm also a sophomore in high school, let's work together (づ￣3￣)づ╭
Not bad, good, come on!
Dear author, come on~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
It's very beautiful. I just recommended it, Spreading Flowers~~
It felt good, the crying part was a bit off. Personally, I thought it was probably a trembling of excitement all over my body, but it turned out to be a free flow of money... I got a chill. Only then did I realize that the author had not signed a contract. According to this level, signing a contract was enough. It would be nice to ask for a cover or something appropriately. Also, there can't be four characters on the protagonist's side, otherwise it will be considered 4P. Xiao Che and Xiao Mo are enough. It happens to be a mainstream subject matter, and the writing style is quite correct. I am very optimistic about it.
The writing is good, but when I cry with my head in my arms, my feet are a bit thunderous~ However, personal cuteness is different, so I added some fuel =3=
Very good writing~^q^ Collection [p. S I am the one with the ghoul avatar]
Bishui will stamp the receipt and collect it.
In fact, one chapter is almost 3,000 words long
The settings are still cute~ PS Deer antler and stuff... Isn't it true that you can't sleep in the fire at night? XDDD
It feels like a pretty boring article. . .
Collect decisively and fatten up!
Moma, collect, fatten up~~ Added some oil~~
The author grasped the wrong center and described too much in the sub-CP.
I'm here to visit. Come on. Not bad. Tang Lin's image has been well established.
Emma, I misunderstood ORZ and thought Yun An liked Xiao Mo a little bit.
Hehehehe, scatter flowers
Good Words Collection Shop | Cousin places orders After reading the subject matter, I just want to say, Brother CP has always been one of my cute points~I really love it~ Let's talk about the CPs in the story first~ There are two pairs of CPs in the story, the main CP Xiao Mo and the brothers Xiao Che, and the deputy CPs Su Yun'an and Bai Yuanxi~ Let's talk about the main CP first. Xiao Mo was inexplicably reborn in high school. When recalling all the unbearable past events in his previous life, he vowed to compensate for his parents' filial piety and restore brotherhood~ So at the moment of his rebirth, he wanted to use all his strength to push the enemy who had dragged him into the abyss of eternal damnation. Hell ~ and in the process worked hard to mend the relationship with his brother Xiao Che ~ Little did he know that while filling the guilt, his brother Xiao Che's feelings for him were no longer pure brotherhood. The feelings beyond brotherhood hit Xiao Mo's ignorant inner world like a storm on the sea, trapping Xiao Mo in the center of the net like a big net, unable to move at all. The plot is a bit bloody, and as the plot develops step by step, it inevitably involves some elements such as the business wars of wealthy families. The text is still short, and the content of the story is just the beginning. The writing style is relatively smooth, without too much stiffness. You just need to pay special attention to the integration of the psychological description of the characters and the storyline~ It is easy to write a running account if you are not careful~ This is a test of the author's writing skills~ When describing Xiao Mo's rebirth at the beginning of the first chapter, I felt that the plot was a little stiff and a bit awkward. When most rebirth articles describe the plot of the pig's foot being reborn, many of the feelings are not very smooth. This may be related to the author's own writing skills, or it may be related to the plot of the article. Some authors are very good at embedding the plot of the rebirth in a harmonious way into the story to be explained, rather than pulling it out to describe it separately. It may be that the connection is not good when described separately, which tests the author's writing skills~ I don't know what the author's next storyline will be like. Since the article is short, Xiao Mo and Xiao Che's character personality is not very obvious~ The author can actually consider how to express the character's personality more clearly and prominently in the story, such as using certain details to highlight the character's personality~ I can't explain it too specifically. I just describe a general description. Just use it as a reference for how you want to understand it~ There is also the storyline~ The plot is a bit bloody. Many articles about rebirth or involving wealthy and powerful families in business wars will use these memes. Although the memes are relatively cliché, the author can consider using writing to make up for this problem. Many clichéd plots can be modified by the writing style to become equally gripping and not boring~ Well~ this process may be a bit slow~ but the author will write more or read other good articles for reference. There will always be time to hone it~O(∩_∩)O~ By the way, there is also the deputy CP, well~ Bai Yuanxi and Su Yunan are childhood sweethearts~ Maybe due to the childhood environment, Bai Yuanxi showed the dark side of children, but in this unknown darkness, he retained a trace of sunshine and warmth for the purest angel in his heart~ Among these few Among the characters, he is the one with the most distinctive personality~ At present, I have only explained the past of Bai Yuanxi and Su Yun'an. Next, we will see the development of the story, so I won't speculate too much here. I hope the author can persevere and hone his writing skills. I also hope that my comments can give you good inspiration and reference~
I feel like it's a big negative. There are too many CPs written, why the main character Xiao Gong always plays soy sauce, and there are too few emotional scenes. Well, it's not enough to watch. Also, why does Xiao Gong have such a favorable impression of Xiao Shou...
Speaking of which, snakes are really annoying! ! ! ! ! ! !! !!
Big, I would like to remind you that there is a danger in brotherly writing on the net. I also changed my name to a pseudo-brother after someone reminded me of it, so be careful, but the work is very good, please give it a thumbs up, keep it up!
Spread flowers~~~Come on, come on~~These two brothers are so in love~~~~
What are the QAQ brothers writing? Even if they are fake, they are still very loving.
Although it's finished, I still have a feeling that it's still unfinished. Please give me a sequel!!!
It was very exciting to read it and I still have more to say +1~\\(≧▽≦)/~ Congratulations on the completion
Okay~ Great love I won't tell you what the year is, I'm the cutest one Come on