It is a fanfic of the familiar anime "The Prince of Tennis": A girl came to Qingxue as the manager of the tennis department. She was not good at tennis, but she was a very mysterious girl. Then another girl appeared and was a good friend with the manager. That girl's tennis was even with Fuji... The American Goddess Team came to perform a competition, and these two mysterious girls seemed to be related to the Goddess Team...
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I'm still a newbie, so please forgive me for any mistakes^-^
Reader comments
It's great. When will Momo fill in the gaps?
Come on~~~~~~~~~Good writing style
I used to comment on the portal in BS, but now I'm commenting~ I'm so sorry~
First let's talk about the copywriting~ Tutu is quite good~ but I always feel that the content of the copywriting is not very attractive~
The "he, she" style is quite common~ But you can also write your own style~ But my copywriting doesn't seem to make people want to click in and read it immediately~ Do you want to process it a little bit~ You can consider it yourself~
After reading this, let's talk about the overall feeling~ It's a purely ancient martial arts novel~
I would like to say that my sense of shaping the scene is very good~ and the description of some details is also very delicate~ the writing style is good~ the writing style is also relatively unified~
However, there are a few issues that I want to point out~
First of all, Xiyan said happily: "Qianmeng, go back and pack your things, I'm going to Xuehua! Wuyue, accompany me to find my mother!" In this sentence, the word mother should not appear in ancient proverbs, right? This sentence seems a bit abrupt in the relatively delicate and gorgeous writing style of Qin.
Furthermore, although the single names and words are really in line with the ancient situation, it is best to explain it before the comparison, because when I read it, I almost didn't understand it. I almost thought that Yifeng and Che were two people ~ especially since many characters have appeared in the previous chapters ~
Finally, there is another question. I see that the first five chapters are all about one topic, that is, "The Qingtian Order", okay, but I still don't know what the Qingtian Order is used for after reading this... I won't talk about it at the beginning~ At least mention its use in the second or third chapter~
However, in fact, the overall feeling of my article is still good~ After reading the previous comments, I mentioned the layout problem~ I should have revised it~ because I think the current layout looks quite good~
So dear, keep on working hard~ It's not easy to write pure ancient Chinese~ But my writing is still good~ I've collected the article~~ Don't cheat~ Come on~
It means taking a seat so that we can talk——
Is Le Fei afraid of ghosts, or is he acting very arrogant sometimes? I feel like he shouldn't have acted so shallowly? Haha good looking
Ayou is such a cute girl~~~
Hey, it seems there is no Snape?
I like Haiyue very much and Lord Guzi very much! !
There is so much love for the talkative and sceptical person~~~
Thumbs up for such a cool and inexplicably cute CP!
I saw the mafia, and then I saw that person named Yamamoto. . . The first person to react was that this article was going to be a full-length comic, with tutors appearing in it. . . = =||
Good people are bullied, but women should strengthen themselves. Thank you for the big update, keep it up.
I don't know what to say... Just spread some flowers.
For the extra story, please customize it as fast as possible~ I have been waiting for a long time while holding the piglet in my arms~~~
DDDDDDDDDD
A boring one floated by and sent flowers by the way.
- -||| You are the emperor of typos and don't explain
It turns out that Gu Chunshi was even bigger than others. He is really... So talented!
The bird is messy in the wind, what's going on with that man? Please explain!
Ah......... Legend of Sword and Fairy, haha
Well~~~~~~~~~~~~I chased you from the funeral home. . . . . . . . . . . .
It's great. When will Momo fill in the gaps?
Come on~~~~~~~~~Good writing style
I used to comment on the portal in BS, but now I'm commenting~ I'm so sorry~ First let's talk about the copywriting~ Tutu is quite good~ but I always feel that the content of the copywriting is not very attractive~ The "he, she" style is quite common~ But you can also write your own style~ But my copywriting doesn't seem to make people want to click in and read it immediately~ Do you want to process it a little bit~ You can consider it yourself~ After reading this, let's talk about the overall feeling~ It's a purely ancient martial arts novel~ I would like to say that my sense of shaping the scene is very good~ and the description of some details is also very delicate~ the writing style is good~ the writing style is also relatively unified~ However, there are a few issues that I want to point out~ First of all, Xiyan said happily: "Qianmeng, go back and pack your things, I'm going to Xuehua! Wuyue, accompany me to find my mother!" In this sentence, the word mother should not appear in ancient proverbs, right? This sentence seems a bit abrupt in the relatively delicate and gorgeous writing style of Qin. Furthermore, although the single names and words are really in line with the ancient situation, it is best to explain it before the comparison, because when I read it, I almost didn't understand it. I almost thought that Yifeng and Che were two people ~ especially since many characters have appeared in the previous chapters ~ Finally, there is another question. I see that the first five chapters are all about one topic, that is, "The Qingtian Order", okay, but I still don't know what the Qingtian Order is used for after reading this... I won't talk about it at the beginning~ At least mention its use in the second or third chapter~ However, in fact, the overall feeling of my article is still good~ After reading the previous comments, I mentioned the layout problem~ I should have revised it~ because I think the current layout looks quite good~ So dear, keep on working hard~ It's not easy to write pure ancient Chinese~ But my writing is still good~ I've collected the article~~ Don't cheat~ Come on~
It means taking a seat so that we can talk——
Is Le Fei afraid of ghosts, or is he acting very arrogant sometimes? I feel like he shouldn't have acted so shallowly? Haha good looking
Ayou is such a cute girl~~~
Hey, it seems there is no Snape?
I like Haiyue very much and Lord Guzi very much! !
There is so much love for the talkative and sceptical person~~~
Thumbs up for such a cool and inexplicably cute CP!
I saw the mafia, and then I saw that person named Yamamoto. . . The first person to react was that this article was going to be a full-length comic, with tutors appearing in it. . . = =||
Good people are bullied, but women should strengthen themselves. Thank you for the big update, keep it up.
I don't know what to say... Just spread some flowers.
For the extra story, please customize it as fast as possible~ I have been waiting for a long time while holding the piglet in my arms~~~
DDDDDDDDDD
A boring one floated by and sent flowers by the way.
- -||| You are the emperor of typos and don't explain
It turns out that Gu Chunshi was even bigger than others. He is really... So talented!
The bird is messy in the wind, what's going on with that man? Please explain!
Ah......... Legend of Sword and Fairy, haha
Well~~~~~~~~~~~~I chased you from the funeral home. . . . . . . . . . . .