Whose reality is the reality in the dream?
Whose dream is this dream in reality?
Who will the prince live with in the distant place?
Half a month, how many fates are bound to it?
Traveling through dreams, turning into encounters across time and space
The development of science and technology will transform life hundreds of millions of years from now
The magic transforms into a warm and romantic ending
When everything is perfectly intertwined
The future world unfolds from here
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A chivalrous person with an invincible personality
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It's great, it needs to have a heartwarming ending.
...[Lie down] I was wrong... I changed it = =[Tears]
I also think that water and witches love each other very much~~ Well, it's very well written...
Let me just say it weakly... The update was too fast... I was not prepared at all = =
Ha! There are 8 mistakes in this chapter, we like to keep it ambiguous!
Come on Louda! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
I found myself looking forward to it more and more. The desire to know Chuwu's secrets became stronger and stronger. Thank you, author. Please call me, this is YOYO-san.
Xiao Ganzi, if you dare to do anything to Lian Mo, let the author torture you to death and let Lian Mo and others do it! !
When will this article be updated? I've been waiting for a long time.
Sister M. . . . People are a bit confused. . . . But~ I still support you~
(Forgot to rate). . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
H\(^o^)/YES! ╮(╯▽╰)╭Flower
卿本佳人，奈何执念。
最可怜的人是男2陆豪
Although the article is short, it is really well written
Huang Jiamin loves you, loves you~
Copywriting
The cover of the article is really too simple. I suggest you go to a photo shop or an artist to make it more formal. It can be seen from the bottom map that this is an old track, a little desolate and a little dark, which is just in line with the title of the article "The Passage of Time". People can't help but think of Nalan's poem "Yulin Ling": After so many years, it should be a good time and good scenery, but even if there are thousands of customs, who can tell me. This is really one of my favorite poems, and the title is relatively literary.
However, after reading the contents of the copy, you will find that there are many things and climaxes in the article. "Have you ever met such a man? He is a powerful businessman but he is also the leader of a gang. At the same time, he is your teacher. You pursue him passionately and crazily and he happens to be in love with you. You have been married to him for four years but you still have the daughter in your belly. "My son left just because he was your father-killing enemy and broke up your family. Your mission is to make his family unstable." It involved business wars, adultery, and the love and marriage between teachers and students, but in the end you left with the child in your belly. The reason is - he has the hatred of killing his father. (Why do I feel like there are thunderous thunders and a lot of blood-_-|||)
I have some suggestions for copywriting. The distribution in the copywriting is very good. In fact, you can add a word - [plot version] - in front of the first paragraph, and a word - [dialogue version] - in front of the following paragraph. This will really make it look much more comfortable. Also, the star symbols in the middle look very redundant. It is recommended to remove them and try to be as concise as possible. You can also study the code for font color and size, which will be better.
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The article starts with the divorce and then goes on to the previous memories. I don't know how A Zhen's father endured the pain of those 72 knives until the last second of his life. 72 Knives, how painful it must be. The suicide of Azhen's mother was also shocking. Love goes deep, life and death depend on each other. How affectionate it must be to be willing to give up your life just to follow the person you love the most.
It's just that all this left too much trauma in Ah Zhen's heart. Her father's mysterious death, coupled with the subsequent death of her mother, the death of her parents ignited her desire for revenge, so she began to get closer to the male protagonist little by little. In the end, as she wished, she got together with him and got married.
It's just not as beautiful as she imagined. In the end, he became her father-killing enemy. There will be as much hate as there is love. This love called revenge ended in divorce.
Reunited after many years, we can only resolve all misunderstandings in the future. I just hope that the male protagonist can be strong enough and the female protagonist can be at ease enough (I also felt a twitch when I saw the female protagonist saying on the phone that she was afraid of their family TUT)
Overall
Some suggestions: There are some problems with punctuation marks in some parts of the text. It is also recommended to leave blank lines between paragraphs. When the scene changes, just use some asterisks or other symbols to separate them, so that it does not look too crowded. And when I was writing about the initial love story between the male and female protagonists, I felt that it was a bit watered down and the number of words was a bit short. Instead, I felt that they got together very quickly and got married very hastily, just like they divorced.
The overall feeling given to me by Wenwen is that this is a story that is a collection of many stories, and no part of it is worth savoring. The author's writing style is naturally excellent, and I hope that the author will use his own unique writing style to reveal the ending for us.
Finally
I will continue to read this article if I like it. Please don't update carelessly after the college entrance examination. Come on, good luck in the college entrance examination. I wish you good results and wait for you to come back -v-
By___good products&somepian
The data received this time is too large. My memory space seems to be insufficient, and the system is stuck.
So, my memory elf's name is Wu An? Why did you come up with such a name... Wuan... Wang...
…
Suddenly I feel that this is the rhythm to blackmail my surname Wang...
Huang Jiamin loves you, loves you~
"Yinglong Xangu, I am willing to smear my master's liver and brains... After a hundred years, the pus and blood will be my bait..."
TWT is... Annoying! ! ! ! ! ! Such a cute and cruel feeling! ! ! ! !
My daughter is so annoying! ! ! ! Come over and spank me! ! ! ! ! !
Zombies come back from the dead, snakes mutate, what kind of society is this! Animals are more powerful than humans!
The description is spot on and the wording is also very good. Come on.
It's a rare good article~ I decided to give it a try! Why did you lock it? Looking forward to your updates~~
Jiang, I like your writing very much. I hope you will continue to work hard. I will come to see you every day~~ If not, I will go to Lian Cheng to read it, hahaha~ I really like the style of your writing. It is lighthearted and funny but not trivial. There are many places that made me laugh~~ Although this is your first article, I think it is quite good after seeing it now. Of course, you will definitely make more progress, I believe in you! And I've added you to your group, guess which one I am~ I hope Jiang you will work hard and work hard! We will also cheer you on! !
真不愧后面标注的一波N折了~~
The content is very exciting. When will it be updated?
To be honest, when I first read this article by Dengzhan, I admired your writing style from the bottom of my heart. Sincerely, there are so many words that I couldn't have imagined even if I took out the Chinese language skills that were the highest in my college entrance examination! ! Not to mention now, hey, if you maintain this style until the end, that would be really amazing!
Also, don't take other people's misinterpreted comments to heart. You have to know that there are many popular people, and some people like it, but some people will not understand it. In this world, no one is perfect, and naturally there is no solution that has the best of both worlds. All you need to do is ignore it! ! Well, ignore it! !
Hee hee, having said that, the girl Xueruo Bai you created is really stupid and cute. I can't make any progress even if I get knocked unconscious by stealing books. I can even be knocked unconscious by chasing Lady Ziwei. When I look at this, I really don't know whether to laugh or cry. Also, were those people standing aside to watch the fun? Look at our stupid Xueruobai girl's oily soles and her mother hitting the fairy shield hard? Haha, I'm laughing so hard here. It's said that those who are obsessed with the authorities know better by others. You, Xue Ruobai, are too "obsessed"! Haha~~
But oh, if we hadn't been knocked unconscious, we wouldn't have had the doting care of Lady Ziwei. It really makes people envious and jealous. However, our dear Ruobai children's shoes, can you be more reserved and correct your little problems when sleeping? Hehe, otherwise, would you be able to sleep soundly in your arms without any clothes or shoes? Hahahaha~~
It is your own fault and you will not live...
It is also here that the lively plot is interspersed with Ziwei Xingjun's faint heartache and memories. The occasional care shown by this person who has always been as plain as water really makes people feel warm and sad at the same time. Maybe I'm overthinking it, Ziwei, do you cherish Ruobai because she was her in the previous life, or because she is little Xue Ruobai? At the same time, I am also worried that if Xue Ruobai really repairs her soul, will Xue Ruobai still be Xue Ruobai? Is it still the original Xue Ruobai who likes Ziwei Xingjun and is cute and stupid? She remembered everything she had with Ziwei in the past. Will she forget her parents' hatred? Remembering the entanglements in her previous life, will she still accept the love-hate relationship with Ziwei? Do you still remember the hazy and pure love when you were a little mink?
If you hide in this life, then I will just chase you to heaven and earth, and there will be no place to hide. Everything is just cause and effect. If there is no cause, there will be no result. If there is cause, there will be a result. Everything in the world is just like this. In this case, I will give you a cause in exchange for the result that I have not obtained after millions of years.
I like this sentence very much. Cause and effect bring about consequences. It expresses Ziwei's longing for her.
I just hope that in the next life, they can be together well. No matter what happens, just like what is written on the lamp, there is only the sound of boiling water in the hall and the faint fragrance of tea. I think they can enjoy such a beautiful artistic conception forever.
Also, Chen Lian and Siming Xingjun, I also hope that they can have a good ending, the sentence "What is a loss when you love someone? What is not a loss? Just love, why do you have to think so much?" I really like it. Love is like this. When you love deeply, you have long forgotten that there is another me. Only with him in your life can there be sunshine. There is only one dazzling person left in the world!
Dengzhan, how dare you not give happiness to such a person! ! !
Otherwise, I will chase you to the ends of the earth with a baseball bat! ! !
It's great, it needs to have a heartwarming ending.
...[Lie down] I was wrong... I changed it = =[Tears] I also think that water and witches love each other very much~~ Well, it's very well written... Let me just say it weakly... The update was too fast... I was not prepared at all = =
Ha! There are 8 mistakes in this chapter, we like to keep it ambiguous! Come on Louda! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
I found myself looking forward to it more and more. The desire to know Chuwu's secrets became stronger and stronger. Thank you, author. Please call me, this is YOYO-san.
Xiao Ganzi, if you dare to do anything to Lian Mo, let the author torture you to death and let Lian Mo and others do it! !
Why isn't it updated? ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! . . . . . . . . . . . .
When will this article be updated? I've been waiting for a long time.
Sister M. . . . People are a bit confused. . . . But~ I still support you~ (Forgot to rate). . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
H\(^o^)/YES! ╮(╯▽╰)╭Flower
卿本佳人，奈何执念。
最可怜的人是男2陆豪
Although the article is short, it is really well written
Huang Jiamin loves you, loves you~
Copywriting The cover of the article is really too simple. I suggest you go to a photo shop or an artist to make it more formal. It can be seen from the bottom map that this is an old track, a little desolate and a little dark, which is just in line with the title of the article "The Passage of Time". People can't help but think of Nalan's poem "Yulin Ling": After so many years, it should be a good time and good scenery, but even if there are thousands of customs, who can tell me. This is really one of my favorite poems, and the title is relatively literary. However, after reading the contents of the copy, you will find that there are many things and climaxes in the article. "Have you ever met such a man? He is a powerful businessman but he is also the leader of a gang. At the same time, he is your teacher. You pursue him passionately and crazily and he happens to be in love with you. You have been married to him for four years but you still have the daughter in your belly. "My son left just because he was your father-killing enemy and broke up your family. Your mission is to make his family unstable." It involved business wars, adultery, and the love and marriage between teachers and students, but in the end you left with the child in your belly. The reason is - he has the hatred of killing his father. (Why do I feel like there are thunderous thunders and a lot of blood-_-|||) I have some suggestions for copywriting. The distribution in the copywriting is very good. In fact, you can add a word - [plot version] - in front of the first paragraph, and a word - [dialogue version] - in front of the following paragraph. This will really make it look much more comfortable. Also, the star symbols in the middle look very redundant. It is recommended to remove them and try to be as concise as possible. You can also study the code for font color and size, which will be better. Text The article starts with the divorce and then goes on to the previous memories. I don't know how A Zhen's father endured the pain of those 72 knives until the last second of his life. 72 Knives, how painful it must be. The suicide of Azhen's mother was also shocking. Love goes deep, life and death depend on each other. How affectionate it must be to be willing to give up your life just to follow the person you love the most. It's just that all this left too much trauma in Ah Zhen's heart. Her father's mysterious death, coupled with the subsequent death of her mother, the death of her parents ignited her desire for revenge, so she began to get closer to the male protagonist little by little. In the end, as she wished, she got together with him and got married. It's just not as beautiful as she imagined. In the end, he became her father-killing enemy. There will be as much hate as there is love. This love called revenge ended in divorce. Reunited after many years, we can only resolve all misunderstandings in the future. I just hope that the male protagonist can be strong enough and the female protagonist can be at ease enough (I also felt a twitch when I saw the female protagonist saying on the phone that she was afraid of their family TUT) Overall Some suggestions: There are some problems with punctuation marks in some parts of the text. It is also recommended to leave blank lines between paragraphs. When the scene changes, just use some asterisks or other symbols to separate them, so that it does not look too crowded. And when I was writing about the initial love story between the male and female protagonists, I felt that it was a bit watered down and the number of words was a bit short. Instead, I felt that they got together very quickly and got married very hastily, just like they divorced. The overall feeling given to me by Wenwen is that this is a story that is a collection of many stories, and no part of it is worth savoring. The author's writing style is naturally excellent, and I hope that the author will use his own unique writing style to reveal the ending for us. Finally I will continue to read this article if I like it. Please don't update carelessly after the college entrance examination. Come on, good luck in the college entrance examination. I wish you good results and wait for you to come back -v- By___good products&somepian
其实你是满脑子的威武雄壮的汉子和肉质鲜美吧…哎哟，这男淫终于出现了……我到底要把他当女人看还是当小受看…醉酒谈政治神马的…咳~这同学也算是一只风流不羁离经叛道的闺秀吧…
Damn those eyes, that one is a mystery~
The data received this time is too large. My memory space seems to be insufficient, and the system is stuck. So, my memory elf's name is Wu An? Why did you come up with such a name... Wuan... Wang... … Suddenly I feel that this is the rhythm to blackmail my surname Wang...
Huang Jiamin loves you, loves you~
"Yinglong Xangu, I am willing to smear my master's liver and brains... After a hundred years, the pus and blood will be my bait..." TWT is... Annoying! ! ! ! ! ! Such a cute and cruel feeling! ! ! ! ! My daughter is so annoying! ! ! ! Come over and spank me! ! ! ! ! !
Zombies come back from the dead, snakes mutate, what kind of society is this! Animals are more powerful than humans!
The description is spot on and the wording is also very good. Come on.
It's a rare good article~ I decided to give it a try! Why did you lock it? Looking forward to your updates~~
Jiang, I like your writing very much. I hope you will continue to work hard. I will come to see you every day~~ If not, I will go to Lian Cheng to read it, hahaha~ I really like the style of your writing. It is lighthearted and funny but not trivial. There are many places that made me laugh~~ Although this is your first article, I think it is quite good after seeing it now. Of course, you will definitely make more progress, I believe in you! And I've added you to your group, guess which one I am~ I hope Jiang you will work hard and work hard! We will also cheer you on! !
真不愧后面标注的一波N折了~~
The content is very exciting. When will it be updated?
To be honest, when I first read this article by Dengzhan, I admired your writing style from the bottom of my heart. Sincerely, there are so many words that I couldn't have imagined even if I took out the Chinese language skills that were the highest in my college entrance examination! ! Not to mention now, hey, if you maintain this style until the end, that would be really amazing! Also, don't take other people's misinterpreted comments to heart. You have to know that there are many popular people, and some people like it, but some people will not understand it. In this world, no one is perfect, and naturally there is no solution that has the best of both worlds. All you need to do is ignore it! ! Well, ignore it! ! Hee hee, having said that, the girl Xueruo Bai you created is really stupid and cute. I can't make any progress even if I get knocked unconscious by stealing books. I can even be knocked unconscious by chasing Lady Ziwei. When I look at this, I really don't know whether to laugh or cry. Also, were those people standing aside to watch the fun? Look at our stupid Xueruobai girl's oily soles and her mother hitting the fairy shield hard? Haha, I'm laughing so hard here. It's said that those who are obsessed with the authorities know better by others. You, Xue Ruobai, are too "obsessed"! Haha~~ But oh, if we hadn't been knocked unconscious, we wouldn't have had the doting care of Lady Ziwei. It really makes people envious and jealous. However, our dear Ruobai children's shoes, can you be more reserved and correct your little problems when sleeping? Hehe, otherwise, would you be able to sleep soundly in your arms without any clothes or shoes? Hahahaha~~ It is your own fault and you will not live... It is also here that the lively plot is interspersed with Ziwei Xingjun's faint heartache and memories. The occasional care shown by this person who has always been as plain as water really makes people feel warm and sad at the same time. Maybe I'm overthinking it, Ziwei, do you cherish Ruobai because she was her in the previous life, or because she is little Xue Ruobai? At the same time, I am also worried that if Xue Ruobai really repairs her soul, will Xue Ruobai still be Xue Ruobai? Is it still the original Xue Ruobai who likes Ziwei Xingjun and is cute and stupid? She remembered everything she had with Ziwei in the past. Will she forget her parents' hatred? Remembering the entanglements in her previous life, will she still accept the love-hate relationship with Ziwei? Do you still remember the hazy and pure love when you were a little mink? If you hide in this life, then I will just chase you to heaven and earth, and there will be no place to hide. Everything is just cause and effect. If there is no cause, there will be no result. If there is cause, there will be a result. Everything in the world is just like this. In this case, I will give you a cause in exchange for the result that I have not obtained after millions of years. I like this sentence very much. Cause and effect bring about consequences. It expresses Ziwei's longing for her. I just hope that in the next life, they can be together well. No matter what happens, just like what is written on the lamp, there is only the sound of boiling water in the hall and the faint fragrance of tea. I think they can enjoy such a beautiful artistic conception forever. Also, Chen Lian and Siming Xingjun, I also hope that they can have a good ending, the sentence "What is a loss when you love someone? What is not a loss? Just love, why do you have to think so much?" I really like it. Love is like this. When you love deeply, you have long forgotten that there is another me. Only with him in your life can there be sunshine. There is only one dazzling person left in the world! Dengzhan, how dare you not give happiness to such a person! ! ! Otherwise, I will chase you to the ends of the earth with a baseball bat! ! !