Come and take a look to cheer me up, your update speed is too slow, people who are waiting are still anxious... I can have more words in each chapter... But students understand...
Next, let's talk about the writing style. Yun Xiu's character is not well portrayed. Maybe he wants to write it more coldly? But it feels a bit wooden and not very expressive. The heroine feels silly and doesn't have the slightest flavor of a heroine. Maybe it's to give the heroine a growth process? The writing is too sketchy in some places. Although it is a quick summary that makes it easy to read, it is too brief and lacks detailed descriptions that make it difficult to tell where the foreshadowing is and where the plot is. It feels more or less like running water. Also, there are too few characters. At this point, few characters have appeared, which makes people less interested in reading. You are writing about martial arts, but at this point, the romance is more intense. Maybe it's because it's just the beginning? The plot is not very new, but it is still sloppy. When writing, I need to prioritize and strengthen some adjustments and details. Although the content of each chapter is linked to the title, the summary of the content is not attractive at all, and it does not make people want to read it. The key points are not well written. Please take the time to read more books and learn to describe things. To write martial arts well, you have to pay more attention to historical and political knowledge, otherwise it will be written by a novice. This is not to say that novices are not good, but do you want to write martial arts in your style? You need to change it later. There are also issues like life experience in the first chapter, which are not well connected. Please pay attention.
Finally, I want to remember to proofread the article before publishing it. Don't wait for readers to point out typos... There are also problems with paragraphing and formatting. If you don't know, you will think you are piracy. Haha, this is your first time writing an article. This is not bad. Come on! I support what you said and will never abandon the article! Take good care of you!
Sir, in the new year, I cried while watching "Tuyi Chapter"...
I think love is such silent giving! Whether you are suspected of being harmed or not...
I hope everyone in this article is happy~~~~
This male protagonist is not worth it~
Just looking at it makes me want to slap him~
Silin died just like that? ! Woo hoo, no, please let Xunxun come back to life, okay? ?
Such a gentle man died. . . . It's really sad. . . .
Khan,,, hate Yuzuki Xin,,,,,,,, such a disgusting woman. . . . Jian,,,,,,,,,,
Hehe, it's a side story about Fox King and Si Fan! ! ! ! !
Beautiful short story XD But did Uni die in the original novel?
I haven't read the original work and I'm a little confused in understanding the plot.
I still unconsciously want to give an update...
Sister You's monologue is well written. . . Thinking back to the time when we broke up made me burst into tears.
The conversation between Ren xx and Xiaoxuan was really disgusting to me and narcissistic to a certain level. But this dialogue is not as well written as the previous one.
In short, it looks a bit distorted, and it can be seen that Sister You is not a narcissistic person, so the writing looks a bit amateurish.
In these two chapters, Miss Mei is really brilliant. The final farewell scene is very beautiful. Finally, the terrifying image of being an insect mother has been washed away - Miss Mei has made a clean exit~
I'm back, my teeth are itching~~~
To be honest, I like this cp very much. The characters written by Da Da are very realistic. After reading this article, I went to read all the ones I wrote before. I almost cried in two articles. Anyway, your writing is very good. I am willing to create new works.
It's over so soon
Bubbling for updates~~
The evil spirits are gone!!
Jiangnan~~Nowadays, we are both newbies. Can you please allow me to collect it first~~Ah~~Anyway, I have already collected it if I don't agree~~You must work hard~~I like to watch the children's shoes who are also newcomers grow up with me~~Communicate in the future~~
. Wusuyan.
Is it... A trap...?
Haha, top, top, top!
Although this girl is a bit older, she is still very cute! Even though Shikamaru was smart, he couldn't resist this second strength, and he was helpless!
Compared with other Naruto fanfics, the angle of this article is quite unconventional! I was really shocked by Mary Su Wen! ! ! I can't afford to hurt Mary Sue's baby! ! !
Having said that, Xiao Lanlan still has a long way to go! Keep up the good work!
Someone's USB flash drive is missing, and all the words I coded are gone!
Not bad. Kiss me and support you~~·
Mr. Mu Shu has arrived and he is one of them.
The first two chapters make people feel very good (I firmly refuse to admit that it is because of the H in the first chapter that I feel good...). I have collected them and will try my best to update them! ~
Come and take a look to cheer me up, your update speed is too slow, people who are waiting are still anxious... I can have more words in each chapter... But students understand... Next, let's talk about the writing style. Yun Xiu's character is not well portrayed. Maybe he wants to write it more coldly? But it feels a bit wooden and not very expressive. The heroine feels silly and doesn't have the slightest flavor of a heroine. Maybe it's to give the heroine a growth process? The writing is too sketchy in some places. Although it is a quick summary that makes it easy to read, it is too brief and lacks detailed descriptions that make it difficult to tell where the foreshadowing is and where the plot is. It feels more or less like running water. Also, there are too few characters. At this point, few characters have appeared, which makes people less interested in reading. You are writing about martial arts, but at this point, the romance is more intense. Maybe it's because it's just the beginning? The plot is not very new, but it is still sloppy. When writing, I need to prioritize and strengthen some adjustments and details. Although the content of each chapter is linked to the title, the summary of the content is not attractive at all, and it does not make people want to read it. The key points are not well written. Please take the time to read more books and learn to describe things. To write martial arts well, you have to pay more attention to historical and political knowledge, otherwise it will be written by a novice. This is not to say that novices are not good, but do you want to write martial arts in your style? You need to change it later. There are also issues like life experience in the first chapter, which are not well connected. Please pay attention. Finally, I want to remember to proofread the article before publishing it. Don't wait for readers to point out typos... There are also problems with paragraphing and formatting. If you don't know, you will think you are piracy. Haha, this is your first time writing an article. This is not bad. Come on! I support what you said and will never abandon the article! Take good care of you!
Sir, in the new year, I cried while watching "Tuyi Chapter"... I think love is such silent giving! Whether you are suspected of being harmed or not... I hope everyone in this article is happy~~~~
This male protagonist is not worth it~ Just looking at it makes me want to slap him~
Silin died just like that? ! Woo hoo, no, please let Xunxun come back to life, okay? ? Such a gentle man died. . . . It's really sad. . . .
Khan,,, hate Yuzuki Xin,,,,,,,, such a disgusting woman. . . . Jian,,,,,,,,,,
Hehe, it's a side story about Fox King and Si Fan! ! ! ! !
Beautiful short story XD But did Uni die in the original novel? I haven't read the original work and I'm a little confused in understanding the plot.
I still unconsciously want to give an update...
Sister You's monologue is well written. . . Thinking back to the time when we broke up made me burst into tears. The conversation between Ren xx and Xiaoxuan was really disgusting to me and narcissistic to a certain level. But this dialogue is not as well written as the previous one. In short, it looks a bit distorted, and it can be seen that Sister You is not a narcissistic person, so the writing looks a bit amateurish.
In these two chapters, Miss Mei is really brilliant. The final farewell scene is very beautiful. Finally, the terrifying image of being an insect mother has been washed away - Miss Mei has made a clean exit~
I'm back, my teeth are itching~~~
To be honest, I like this cp very much. The characters written by Da Da are very realistic. After reading this article, I went to read all the ones I wrote before. I almost cried in two articles. Anyway, your writing is very good. I am willing to create new works.
It's over so soon
Bubbling for updates~~ The evil spirits are gone!!
Jiangnan~~Nowadays, we are both newbies. Can you please allow me to collect it first~~Ah~~Anyway, I have already collected it if I don't agree~~You must work hard~~I like to watch the children's shoes who are also newcomers grow up with me~~Communicate in the future~~ . Wusuyan.
Is it... A trap...?
Haha, top, top, top!
Although this girl is a bit older, she is still very cute! Even though Shikamaru was smart, he couldn't resist this second strength, and he was helpless! Compared with other Naruto fanfics, the angle of this article is quite unconventional! I was really shocked by Mary Su Wen! ! ! I can't afford to hurt Mary Sue's baby! ! ! Having said that, Xiao Lanlan still has a long way to go! Keep up the good work! Someone's USB flash drive is missing, and all the words I coded are gone!
Not bad. Kiss me and support you~~·
Mr. Mu Shu has arrived and he is one of them.
The first two chapters make people feel very good (I firmly refuse to admit that it is because of the H in the first chapter that I feel good...). I have collected them and will try my best to update them! ~