A certain person likes [Trembling Lover Undefended],
I just know very little about MS.
[Hide Morimoto] Dear,
Please forgive me for my fictitious writing~!
God bless the watch and it was scolded so badly~!
Haha~!
Flashed~! ! !
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You can't imagine how I felt when I saw this article on Pie Pai and followed it! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Stamp! Stamp! ! Stamp! ! ! I want you to disappear! ! ! !
It's really self-defeating. . . There is also a vague feeling of being a spy. . . . Well, please ignore me. . .
\"Since one infidelity will never be tolerated", why should the heroine forgive that Ouyang? Let her ex-husband always be her ex-husband! That Ouyang cheated on him for whatever reason. Was he being raped by someone else when he climbed into another woman's bed? And there is more than one woman. If the heroine did not file for divorce, she would probably still be fooling around with other women. What's the use of regretting it now? Why not do it earlier? When he was fooling around with women outside, why didn't he think that his infidelity violated the heroine's limit? Ouyang was the one who brought it upon himself and deserves no forgiveness! There is also the heroine, no matter whether she loved Ouyang or not when Ouyang married her, the heroine did not behave inappropriately and did not feel sorry for the hero during the marriage. Since she tried her best and ended up getting divorced because of Ouyang's affair, she no longer has a holy mother mentality like guilt! The most BS is a man like Ouyang. He didn't want to marry at the beginning, but he didn't take it seriously after he got married. If there was a major conflict in the marriage, he could file for divorce if it couldn't be resolved. He vented his anger by cheating and fooling around with other women, and then regretted it afterwards. What a scumbag! The heroine has seen this Ouyang's nude photos with her own eyes. Isn't it disgusting? Wouldn't she feel dirty and want to vomit when she is with a scumbag like Ouyang again?
"Xiao... Xiaohai, are you a sufferer?"
"... Yes, Xiaoshan..."
"Yoga da!"
Dear... I really can't find Nai in the group... I'm still still F. H in the group... The points have been assigned. I'll delete this reply after reading it...
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1. The foundation of the spell is the trust of both parties - and the specific manifestation is the request for the name.
There is no doubt that between "Harry" and "Salazar", he prefers the latter in his heart, if Salazar himself does not give him a curse for "disrespecting the elders by calling them by their first names".
——————It should be said that the "Name Key Spell" requires both parties to address each other? Because as mentioned later, "I allow you to call me Potter, Mr. Potter, savior, golden boy... And so on... Whatever you want, you can." "... He only came back to his senses when the effect of the Name Key Spell was a little looser but still functioning perfectly." However, it takes some attention to connect the context. Maybe this sentence can be changed to be more obvious?
2. Harry seemed to notice his hesitation. He raised his hand and quickly flashed a few ancient magic words in his mouth to set up a restriction.
————The purpose of setting up the ban is to prevent eavesdropping or to convince the professor that Xiao Ha leaked secrets. This is a bit vague. Although it seems from the following that it should be to prevent eavesdropping, I still feel it is a bit vague. Maybe it's just my feeling, please ignore it or...
3. Harry shuddered and almost jumped up to curse Snape.
————After watching it a few times, I realized it was Harry's sleep alert... Maybe it could be made more vivid? Ignore me...
4. Aran Gaunt, Dautray (Dautray Prince)
————Can you make a list of semi-original characters in the chapters where they appear, because in the first few chapters when they appear, everyone may not be able to figure out who is who. By the way, I hope that when you mention the name of some supporting characters, can you list his or her full name or surname in parentheses? Because for example, Dautray, many people may not immediately realize that this is Dautray Prince, the prefect from thousands of years ago and the ancestor of the Prince family who appeared in the previous article. So can it be written like this - Dautray (Dautray·Prince) or Dautray (Prince)?
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If my presumptuous message has caused trouble to you, I will be extremely sorry and will make sure it doesn't happen again.
Of course, if my presumptuous and crude suggestions can help in any way, I would be extremely grateful.
Thank you for your hard work~~
8. Who is Guonai in the group... Can you leave me a message on Q to clarify?
You can't imagine how I felt when I saw this article on Pie Pai and followed it! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Stamp! Stamp! ! Stamp! ! ! I want you to disappear! ! ! !
It's really self-defeating. . . There is also a vague feeling of being a spy. . . . Well, please ignore me. . .
\"Since one infidelity will never be tolerated", why should the heroine forgive that Ouyang? Let her ex-husband always be her ex-husband! That Ouyang cheated on him for whatever reason. Was he being raped by someone else when he climbed into another woman's bed? And there is more than one woman. If the heroine did not file for divorce, she would probably still be fooling around with other women. What's the use of regretting it now? Why not do it earlier? When he was fooling around with women outside, why didn't he think that his infidelity violated the heroine's limit? Ouyang was the one who brought it upon himself and deserves no forgiveness! There is also the heroine, no matter whether she loved Ouyang or not when Ouyang married her, the heroine did not behave inappropriately and did not feel sorry for the hero during the marriage. Since she tried her best and ended up getting divorced because of Ouyang's affair, she no longer has a holy mother mentality like guilt! The most BS is a man like Ouyang. He didn't want to marry at the beginning, but he didn't take it seriously after he got married. If there was a major conflict in the marriage, he could file for divorce if it couldn't be resolved. He vented his anger by cheating and fooling around with other women, and then regretted it afterwards. What a scumbag! The heroine has seen this Ouyang's nude photos with her own eyes. Isn't it disgusting? Wouldn't she feel dirty and want to vomit when she is with a scumbag like Ouyang again?
"Xiao... Xiaohai, are you a sufferer?" "... Yes, Xiaoshan..." "Yoga da!"
Dear... I really can't find Nai in the group... I'm still still F. H in the group... The points have been assigned. I'll delete this reply after reading it... ===================================================================== 1. The foundation of the spell is the trust of both parties - and the specific manifestation is the request for the name. There is no doubt that between "Harry" and "Salazar", he prefers the latter in his heart, if Salazar himself does not give him a curse for "disrespecting the elders by calling them by their first names". ——————It should be said that the "Name Key Spell" requires both parties to address each other? Because as mentioned later, "I allow you to call me Potter, Mr. Potter, savior, golden boy... And so on... Whatever you want, you can." "... He only came back to his senses when the effect of the Name Key Spell was a little looser but still functioning perfectly." However, it takes some attention to connect the context. Maybe this sentence can be changed to be more obvious? 2. Harry seemed to notice his hesitation. He raised his hand and quickly flashed a few ancient magic words in his mouth to set up a restriction. ————The purpose of setting up the ban is to prevent eavesdropping or to convince the professor that Xiao Ha leaked secrets. This is a bit vague. Although it seems from the following that it should be to prevent eavesdropping, I still feel it is a bit vague. Maybe it's just my feeling, please ignore it or... 3. Harry shuddered and almost jumped up to curse Snape. ————After watching it a few times, I realized it was Harry's sleep alert... Maybe it could be made more vivid? Ignore me... 4. Aran Gaunt, Dautray (Dautray Prince) ————Can you make a list of semi-original characters in the chapters where they appear, because in the first few chapters when they appear, everyone may not be able to figure out who is who. By the way, I hope that when you mention the name of some supporting characters, can you list his or her full name or surname in parentheses? Because for example, Dautray, many people may not immediately realize that this is Dautray Prince, the prefect from thousands of years ago and the ancestor of the Prince family who appeared in the previous article. So can it be written like this - Dautray (Dautray·Prince) or Dautray (Prince)? ==================================== If my presumptuous message has caused trouble to you, I will be extremely sorry and will make sure it doesn't happen again. Of course, if my presumptuous and crude suggestions can help in any way, I would be extremely grateful. Thank you for your hard work~~ 8. Who is Guonai in the group... Can you leave me a message on Q to clarify?
This is a short story, right......