"I remember when I was young, you loved to play and I loved to make trouble, and I fell asleep without realizing it. I don't know how many flowers fell in my dream" +
I fell madly in love with this fictional character - Hisoka
I stayed up all night in front of the computer weaving my love for him, dreaming of being the woman next to him. As long as I could see him, I would be willing to die.
This time, I didn't leave the computer for three days in a row. I didn't eat, drink or sleep + my fingers were typing on the keyboard thinking about him.
I thought silently for the ten thousandth time, it would be nice to see him even in my dream... Finally, I fell asleep...
When I woke up, I turned into another woman in the same bed as Hisoka! In shock, I slapped Hisoka hard, and he broke my neck without hesitation... I suddenly woke up in front of the computer, it turned out to be a dream... I felt a little disappointed... So I fell asleep again... But when I opened my eyes again, I became Hisoka's pillow again! What's going on? ? ! !
Hisoka's narrow and charming phoenix eyes narrowed dangerously: "... It's you again... How should I deal with you? Hmm?"
The first time and the second time I was dressed as Hisoka's bedmate, died once, fell asleep once and came back... The third time I learned from the pain and wore it on a fixed person, but that person turned out to be...=+=|||
Intention: All wishes come true
Reader comments
It's good-looking, good-looking, and the characterization is great. It's so cute that you don't realize you fall in love at first sight. Thank you for the recommendation! ! ! !
I love this style so much~!
I, I, I... I was frightened! Did I reverse CP? QAQ
People surnamed Peng always come out to stir things up. When will the heroine and the male pig have a romantic drama? Damn, you didn't give up, did you? It's a beautiful article! ! !
I went back to school today~ I will update next Saturday. I love you all.
Return my princess? Acknowledge? Folding fan? Smoke and rain picture? The writing is good, little Yangyang!
The writing is quite true, but I feel like I can't understand it. Hahaha woo woo ?
Hahaha, I'm suffering from embarrassment. It's really not easy to be a female lead. I've read too many novels about pretentious entanglements and male protagonists. This kind of female protagonist who doesn't care about her life for love is even more popular with me. It would be great if Hirako was the second male protagonist...
What! ! ! ! ! ! Finished it so hastily? ! ! ! ! ! Not happy! ! ! ! ! !
I was still excited to find an article about dog deer chicken blood and found out that TAT has not been updated in half a year.
You won't be fooled anymore, tears
Looks very interesting ~ looking forward to it ~
I want it so much, I want it so much, I want it so much, I want it so much, I want to watch the extras, come on! Looking forward to it
Come on, I like this article very much, but you can find an editor to sign a contract. Such a good article should be read by more people.
I love every character! !
Hahahahahahahahaha you saw me
LLhahahahahaha
Long review of "Retrograde Walker"
Hello, author, this is commentator Xiaobu.
I feel honored to receive the great letter. I will comment on your content from Chapters 1 to 15, I hope it will be of great help.
To be honest, I think you are definitely a clear figure in the romance industry in Jinjiang. There are four reasons.
First, there are very few male protagonists in Jinjiang, but this one is. Romance readers are mostly female, so it is inevitable to assume that they are the heroines when reading the novel. Describing the male protagonist or love from the female protagonist's perspective is more "sophisticated" and more "provocative". The male protagonist's perspective is too challenging for writing. I looked through the list of urban youth apps today, and most of them are female protagonists. It turns out that female protagonist texts are more conducive to data growth.
Of course, if you are generating electricity for love, just pretend that I didn't say anything.
Second, the rhythm of the article. Before I read this article, almost all new writers had a common problem - slow writing. But you don't have this problem. The pace of your articles is surprisingly fast! Unexpectedly, in Chapter 6, the heroine, whom they had not known for long, confessed her feelings to the hero, and in the blink of an eye, in Chapter 12, they were together!
Chapter 12, just over 30,000 words long. In other romance novels, the male and female protagonists are still in the ambiguous stage, but the big male and female protagonists are actually together.
At this time, I couldn't help but wonder, what will be the plot after graduation?
Looking carefully at the content of each chapter, the narrative pace is too fast, and many things that can be extended and written are mostly mentioned in one stroke, a bit like a running account. This is a great pity.
Therefore, the narrative pace is too fast.
What are the consequences of going too fast? The character's emotional development is rather abrupt. As far as the novel is concerned, there is not enough preparation for the relationship between the male and female protagonists, and there is not much interaction. In the sixth chapter, the female protagonist confesses her feelings, and readers will only find it baffling.
In this regard, my suggestion is to set up more plots, increase interactions, and have more antagonistic scenes, so that the emotional scenes between the male and female protagonists will naturally develop.
Third, great writing style. At first glance, Da Da's writing style is very rough and reveals a rustic flavor [Don't Shoot Me], but after looking into it, it has a different flavor when you read it again. When I read one chapter, I felt that the author must be young due to the great taste in word choice and sentence making. But after seeing some of the plot arrangements later on, I found that although the overall pace was too fast, there were no logical loopholes in the plot and everything developed smoothly. In addition, some of the complaints are particularly interesting and can make people smile. So I was confused again. Such a plot should not be written by a primary school student. All in all, it's still great.
But to be honest, there are only a few readers in Jinjiang who like this style of writing. Many people quit before finishing the first chapter.
I think that while maintaining your own personal style, you can refine your words and sentences, use as few words as possible, and increase descriptive sentences as appropriate to make the writing style more enjoyable.
Fourth, personality. Firefighters paired with big stars, this kind of CP has precedent in Jinjiang. If the male protagonist is a firefighter by profession, the general character is that of a rough guy, but the most common character is that of a handsome man who is not willing to be a vase. I actually like this setting because it is innovative. Innovation is a good idea.
In summary, the above four points are both positive and negative. What do you think of the issues I mentioned?
Finally, what I want to say is great copywriting. The large copywriting is a bit careless. Referring to the articles on the Jinjiang list, write a cute and sweet copy, maybe it will be better for the data.
Okay, that's all I have to say. Although the long review has a short word count, it basically covers all the points to be said. I wish you a better and better writing career.
[Hua Zhi Su Nuan Long Review Shop: Small Steps]
Poor Ayou Xiaokuoai
Daily call, I miss you!
There is an unspeakable feeling of powerlessness, some misunderstandings, some misses, and some indescribable sadness.
It's good-looking, good-looking, and the characterization is great. It's so cute that you don't realize you fall in love at first sight. Thank you for the recommendation! ! ! !
I love this style so much~!
I, I, I... I was frightened! Did I reverse CP? QAQ
People surnamed Peng always come out to stir things up. When will the heroine and the male pig have a romantic drama? Damn, you didn't give up, did you? It's a beautiful article! ! !
I went back to school today~ I will update next Saturday. I love you all.
Return my princess? Acknowledge? Folding fan? Smoke and rain picture? The writing is good, little Yangyang!
The writing is quite true, but I feel like I can't understand it. Hahaha woo woo ?
Hahaha, I'm suffering from embarrassment. It's really not easy to be a female lead. I've read too many novels about pretentious entanglements and male protagonists. This kind of female protagonist who doesn't care about her life for love is even more popular with me. It would be great if Hirako was the second male protagonist...
What! ! ! ! ! ! Finished it so hastily? ! ! ! ! ! Not happy! ! ! ! ! !
I was still excited to find an article about dog deer chicken blood and found out that TAT has not been updated in half a year. You won't be fooled anymore, tears
Looks very interesting ~ looking forward to it ~
I want it so much, I want it so much, I want it so much, I want it so much, I want to watch the extras, come on! Looking forward to it
Come on, I like this article very much, but you can find an editor to sign a contract. Such a good article should be read by more people.
I love every character! !
Hahahahahahahahaha you saw me LLhahahahahaha
Long review of "Retrograde Walker" Hello, author, this is commentator Xiaobu. I feel honored to receive the great letter. I will comment on your content from Chapters 1 to 15, I hope it will be of great help. To be honest, I think you are definitely a clear figure in the romance industry in Jinjiang. There are four reasons. First, there are very few male protagonists in Jinjiang, but this one is. Romance readers are mostly female, so it is inevitable to assume that they are the heroines when reading the novel. Describing the male protagonist or love from the female protagonist's perspective is more "sophisticated" and more "provocative". The male protagonist's perspective is too challenging for writing. I looked through the list of urban youth apps today, and most of them are female protagonists. It turns out that female protagonist texts are more conducive to data growth. Of course, if you are generating electricity for love, just pretend that I didn't say anything. Second, the rhythm of the article. Before I read this article, almost all new writers had a common problem - slow writing. But you don't have this problem. The pace of your articles is surprisingly fast! Unexpectedly, in Chapter 6, the heroine, whom they had not known for long, confessed her feelings to the hero, and in the blink of an eye, in Chapter 12, they were together! Chapter 12, just over 30,000 words long. In other romance novels, the male and female protagonists are still in the ambiguous stage, but the big male and female protagonists are actually together. At this time, I couldn't help but wonder, what will be the plot after graduation? Looking carefully at the content of each chapter, the narrative pace is too fast, and many things that can be extended and written are mostly mentioned in one stroke, a bit like a running account. This is a great pity. Therefore, the narrative pace is too fast. What are the consequences of going too fast? The character's emotional development is rather abrupt. As far as the novel is concerned, there is not enough preparation for the relationship between the male and female protagonists, and there is not much interaction. In the sixth chapter, the female protagonist confesses her feelings, and readers will only find it baffling. In this regard, my suggestion is to set up more plots, increase interactions, and have more antagonistic scenes, so that the emotional scenes between the male and female protagonists will naturally develop. Third, great writing style. At first glance, Da Da's writing style is very rough and reveals a rustic flavor [Don't Shoot Me], but after looking into it, it has a different flavor when you read it again. When I read one chapter, I felt that the author must be young due to the great taste in word choice and sentence making. But after seeing some of the plot arrangements later on, I found that although the overall pace was too fast, there were no logical loopholes in the plot and everything developed smoothly. In addition, some of the complaints are particularly interesting and can make people smile. So I was confused again. Such a plot should not be written by a primary school student. All in all, it's still great. But to be honest, there are only a few readers in Jinjiang who like this style of writing. Many people quit before finishing the first chapter. I think that while maintaining your own personal style, you can refine your words and sentences, use as few words as possible, and increase descriptive sentences as appropriate to make the writing style more enjoyable. Fourth, personality. Firefighters paired with big stars, this kind of CP has precedent in Jinjiang. If the male protagonist is a firefighter by profession, the general character is that of a rough guy, but the most common character is that of a handsome man who is not willing to be a vase. I actually like this setting because it is innovative. Innovation is a good idea. In summary, the above four points are both positive and negative. What do you think of the issues I mentioned? Finally, what I want to say is great copywriting. The large copywriting is a bit careless. Referring to the articles on the Jinjiang list, write a cute and sweet copy, maybe it will be better for the data. Okay, that's all I have to say. Although the long review has a short word count, it basically covers all the points to be said. I wish you a better and better writing career. [Hua Zhi Su Nuan Long Review Shop: Small Steps]
Poor Ayou Xiaokuoai
Daily call, I miss you!
There is an unspeakable feeling of powerlessness, some misunderstandings, some misses, and some indescribable sadness.