A young man entering college,
A man who has been in business for a long time,
A boy with same-sex complex,
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What kind of life will they perform in four years?
Where to go?
Conception:
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Ahhhhh, okay! Good! (Unconscious) More for five bucks! !
It looks good. Spread some flowers and try your best~↖(^ω^)↗↖(^ω^)↗
Sir, I stayed up very late last night to watch Birds~
First, let me talk about my feelings after watching it. I've only read half of the third story, so I haven't gotten much of it yet, but the first two stories are very good!
After watching the first two, I suddenly felt a sense of melancholy about life, thinking that I was young and old in the blink of an eye. I once remembered that when I was young, one was gentle, the other was delicate, the other was elegant, and the other was sentimental. In the end, the yin and yang were always separated, and the steps were biased.
I feel that there is no emotion in the world that is not tolerated by the world. The reason lies in myself. I did not love deeply enough and firmly enough, so I ended up with a lifetime of regrets.
Reading through the whole article, the adult's language is very beautiful, gorgeous and sad. When I saw the copy, I thought of a novel called Floating Life. Later, when I read the text carefully, it was as expected. But the story of the adult is more profound and touching than the book that has been published. I prefer the ancient story of the adult with helplessness!
Let's talk about the structure. There are no bugs in the first story, but the number of words is limited, and I always felt that the characters were not vivid enough. I also have a feeling that since Chang'an is an old goblin, even if he doesn't know the magic, all the goblins want to hurt him. I think he is very hard-working, really. But who asked him to buy the story? On the other hand, maybe he has different opinions, and maybe he brought it on himself by meddling in other people's affairs.
Also, Agui killed Young Master Li because he fell in love with someone else's rich lady. There is no problem, but it is a bit far-fetched to kill Young Master Li ruthlessly. It is best for adults to use more words to describe this kind of intense inner struggle. It always feels a bit abrupt and hasty when it is written in one stroke, which makes people feel that this story should be finished quickly so that they can move on to the next story.
The second story, relatively speaking, is much better than the first one. It doesn't feel far-fetched or rushed, and the description is more delicate and better. Moreover, the name Qing Chang is well chosen, and the person is also good. I like him very much, and the ecstasy exudes from my bones.
But after reading this story, there are still a few things I don't understand. The first one is why Qing Chang wanted to find Chang'an? He wanted to explain it by selling the story to Chang'an, but he always felt that it was not that simple. Maybe he wanted Chang'an to create a dream at the end, but why didn't he tell the truth at the beginning when he asked for it? Chang'an woke up from his dream that night. What did the piece of skin torn from his heart mean?
Also, is love a human being or a ghost? He should be considered a human after being reborn, but why is his face still covered in paint? People don't have to be like this, right? At least he should be allowed to reveal a few aspects of his true appearance, which would make him more realistic. But if he becomes a demon, it is best not to use the word rebirth, as it will cause misunderstanding.
The last question that puzzles me the most is, why is half of the soul of the beloved mother in Chang'an's heart? I've never been able to figure this out. I'm just confused. The author must have a reason for arranging it this way, right?
Well, finally I want to talk about the overall feeling. Your writing style is really good, and many of your sentences are very enjoyable to read~
But there is still a small flaw, which is that it gives people a flashy feeling. It means that there are too many descriptions, which affects the original coherence of the story. Moreover, I also noticed a problem. When adults describe old women, they always use one word: the charm is still there. I think it's enough to use this word once or twice. When you meet another woman, you should change it to another word, so that you don't look tired and the image is vivid.
When Huan Bao and Chang An were bickering, they didn't need to talk like an old goblin. If they talked too much, they would feel a little green.
Having said so much, please forgive me for any incomprehensible or unpleasant words, because I think this article is really good, and I hope you can write better and better!
Also, why did you stop updating for so long? The third story is stuck in such a place again. It's so sad. Please update it quickly! Just wait and see!
Finally, I sincerely wish you that your writing will get better and better, your writing will flourish, and your dragon will grow brighter!
Ouch! Ouch! ! ! My son! ! You compensate my brother Sheng Huan!
I saw this in one breath, it's time to go eat
... Means where did the first two chapters go? ? ? ? ? It means that the previous plot has been forgotten. . . . .
The author has been reading this post about Tropical Night for a long time. Do you have the author's contact information?
I grabbed the sofa and came back after dinner!!!
The first time I didn't post my comment, I had to start over. I finally made a breakthrough and everyone came to my door, oh yeah~
It's the Year of the Snake. Can you update more? Looking forward to it
Appreciating the moon. , Sometimes I really can't think too much. . .
Leave a message first
I just remember that Gui is a person with a soft heart.
Don't tell me I'm so stupid...
Don't be so cruel... QQ
Have the male and female protagonists known each other before?
The sofa, um, is just missing a bit. Speaking of which, why does it always get stuck in wonderful places?
Xiao Linzi must have fallen in love with Su Yan, right?
Show off your power, long awaited~
I knew that father had no good intentions!!!
Welcome back (*^__^*) Heehee~~
Sama's three-dimensional godfather! We are waiting for you here~~The post-95 generation are all in their twenties~An Xin (o′ω`o)ノ [Touch] sama's cute anus~
Make up points~~~Spread flowers~~~
La, Qinghong knows who she likes? !
The heart of the handsome dancing man is broken...
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Even in shorts, he is still a handsome guy and a cute guy~
————————
In fact, UD, you are a mystery, really
————————
Erwei's money... Must have gone to support Brother Kang (I respect myself...
... Okay, Jinjiang smoked again, you can't see it outside.
Ah Jiu ran towards Feixue
This is a bit too fast. . . It doesn't look good like this! !
Quick, quick, quick...
Update soon...
If it weren't for the heroine, their mother and daughter would have been torn apart. With such an identity, there are many wolves, tigers and leopards around.
I just want to say... It's the most disgusting thing to use the mirror to shake off the baggage. QAQ makes us feel like we are being deceived without any suspense every time we watch it...
Ahhhhh, okay! Good! (Unconscious) More for five bucks! !
It looks good. Spread some flowers and try your best~↖(^ω^)↗↖(^ω^)↗
Sir, I stayed up very late last night to watch Birds~ First, let me talk about my feelings after watching it. I've only read half of the third story, so I haven't gotten much of it yet, but the first two stories are very good! After watching the first two, I suddenly felt a sense of melancholy about life, thinking that I was young and old in the blink of an eye. I once remembered that when I was young, one was gentle, the other was delicate, the other was elegant, and the other was sentimental. In the end, the yin and yang were always separated, and the steps were biased. I feel that there is no emotion in the world that is not tolerated by the world. The reason lies in myself. I did not love deeply enough and firmly enough, so I ended up with a lifetime of regrets. Reading through the whole article, the adult's language is very beautiful, gorgeous and sad. When I saw the copy, I thought of a novel called Floating Life. Later, when I read the text carefully, it was as expected. But the story of the adult is more profound and touching than the book that has been published. I prefer the ancient story of the adult with helplessness! Let's talk about the structure. There are no bugs in the first story, but the number of words is limited, and I always felt that the characters were not vivid enough. I also have a feeling that since Chang'an is an old goblin, even if he doesn't know the magic, all the goblins want to hurt him. I think he is very hard-working, really. But who asked him to buy the story? On the other hand, maybe he has different opinions, and maybe he brought it on himself by meddling in other people's affairs. Also, Agui killed Young Master Li because he fell in love with someone else's rich lady. There is no problem, but it is a bit far-fetched to kill Young Master Li ruthlessly. It is best for adults to use more words to describe this kind of intense inner struggle. It always feels a bit abrupt and hasty when it is written in one stroke, which makes people feel that this story should be finished quickly so that they can move on to the next story. The second story, relatively speaking, is much better than the first one. It doesn't feel far-fetched or rushed, and the description is more delicate and better. Moreover, the name Qing Chang is well chosen, and the person is also good. I like him very much, and the ecstasy exudes from my bones. But after reading this story, there are still a few things I don't understand. The first one is why Qing Chang wanted to find Chang'an? He wanted to explain it by selling the story to Chang'an, but he always felt that it was not that simple. Maybe he wanted Chang'an to create a dream at the end, but why didn't he tell the truth at the beginning when he asked for it? Chang'an woke up from his dream that night. What did the piece of skin torn from his heart mean? Also, is love a human being or a ghost? He should be considered a human after being reborn, but why is his face still covered in paint? People don't have to be like this, right? At least he should be allowed to reveal a few aspects of his true appearance, which would make him more realistic. But if he becomes a demon, it is best not to use the word rebirth, as it will cause misunderstanding. The last question that puzzles me the most is, why is half of the soul of the beloved mother in Chang'an's heart? I've never been able to figure this out. I'm just confused. The author must have a reason for arranging it this way, right? Well, finally I want to talk about the overall feeling. Your writing style is really good, and many of your sentences are very enjoyable to read~ But there is still a small flaw, which is that it gives people a flashy feeling. It means that there are too many descriptions, which affects the original coherence of the story. Moreover, I also noticed a problem. When adults describe old women, they always use one word: the charm is still there. I think it's enough to use this word once or twice. When you meet another woman, you should change it to another word, so that you don't look tired and the image is vivid. When Huan Bao and Chang An were bickering, they didn't need to talk like an old goblin. If they talked too much, they would feel a little green. Having said so much, please forgive me for any incomprehensible or unpleasant words, because I think this article is really good, and I hope you can write better and better! Also, why did you stop updating for so long? The third story is stuck in such a place again. It's so sad. Please update it quickly! Just wait and see! Finally, I sincerely wish you that your writing will get better and better, your writing will flourish, and your dragon will grow brighter!
Ouch! Ouch! ! ! My son! ! You compensate my brother Sheng Huan!
I saw this in one breath, it's time to go eat
... Means where did the first two chapters go? ? ? ? ? It means that the previous plot has been forgotten. . . . .
The author has been reading this post about Tropical Night for a long time. Do you have the author's contact information?
I grabbed the sofa and came back after dinner!!!
The first time I didn't post my comment, I had to start over. I finally made a breakthrough and everyone came to my door, oh yeah~
很好看的文~文笔也很好 大大您继续加油啊~ 期待更新~~
补分~~嘿嘿~ 确实 文笔很好~ 挺温馨的 我很喜欢 笔风很独立 少见的好文笔 祝大大新年文笔更上一层楼
It's the Year of the Snake. Can you update more? Looking forward to it
Appreciating the moon. , Sometimes I really can't think too much. . .
Leave a message first I just remember that Gui is a person with a soft heart.
Don't tell me I'm so stupid...
Don't be so cruel... QQ
Have the male and female protagonists known each other before?
The sofa, um, is just missing a bit. Speaking of which, why does it always get stuck in wonderful places? Xiao Linzi must have fallen in love with Su Yan, right?
Show off your power, long awaited~ I knew that father had no good intentions!!!
Welcome back (*^__^*) Heehee~~
Sama's three-dimensional godfather! We are waiting for you here~~The post-95 generation are all in their twenties~An Xin (o′ω`o)ノ [Touch] sama's cute anus~
Make up points~~~Spread flowers~~~
La, Qinghong knows who she likes? !
The heart of the handsome dancing man is broken... ———————— Even in shorts, he is still a handsome guy and a cute guy~ ———————— In fact, UD, you are a mystery, really ———————— Erwei's money... Must have gone to support Brother Kang (I respect myself...
... Okay, Jinjiang smoked again, you can't see it outside.
Ah Jiu ran towards Feixue
This is a bit too fast. . . It doesn't look good like this! !
Quick, quick, quick... Update soon...
If it weren't for the heroine, their mother and daughter would have been torn apart. With such an identity, there are many wolves, tigers and leopards around.
I just want to say... It's the most disgusting thing to use the mirror to shake off the baggage. QAQ makes us feel like we are being deceived without any suspense every time we watch it...