Wear it after sleeping in it?
Just wear it
What's this name?
Mei Xinyu, no credibility?
This. ． ． How can I mess around?
So I got angry
So I suddenly realized the ninth sense (one more sense than the eighth sense)
So my little universe exploded
Finally I did it. ． ．
(Xiao An: Khan, you are making such a big scene. Heart-warming: Can't do it? Look at me, Xiangshan has a shadow palm~ｐｉａ～Xiao An becomes a rising orangutan in the sky~ Uh, a new star... -＿-｜｜)
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The heroine's name was Cai Xinxin when she was alive. I don't know why my penis was having seizures. I firmly believe that the heroine's name was Cai Xin. Oh, I'm speechless...
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Reader comments
Come and join in when you are free and bored, take a look when you are lonely = =
I have always loved Nirvana-sama.
There will be no torture >_<
I don't read abuse articles~ (A little abuse is okay
1. About copywriting
[Mayonnaise] The style of the front and back of the copy is very inconsistent. It is recommended to remove the (last) half as appropriate.
[Chili Sauce]: The copy is too long, the second paragraph can be deleted. The font is mushy, I suggest you change the font.
[Shenxianjiang] The contrast between the two paragraphs of text in the copy is too great, so it is recommended to keep one paragraph. And at the beginning of the second paragraph, "If... If there is if", it is obvious that the punctuation marks are not used correctly. Although online articles do not have stricter control over punctuation than paper books, the face of an article is the copywriting. It's best to be standard in your usage of punctuation marks.
2. About the beginning of the article.
MayonnaiseThe wedge is too long and too artistic. It turns out that the author doesn't just use the two styles interchangeably in the copy? It is highly recommended to keep only the first paragraph. Because except for the sentence "The long figure embraces the beautiful person in front of me" from Luo Su, the rest of it is quite cute. In addition, I personally think that the biggest role of wedges is to give readers a good first impression, rather than spoiling the whole story or venting emotions that readers cannot yet understand.
[Chuangshanjiang] Wedge starts from daily life and returns to daily life. It feels like the author is trying hard to innovate and has certain ideas. However, there is some confusion among the four parts, which makes people confused about what the author wants to express. If the content at the two ends in the middle is sorted out and merged, will the context be clearer?
[Shenxianjiang] I don't know how many readers will be defeated by the author's wedge in the first chapter. What I want to say is that before the story begins, no matter how much lyricism is used, the effect will not be achieved. Because readers don't even know the author's story, how can they achieve emotional resonance with the characters in the article? It is impossible for readers to jump directly into the author's head to see the story. Therefore, placing such a wedge at the beginning will undoubtedly scare off a lot of people.
[Meiko-chan] I suggest you put some substantive content in the wedge, and be lyrical throughout... I don't understand what you want to express, Meizi, dear.
3. Regarding the novelty of the article.
[Chili Sauce]: The idea of Love Repair Company is very interesting, and the author's writing is smooth and very good. However, Chili Pepper is confused, can people who can't love continue to love just by changing the environment and virtual space? This virtual space is so powerful!
MayonnaiseAbout the setting of Love Repair Company. The settings still need further improvement. Just imagine, would two people who just met and wanted to deepen their relationship choose a company with this name? And do you need to make a reservation? Wouldn't it be better to just go see a movie? The name of the company alone confirms that it will not become a big hit, but it can kill customers in a small area. And although this idea is relatively new, why does it need a virtual environment? What benefits does a virtual environment provide to customers? What market are you facing? To give a simple example, for a couple living in two places, we can develop a concept to build a home in the virtual world for them. And in the concept of this love repair company, I don't see anything with clear market orientation.
4. About the article details.
[Gentle Sauce] Friendly advice is to standardize punctuation marks, reduce mental activity in flower arrangements, and remove pear blossoms.
Chili SauceOTZ! Surprisingly, "..." Replaced "..."! The ellipses are crying, dear! Please use punctuation marks correctly, dear! "The long figure embraces the beautiful person in front of her:" A colon should not be used here but a comma should be used.
[Mayonnaise] To be honest, Fu Weifeng doesn't feel like a major researcher, he is too out of touch.
[Meiko-chan] I suggest you change some adjectives. "Lonely and decisive" will give people a feeling of Su. There are also the names of the characters... Some names that are unlikely to appear. Please don't be obsessed with them. Change them, "Shenqi", "Night Butterfly" and so on...
[Plum Sauce] The layout is worthy of praise, it looks simple and clean.
[Gentle Sauce] The creativity is novel and unique, and the language is full of personal style.
5. Final summary.
[Mayonnaise] Overall, probably because this is the first article, the author still has a lot of room for improvement. What is most urgently needed is to unify the writing style and punctuation. In addition, we should consider our settings more carefully, and try our best to let readers experience the existence of the main line during the narrative process. Even if it is not possible, we should try our best to write with priority and tension, so that readers can feel as if they are personally there.
[Plum-chan] It can be seen that the author is still a novice, but the language used is quite appropriate and the layout is good. It is recommended to modify the punctuation and some too "Su" words to strengthen the main plot. It is a good choice to write an outline in advance~
[Shenxianjiang] The writing style is a bit stream-of-consciousness and the key points are not highlighted. It feels like Fu Weifeng's life diary. It may be the first time for the author to write an online article. You can read more and practice more, refine the language, and refine the plot and story.
Very well written O(∩_∩)O~
Come on
If you want to go on a date, it will turn into a carnival. Kane, you are really not lucky... At least choose a poetic place, a pub... Kneel down~
Alex's father found out that the daughter he had raised for a long time was going to be taken away by his companions, so he was about to explode~~~
This reminds me of an interesting little theater~
................................................................................. Below~
The Templar Commander found out that his deputy was coveted, and couldn't hold back his anger, so he held a competition to recruit a bride.
Alex (using a loud voice): As long as you can defeat the dragon guarding the gate at the end, you can go on a date with the princess~ (Humph, even if you really win, you may not be able to meet in person~)
Raymond wearing a dragon costume Kuhaha: Roar~
Kane: Bastard Alex! He actually asked Raymond to be his thug~~
Alex (satisfied): Hahahaha~ give up~~
Kane: Let's see who has the last laugh... (After running to find the Titans and so on...)
One of his subordinates came to Alex in a hurry: It's not good, Knight Commander... (Say a few words in his ear)
Alex: Good on you Kane! (Ran away in anger)
Raymond looked around and ran away. The two people who had a successful date were drinking tea and admiring flowers in the garden.
Gerna: What happened?
Kane (smiling brightly): It's nothing, I just asked Master Titan to help the Templar Commander hold a competition to find a bride. Krall and Samuel are competing for the championship~
Alex yelled in the distance: Get out of here, damn! Chaos, get out of here too~~~~~~~~~~
................................................................................. Above~
Well, Anthony is working so hard, haha. Being a villain means you have to suffer from the second disease~~
Kane has a long road to pursue his wife, but the biggest obstacle is Alex. Hehehehe~~~~~~~~~
Come on~~~~~~~Spread flowers~~~~~~~
Well. . . Come on
That's it…
Jealousy, didn't Nen say that the person named Tian is a soy sauce worker? Why, she has come out again now, and Uncle Jin has such a bloody amnesia. Nen, Dang Nen, this article is a Korean drama. Ah~~~, if Nen is still such a bitch, I don't mind beating Nen awake. I hear you, please hurry up and let Uncle Jin be normal. The drama about the bitterness of Qiong Yao's grandma is so good that he can be removed from the scene. I hope he can return to normal in the next chapter.
Touching my forehead, so tender, it really hurts my heart as a girl who just finished her exam. My heart is made of glass, I can't even hear it. Ahhhh~~~
Is she really going to be a concubine named Sun? But it's good to have brothers. I guess the old man won't agree easily for Master Liu's sake. Having a sister who is a concubine will affect Master Liu's future!
Come and join in when you are free and bored, take a look when you are lonely = =
I have always loved Nirvana-sama. There will be no torture >_< I don't read abuse articles~ (A little abuse is okay
1. About copywriting [Mayonnaise] The style of the front and back of the copy is very inconsistent. It is recommended to remove the (last) half as appropriate. [Chili Sauce]: The copy is too long, the second paragraph can be deleted. The font is mushy, I suggest you change the font. [Shenxianjiang] The contrast between the two paragraphs of text in the copy is too great, so it is recommended to keep one paragraph. And at the beginning of the second paragraph, "If... If there is if", it is obvious that the punctuation marks are not used correctly. Although online articles do not have stricter control over punctuation than paper books, the face of an article is the copywriting. It's best to be standard in your usage of punctuation marks. 2. About the beginning of the article. MayonnaiseThe wedge is too long and too artistic. It turns out that the author doesn't just use the two styles interchangeably in the copy? It is highly recommended to keep only the first paragraph. Because except for the sentence "The long figure embraces the beautiful person in front of me" from Luo Su, the rest of it is quite cute. In addition, I personally think that the biggest role of wedges is to give readers a good first impression, rather than spoiling the whole story or venting emotions that readers cannot yet understand. [Chuangshanjiang] Wedge starts from daily life and returns to daily life. It feels like the author is trying hard to innovate and has certain ideas. However, there is some confusion among the four parts, which makes people confused about what the author wants to express. If the content at the two ends in the middle is sorted out and merged, will the context be clearer? [Shenxianjiang] I don't know how many readers will be defeated by the author's wedge in the first chapter. What I want to say is that before the story begins, no matter how much lyricism is used, the effect will not be achieved. Because readers don't even know the author's story, how can they achieve emotional resonance with the characters in the article? It is impossible for readers to jump directly into the author's head to see the story. Therefore, placing such a wedge at the beginning will undoubtedly scare off a lot of people. [Meiko-chan] I suggest you put some substantive content in the wedge, and be lyrical throughout... I don't understand what you want to express, Meizi, dear. 3. Regarding the novelty of the article. [Chili Sauce]: The idea of Love Repair Company is very interesting, and the author's writing is smooth and very good. However, Chili Pepper is confused, can people who can't love continue to love just by changing the environment and virtual space? This virtual space is so powerful! MayonnaiseAbout the setting of Love Repair Company. The settings still need further improvement. Just imagine, would two people who just met and wanted to deepen their relationship choose a company with this name? And do you need to make a reservation? Wouldn't it be better to just go see a movie? The name of the company alone confirms that it will not become a big hit, but it can kill customers in a small area. And although this idea is relatively new, why does it need a virtual environment? What benefits does a virtual environment provide to customers? What market are you facing? To give a simple example, for a couple living in two places, we can develop a concept to build a home in the virtual world for them. And in the concept of this love repair company, I don't see anything with clear market orientation. 4. About the article details. [Gentle Sauce] Friendly advice is to standardize punctuation marks, reduce mental activity in flower arrangements, and remove pear blossoms. Chili SauceOTZ! Surprisingly, "..." Replaced "..."! The ellipses are crying, dear! Please use punctuation marks correctly, dear! "The long figure embraces the beautiful person in front of her:" A colon should not be used here but a comma should be used. [Mayonnaise] To be honest, Fu Weifeng doesn't feel like a major researcher, he is too out of touch. [Meiko-chan] I suggest you change some adjectives. "Lonely and decisive" will give people a feeling of Su. There are also the names of the characters... Some names that are unlikely to appear. Please don't be obsessed with them. Change them, "Shenqi", "Night Butterfly" and so on... [Plum Sauce] The layout is worthy of praise, it looks simple and clean. [Gentle Sauce] The creativity is novel and unique, and the language is full of personal style. 5. Final summary. [Mayonnaise] Overall, probably because this is the first article, the author still has a lot of room for improvement. What is most urgently needed is to unify the writing style and punctuation. In addition, we should consider our settings more carefully, and try our best to let readers experience the existence of the main line during the narrative process. Even if it is not possible, we should try our best to write with priority and tension, so that readers can feel as if they are personally there. [Plum-chan] It can be seen that the author is still a novice, but the language used is quite appropriate and the layout is good. It is recommended to modify the punctuation and some too "Su" words to strengthen the main plot. It is a good choice to write an outline in advance~ [Shenxianjiang] The writing style is a bit stream-of-consciousness and the key points are not highlighted. It feels like Fu Weifeng's life diary. It may be the first time for the author to write an online article. You can read more and practice more, refine the language, and refine the plot and story.
Very well written O(∩_∩)O~ Come on
If you want to go on a date, it will turn into a carnival. Kane, you are really not lucky... At least choose a poetic place, a pub... Kneel down~ Alex's father found out that the daughter he had raised for a long time was going to be taken away by his companions, so he was about to explode~~~ This reminds me of an interesting little theater~ ................................................................................. Below~ The Templar Commander found out that his deputy was coveted, and couldn't hold back his anger, so he held a competition to recruit a bride. Alex (using a loud voice): As long as you can defeat the dragon guarding the gate at the end, you can go on a date with the princess~ (Humph, even if you really win, you may not be able to meet in person~) Raymond wearing a dragon costume Kuhaha: Roar~ Kane: Bastard Alex! He actually asked Raymond to be his thug~~ Alex (satisfied): Hahahaha~ give up~~ Kane: Let's see who has the last laugh... (After running to find the Titans and so on...) One of his subordinates came to Alex in a hurry: It's not good, Knight Commander... (Say a few words in his ear) Alex: Good on you Kane! (Ran away in anger) Raymond looked around and ran away. The two people who had a successful date were drinking tea and admiring flowers in the garden. Gerna: What happened? Kane (smiling brightly): It's nothing, I just asked Master Titan to help the Templar Commander hold a competition to find a bride. Krall and Samuel are competing for the championship~ Alex yelled in the distance: Get out of here, damn! Chaos, get out of here too~~~~~~~~~~ ................................................................................. Above~ Well, Anthony is working so hard, haha. Being a villain means you have to suffer from the second disease~~ Kane has a long road to pursue his wife, but the biggest obstacle is Alex. Hehehehe~~~~~~~~~ Come on~~~~~~~Spread flowers~~~~~~~
Well. . . Come on
That's it…
Jealousy, didn't Nen say that the person named Tian is a soy sauce worker? Why, she has come out again now, and Uncle Jin has such a bloody amnesia. Nen, Dang Nen, this article is a Korean drama. Ah~~~, if Nen is still such a bitch, I don't mind beating Nen awake. I hear you, please hurry up and let Uncle Jin be normal. The drama about the bitterness of Qiong Yao's grandma is so good that he can be removed from the scene. I hope he can return to normal in the next chapter. Touching my forehead, so tender, it really hurts my heart as a girl who just finished her exam. My heart is made of glass, I can't even hear it. Ahhhh~~~
Is she really going to be a concubine named Sun? But it's good to have brothers. I guess the old man won't agree easily for Master Liu's sake. Having a sister who is a concubine will affect Master Liu's future!
Well written! Come on and update!