Friends say she drags like a gust of wind.
But she preferred his sunny smile.
For more than ten years, she watched him silently. In the eyes of others, they are childhood sweethearts. However,
Lover? ! Friend? !
They are nothing! !
Maybe it's time for her to drift away like the wind``````
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Reader comments
Many comments pointed out problems with the article. The emotional scenes are really well written, and the descriptions are very graphic and make people sympathize.
The biggest problem with the novel is the plot. A lot of it is not explained clearly, and there is almost no mention of it in one or two strokes, and there are no side effects. It seems that the whole world is what the protagonist needs, so other people/things appear/happen suddenly, and the supporting characters are very tool-like. For example, Luo, initially wrote this to introduce Mrs. Huan Ping and her tiger, and then the protagonist investigated the tiger, but what role does this incident play? The first is to warm up the protagonist's emotions, and the second is to highlight Liang's curious and bold character and emphasize some of Jiang's previous characteristics. But the reader feels the same after reading it, because none of it is very obvious, there is a little bit but not much. This incident seems to have happened like this. We don't know anything about Huan Ping, we only know that she left the capital. This creates a very inexplicable event that adds very little to the plot and emotion.
This is just one example. Several of the supporting characters and stories written by the author are dispensable and inexplicable, so they look confusing because the readers don't know what this supporting character does or why this event happened. There is another problem, which someone also pointed out in the comment area. All the story developments are only mentioned a little bit, and then it falls apart. For example, why did the emperor like Liang so much and even indulged him? Why is Liang anorexic? Normally, it's just picky eating and irregular meals, far from being unable to eat. Why is he like this? What was the incident between Xi and his wife in his previous life? How did they end? As a young man from a rich family, why are Xiaogu being ridiculed around him? Is he having nothing to do, is he stupid, or is he interested? Etc., These issues are not explained clearly, there is almost no logic and story to be explored, the author just wrote this.
Finally, there are errors in the application of some words by the author, and the original meaning of some words is relatively ambiguous and should not be used. For example, after the death of Liang in the previous life, Jiang and Wang got acquainted and used the idiom "a match made in heaven." Therefore, the world would not use this idiom for Jiang and Wang, even if it later came to mean a naturally formed partner. I understand that the author may want to write about the plot that Jiang and Wang got acquainted and then Jiang thought about the deceased Liang and was in pain so he could not accept any new emotions. After reading the description of Wang, he did not seem to have any thoughts about Jiang other than friendship. So when using such ambiguous words, it is best to check the meaning first. It is really easy to cause misunderstandings. If the reader is reading well and suddenly says that there is a match made in heaven, won't the reader be shocked? This is like a quick blind date right after the death of your wife.
In short, this emotional book is far more beautiful than the plot. The description of emotions is very easy to empathize with. It will be better to practice the plot again. I would rather exchange two meaningless events for one meaningful event.
Kai Wen La [Spreading Flowers]
Xiao Xing, who lives in Wengxing, came to the world of comprehensive comics in the blink of an eye. What kind of sparks will be generated by the collision of different worlds [Let Me Be Healthy] and... Is there a deeper conspiracy hidden in all this? [Sunglasses]
Now you have a chance to get a red envelope by commenting on the first chapter [Spread Flowers]
Tips, collection makes it easier to follow updates! [Spread flowers]
In addition, there is a pre-release of the new article "It's not an R 18 game!" ", "What the hell is this crazy? Are all waiting to be collected! If you are interested, please click a little star [spread flowers]
Damn, when will it be updated? I'm so excited to see it.
I really, really like this story and the author's writing style! Even though it felt like it ended a bit suddenly, I still really want to watch the sequel. Come on, author, I will support you!
Teacher, did you delete Jinjiang?
Boss Nie can be the villain in another novel.
Sorry, I went to write a new article. Oh my god, the moment I dug a hole was so exciting. Oh, ho, ho, ho, ho, ho, ho, hoo, I'm back. When I'm done, I'll come back and continue writing.
Huh, do you know that almost Xiao Xu is little Newton Xu?
Support the addition of new members to the chocolate harem [let me be healthy] [let me be healthy] [let me be healthy]
I am the first to eat crabs
report
I don't charge any money for writing, and I'll be given red envelopes.
Uninstall jj and prepare for the exam. I hope to come back at the end of the year and see a big update [Come on] [Hahahahaha] [Compare your heart]
It's really good-looking [Orange Heart], I like it, please give it a try
"Le" is a big thorn in the side of the author~
Men give birth? Or call the girl daddy?
The review was so bad that I updated it [crying]
The heroine still wants to give away a house? But don't
Congratulations on the finale. Congratulations on the finale.
Many comments pointed out problems with the article. The emotional scenes are really well written, and the descriptions are very graphic and make people sympathize. The biggest problem with the novel is the plot. A lot of it is not explained clearly, and there is almost no mention of it in one or two strokes, and there are no side effects. It seems that the whole world is what the protagonist needs, so other people/things appear/happen suddenly, and the supporting characters are very tool-like. For example, Luo, initially wrote this to introduce Mrs. Huan Ping and her tiger, and then the protagonist investigated the tiger, but what role does this incident play? The first is to warm up the protagonist's emotions, and the second is to highlight Liang's curious and bold character and emphasize some of Jiang's previous characteristics. But the reader feels the same after reading it, because none of it is very obvious, there is a little bit but not much. This incident seems to have happened like this. We don't know anything about Huan Ping, we only know that she left the capital. This creates a very inexplicable event that adds very little to the plot and emotion. This is just one example. Several of the supporting characters and stories written by the author are dispensable and inexplicable, so they look confusing because the readers don't know what this supporting character does or why this event happened. There is another problem, which someone also pointed out in the comment area. All the story developments are only mentioned a little bit, and then it falls apart. For example, why did the emperor like Liang so much and even indulged him? Why is Liang anorexic? Normally, it's just picky eating and irregular meals, far from being unable to eat. Why is he like this? What was the incident between Xi and his wife in his previous life? How did they end? As a young man from a rich family, why are Xiaogu being ridiculed around him? Is he having nothing to do, is he stupid, or is he interested? Etc., These issues are not explained clearly, there is almost no logic and story to be explored, the author just wrote this. Finally, there are errors in the application of some words by the author, and the original meaning of some words is relatively ambiguous and should not be used. For example, after the death of Liang in the previous life, Jiang and Wang got acquainted and used the idiom "a match made in heaven." Therefore, the world would not use this idiom for Jiang and Wang, even if it later came to mean a naturally formed partner. I understand that the author may want to write about the plot that Jiang and Wang got acquainted and then Jiang thought about the deceased Liang and was in pain so he could not accept any new emotions. After reading the description of Wang, he did not seem to have any thoughts about Jiang other than friendship. So when using such ambiguous words, it is best to check the meaning first. It is really easy to cause misunderstandings. If the reader is reading well and suddenly says that there is a match made in heaven, won't the reader be shocked? This is like a quick blind date right after the death of your wife. In short, this emotional book is far more beautiful than the plot. The description of emotions is very easy to empathize with. It will be better to practice the plot again. I would rather exchange two meaningless events for one meaningful event.
Kai Wen La [Spreading Flowers] Xiao Xing, who lives in Wengxing, came to the world of comprehensive comics in the blink of an eye. What kind of sparks will be generated by the collision of different worlds [Let Me Be Healthy] and... Is there a deeper conspiracy hidden in all this? [Sunglasses] Now you have a chance to get a red envelope by commenting on the first chapter [Spread Flowers] Tips, collection makes it easier to follow updates! [Spread flowers] In addition, there is a pre-release of the new article "It's not an R 18 game!" ", "What the hell is this crazy? Are all waiting to be collected! If you are interested, please click a little star [spread flowers]
Damn, when will it be updated? I'm so excited to see it.
I really, really like this story and the author's writing style! Even though it felt like it ended a bit suddenly, I still really want to watch the sequel. Come on, author, I will support you!
Teacher, did you delete Jinjiang?
Boss Nie can be the villain in another novel.
Sorry, I went to write a new article. Oh my god, the moment I dug a hole was so exciting. Oh, ho, ho, ho, ho, ho, ho, hoo, I'm back. When I'm done, I'll come back and continue writing.
Huh, do you know that almost Xiao Xu is little Newton Xu?
Support the addition of new members to the chocolate harem [let me be healthy] [let me be healthy] [let me be healthy]
I am the first to eat crabs report
I don't charge any money for writing, and I'll be given red envelopes.
Uninstall jj and prepare for the exam. I hope to come back at the end of the year and see a big update [Come on] [Hahahahaha] [Compare your heart]
It's really good-looking [Orange Heart], I like it, please give it a try
"Le" is a big thorn in the side of the author~ Men give birth? Or call the girl daddy?
The review was so bad that I updated it [crying]
The heroine still wants to give away a house? But don't
Congratulations on the finale. Congratulations on the finale.