Hehe~~~ A very loving cuckold monster~ I just love to watch Wenwen with the scheming male protagonist~~ Touch [Can you guess who I am?
最近很忙啊啊啊啊啊啊……
打分飘过~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Have fun. Come on. I support you greatly.
The puppet feels that this is Tails' substitute for him. When he is not around that day, this chick "hatched" by him will stay with him on his behalf...
Mei'er, seventh brother is here~~
Girl! Go find him, you won't regret it many years later!
Otherwise, many, many years later you will find that your heart has long been lost in those fleeting years.
As long as he truly loves you, he must persist! Now distance is no longer distance. As long as you are with him, anywhere is home!
Real! Sister, I sincerely wish you happiness!
More than ten years ago, I was just like you, swinging from side to side not knowing whether to move forward or stop. Finally, I chose to stop. Although my life is good now and my husband is good, my heart can no longer be found. I don't want this, but I can't do anything about it!
Suddenly, I feel that Ah Zhu and Si Si are very sweet~~~~
Suddenly I discovered that Sasuke's character is what is often said to be "flat". . . Angry people to death will not pay for their lives
Haha... Zhang San and Li Si are so good~~~
54 Me, the exam is coming soon, I don't have time to update the article, but I will update it immediately after the exam. Please don't abandon me~~~
=V= ↑ 其实这里是荦……
Panda~ You finally changed it. I waited until the flowers withered~~ Speaking of which, I think Shang Rong and Lan Tian are somewhat similar. Lan Tian and I have almost the same personality~~so I often feel sad for Comrade Shang Rong~eh~
Looking forward to the author's reply in the next chapter:
Several chapters have been downloaded. . .
Well, there are examples like this around me. They have to face criticism from people after being rejected time and time again, but I found that they are really strong and still live bravely with their heads held high.
Come on, the author replied:
Thank you! I will work hard
I don't know what the following article is about, but I hope it is warm and romantic.
To the author
I'm a newbie here, so my first list is the author's article. Please give me your advice. The article was reviewed while I was reading it, and there were also deletions after reading it. The logic will be a bit confusing, and there will be a little nonsense in the middle, because Xiao Transparent doesn't read much about ancient style literature. If the author feels that some places are not like this, just skip it. Please forgive me, the author.
===============================================
The author's writing is very fluent, and there is no sense of dissonance in the whole article. I think the author either often writes this kind of articles, or he has very strong control over language.
The text feels like a storyteller: one person is in front of you, holding a cup of tea, and talking. The unique appeal of the storyteller is also attached to this text, making people enjoy it.
As the plot progresses, the settings and explanations are interspersed very appropriately, and the rhythm is well controlled. It can be seen that this article is full of love from the author.
===============================================
After reading two or three chapters, I found that, well, it seems that the author likes exclamations very much.
It is very common to express sighs in the description of the development of events and settings, and to imagine the author typing happily on the other side of the screen while looking at it [unconsciously imagining it (for example: the immortals of the heavenly world are divided into five categories and eleven levels), or to express how great something is (for example, Leng Yue Tianjun is the top type of god wearing a jade and golden phoenix at the top of the eleven categories of immortals)).
However, in the dialogue of most characters (no matter who they are), the exclamations sometimes appear to be a bit abrupt or inconsistent with the character's personality. For example:
"Leng Yue said: "There's nothing to think about! "
Leng Yuejun's image of being refined and handsome is shattered...
Leng Yue became impatient: "I like female fairies! "
What's going on with this arrogant Jishi Dare...
Ziqing felt a spring breeze blowing in her heart!
.. The other party's warmth and anger are indeed depicted, but Zi Qingjun seems to be very excited...
Ziqing said quickly: "Thank you, Lord Heaven, for forgiving Siyuan! "
With this exclamation mark, you have done a good job of imitating Zi Qing-kun's tone..."
So even if I prefer Exclamation Mark, sometimes it is flatter, which is more in line with the peaceful environment of heaven.
===============================================
When I followed Zi Qingjun to the Immortal Road and Xingqi Island, I felt that I saw a very beautiful fairy scene.
The mellow nobility and the prosperity of the streets correspond to the ancient beauty in the online game in my mind (I'm really sorry that the blueprint of the ancient street buildings only came from the game), and the liveliness of the bearded old man on Xingqi Island is even more amusing.
It seems that the author is very good at describing the environment, and his writing skills are indeed very good.
===============================================
Looking down again, seeing Mr. Ye Jiao from Siyue Tower chatting up Mr. Zi Qing and Fu Li from the Fortune Palace liking men, Little Transparent felt that it was unnecessary to explain to the male immortal in Siyue Tower and then remembered, ah, yes, this is Tanmei. As well as the supplements to the "Lotus Vase Book" later, it would be too cumbersome if it was just to show Lord Leng Yue's superiority.
The first such contact was a "near miss". There is not too much development, and seeing Leng Yuejun's doubts can be regarded as a foreshadowing for the rest of the story. I have to say that the author has a very good grasp of the plot, and he doesn't know how to move or delay, it is very natural.
===============================================
As the characters become more and more mature, the development of the story also becomes more vivid. Xiao Transparent thinks that the main line should be the investigation of Pencao Village, and the development should be accompanied by Ziqing's daily life. The article is beautiful, but unlike some BL articles that only focus on the relationship between the male and female protagonists, the plot is boring and weird. Even if it is an ancient style, it makes people like Xiao Transparent look forward to it.
And later on, the author uses less exclamation points, and it seems that the author has noticed it too.
===============================================
That's about it. Thank you to the author for reading this. If it helps the author in writing in the future, I would be really honored.
AND please go to Chenshihua | Changping Shop to place an order... Thank you =3=
By Xiao Transparent [Earthly Painting|Produced by Changpingpu]
2012.08.20
Update is the last word! !
Happy New Year, here comes the New Year. I wish you good health and smooth work in the New Year. All your wishes will come true. Come on.
Ahahahaha. ． ． ． Green Uncle Ganba Dad XD
Park Chang is really no zuo no die, and I have forgotten who Lu Yao Shenma is... Orz
为什么发两遍......
啊？没有啦，我都看完了！赶紧写哦，我在等呢 哈哈
大大写得好，撒花
YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
文学底蕴深厚，非常好
Hehe~~~ A very loving cuckold monster~ I just love to watch Wenwen with the scheming male protagonist~~ Touch [Can you guess who I am?
最近很忙啊啊啊啊啊啊…… 打分飘过~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Have fun. Come on. I support you greatly.
The puppet feels that this is Tails' substitute for him. When he is not around that day, this chick "hatched" by him will stay with him on his behalf...
Mei'er, seventh brother is here~~
Girl! Go find him, you won't regret it many years later! Otherwise, many, many years later you will find that your heart has long been lost in those fleeting years. As long as he truly loves you, he must persist! Now distance is no longer distance. As long as you are with him, anywhere is home! Real! Sister, I sincerely wish you happiness! More than ten years ago, I was just like you, swinging from side to side not knowing whether to move forward or stop. Finally, I chose to stop. Although my life is good now and my husband is good, my heart can no longer be found. I don't want this, but I can't do anything about it!
Suddenly, I feel that Ah Zhu and Si Si are very sweet~~~~
Suddenly I discovered that Sasuke's character is what is often said to be "flat". . . Angry people to death will not pay for their lives
Haha... Zhang San and Li Si are so good~~~
54 Me, the exam is coming soon, I don't have time to update the article, but I will update it immediately after the exam. Please don't abandon me~~~
=V= ↑ 其实这里是荦……
Panda~ You finally changed it. I waited until the flowers withered~~ Speaking of which, I think Shang Rong and Lan Tian are somewhat similar. Lan Tian and I have almost the same personality~~so I often feel sad for Comrade Shang Rong~eh~
Looking forward to the author's reply in the next chapter: Several chapters have been downloaded. . .
Well, there are examples like this around me. They have to face criticism from people after being rejected time and time again, but I found that they are really strong and still live bravely with their heads held high.
饿...米看过，其实偶在JJ追文时间很短……恩，偶还是很喜欢宝珠这种呆不拉唧的女性滴，对她的两个情郎不太爱好，却是爱死了不算恐怖的个个小故事，当然如果把情爱部分却掉些更好。 另外在碧水看过一个天津警察的故事，下笔平淡，讲述风格也缺少震撼，但是很真实，吸人呐…… 关于坑，毕竟偶才思太浅，虽然努力造就，可不一定就好看，咬牙养成不放弃就是了。
因为是学生，所以速度的原因请大家谅解，谢谢。 有误的地方，请给予改正。 ~……我爱你们……~
Come on, come on...
Come on, the author replied: Thank you! I will work hard
I don't know what the following article is about, but I hope it is warm and romantic.
To the author I'm a newbie here, so my first list is the author's article. Please give me your advice. The article was reviewed while I was reading it, and there were also deletions after reading it. The logic will be a bit confusing, and there will be a little nonsense in the middle, because Xiao Transparent doesn't read much about ancient style literature. If the author feels that some places are not like this, just skip it. Please forgive me, the author. =============================================== The author's writing is very fluent, and there is no sense of dissonance in the whole article. I think the author either often writes this kind of articles, or he has very strong control over language. The text feels like a storyteller: one person is in front of you, holding a cup of tea, and talking. The unique appeal of the storyteller is also attached to this text, making people enjoy it. As the plot progresses, the settings and explanations are interspersed very appropriately, and the rhythm is well controlled. It can be seen that this article is full of love from the author. =============================================== After reading two or three chapters, I found that, well, it seems that the author likes exclamations very much. It is very common to express sighs in the description of the development of events and settings, and to imagine the author typing happily on the other side of the screen while looking at it [unconsciously imagining it (for example: the immortals of the heavenly world are divided into five categories and eleven levels), or to express how great something is (for example, Leng Yue Tianjun is the top type of god wearing a jade and golden phoenix at the top of the eleven categories of immortals)). However, in the dialogue of most characters (no matter who they are), the exclamations sometimes appear to be a bit abrupt or inconsistent with the character's personality. For example: "Leng Yue said: "There's nothing to think about! " Leng Yuejun's image of being refined and handsome is shattered... Leng Yue became impatient: "I like female fairies! " What's going on with this arrogant Jishi Dare... Ziqing felt a spring breeze blowing in her heart! .. The other party's warmth and anger are indeed depicted, but Zi Qingjun seems to be very excited... Ziqing said quickly: "Thank you, Lord Heaven, for forgiving Siyuan! " With this exclamation mark, you have done a good job of imitating Zi Qing-kun's tone..." So even if I prefer Exclamation Mark, sometimes it is flatter, which is more in line with the peaceful environment of heaven. =============================================== When I followed Zi Qingjun to the Immortal Road and Xingqi Island, I felt that I saw a very beautiful fairy scene. The mellow nobility and the prosperity of the streets correspond to the ancient beauty in the online game in my mind (I'm really sorry that the blueprint of the ancient street buildings only came from the game), and the liveliness of the bearded old man on Xingqi Island is even more amusing. It seems that the author is very good at describing the environment, and his writing skills are indeed very good. =============================================== Looking down again, seeing Mr. Ye Jiao from Siyue Tower chatting up Mr. Zi Qing and Fu Li from the Fortune Palace liking men, Little Transparent felt that it was unnecessary to explain to the male immortal in Siyue Tower and then remembered, ah, yes, this is Tanmei. As well as the supplements to the "Lotus Vase Book" later, it would be too cumbersome if it was just to show Lord Leng Yue's superiority. The first such contact was a "near miss". There is not too much development, and seeing Leng Yuejun's doubts can be regarded as a foreshadowing for the rest of the story. I have to say that the author has a very good grasp of the plot, and he doesn't know how to move or delay, it is very natural. =============================================== As the characters become more and more mature, the development of the story also becomes more vivid. Xiao Transparent thinks that the main line should be the investigation of Pencao Village, and the development should be accompanied by Ziqing's daily life. The article is beautiful, but unlike some BL articles that only focus on the relationship between the male and female protagonists, the plot is boring and weird. Even if it is an ancient style, it makes people like Xiao Transparent look forward to it. And later on, the author uses less exclamation points, and it seems that the author has noticed it too. =============================================== That's about it. Thank you to the author for reading this. If it helps the author in writing in the future, I would be really honored. AND please go to Chenshihua | Changping Shop to place an order... Thank you =3= By Xiao Transparent [Earthly Painting|Produced by Changpingpu] 2012.08.20
Update is the last word! !
Happy New Year, here comes the New Year. I wish you good health and smooth work in the New Year. All your wishes will come true. Come on.
Ahahahaha. ． ． ． Green Uncle Ganba Dad XD
Park Chang is really no zuo no die, and I have forgotten who Lu Yao Shenma is... Orz