Two boys with completely different personalities and different paths in life. They are not related by blood but are surprisingly similar in appearance. Neither of them understands love. Neither of them believes that there can be love before the same sex. They both try their best to live a sane life. But in fact, life is not complicated and everything can be simpler.
I was a little surprised to see a BG article with the same name on the original homepage two days ago. Let me explain, I hope the adults who read the article will not get it wrong. The response to this article has always been good. It is also a relatively easy long article that I wrote. It was completed in mid-May 2004.
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Reader comments
Look at the clicks! Look at the clicks!
No matter how the watch is changed, the art will still have shortcomings, and no one can make it perfect. If you pursue perfection so much, you will become mJ sooner or later~~
.... Squatting on the sofa... Is it a sofa...
Come on, come on, come on~~~~~
Ah, it's over~ Although I don't leave messages often, I still follow it.
What is Salazar-san's ability?
It's not long before I finish reading~ But I'll give you flowers first
Judging from Emperor Zhui of the Song Dynasty, my favorite among the emperors of the Song Dynasty is that Renzong and Xiaozong have always had a bad impression of Zhao Gou, thinking that he was incompetent, cowardly, and liked to scheme. The murder of Yue Fei in Dali Temple is very disturbing. I didn't expect that he and Yue Fei had such a good relationship, and their hearts are very complicated. Thank you, the author, for giving us a different Zhao Gou. Ps: Can he?
Come on! ! ! Support ! ! ! !
The emperor will die in a few years. The future of seducing the emperor because of your card princess is really bleak.
Xiao Di, come on, come on, come on~~~~ Take your brother Feng away
To be honest, this is the most enjoyable death article I have ever read. Of course it was when I saw Jiu Ze committing suicide~~~~~~~~
I still love tragedy! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Nothing to say, just like it. Send points
Let's write about Chen Zui and Qu Xiang clicking each other! ! Bar! ! ! !
The last sentence made me feel helpless. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Is this the end? The ending seems too sudden
Sit on the sofa to show your support ~ I hope the heroine's Xiao Bai Jin will be over soon, sweat
I like Derek very much~~~~~Looking forward to an romantic encounter←. ←Will you be beaten up by President Bei? . .
Then this classmate =-= it would be more beneficial for you to express your opinion. ． ． ．
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I came to visit the great Ms. Black and White, who was almost mentally exhausted from sending the victims of the 512 earthquake to travel through time and space to comfort the earthquake victims. You don't allow ginseng and cock - I'm not old!
The non-duality in this article looks so scary that I can't even hide, so I don't dare to have an opinion. How to ensure personal safety if we get too close>_<Author's reply:
Oh--I modified it =-=. ． ． ．
What a heartbreaking story this is!
It's a bit too descriptive of the plot, but not deep enough in the description of emotions~~~
I feel the same way. After watching the second part, I fell in love with Blair, especially when she persuaded Chuck to come back upstairs. I also liked that black girl, whose name I forgot, who was Nate's girlfriend. She was really strong at the prom. I hated Little J from then on. This is really hurtful, for a girl.
Does Little C plan to hang out with this group of people for a while? I don't think it's easy to get in between them... And don't let any scandals happen~~ Think about it, every move you make may be exposed, this kind of life is really scary~~
This is the first time I read a Western fantasy novel in JJ. Because I feel that there is really no good fantasy novel to read in JJ. I usually go to Xiaoxiang or X point to read it. Now that I have read this article by Xiaochun and I like fantasy very much, I will continue reading.
Let's start with the comments and criticisms, which are my personal opinions:
The name problem may be due to my own reasons. I think the name is too complicated and difficult to remember.
The first chapter is worth talking about.
In fact, the description of the protagonist's past life at the beginning has been much more streamlined than your last article, and I didn't feel it was delayed, which deserves encouragement and recognition.
But I feel it in the mother's belly, and even talking about the feeling of a baby is a bit surprising. This can be completely covered in one sentence, or directly written about time traveling to the time of birth. This is the edge of my imagination.
Also, I hate men who hit women the most!
By the second chapter, Rui's character first appeared, and there were only two sentences that moved me: "Don't beg them, I don't care." And "Magister, what's that?"
A child who cares about his mother will always be a kind child, a child who doesn't care about rumors must be a strong child, and a child who can say that last sentence will have an unlimited future.
I like Rui.
Then, oh buy it!
Rui's husband was so cool when he first appeared. His words "trash" pierced my cute heart. Just protect Rui like this forever!
Then there is the interaction between the two of them. The performance is not bad. Xiu shows his strength and cares a little about Rui. Although this has not made me feel his love yet, it is the first time to meet each other after all, so take your time.
I won't write out the following chapters one by one since they are not special. Anyway, I enjoyed watching them together, especially when Xiu put on a posture like 'you idiot', and when Rui had his hair blown up, he looked like a kitten, but not too willful.
There will be a BOSS after every main line, and fantasy novels are about constantly getting stronger, killing small BOSSs, and finally killing the BOSS. This main line appeared at the right time, just a few days after Xiu appeared, and then Xiu felt that he was very familiar with him. This setting is very good.
Then... Let's fight the BOSS.
It's a normal fantasy novel, with a slow-burning emotional line. It doesn't have any characteristics, but I can't find any thorns in it. The plot can be said to be a bit bland. Maybe it's because I've read too many fantasy novels and am tired of aesthetics. But it can give me a little surging feeling when I'm passionate, which is still good.
The name is a trivial matter, but I think the characters can be shaped well. If the writing fails without the characters in the future, it will still become a good article. Passion is not an issue.
The key flaw lies in the control of the overall situation.
As soon as you wrote about a crowded place, it became a bit confusing. I couldn't even imagine the situation at that time, so this feeling makes people have the idea of skipping it and not reading it, which is a big disadvantage.
You need to overcome this, either by not writing some scenes so grandly, or by strengthening the overall control ability. The so-called control of the overall situation does not mean that you just write everyone. It will only make people feel irritated.
I haven't written any grand scenes, only small gunfights at most, and I don't think the writing is very good, so I can't give you any more opinions on this aspect.
But as a reader who often reads fantasy, I only suggest that you don't need to write everything in detail. You can use the protagonist's thoughts to set off the performances of others. This will be much simpler and refreshing.
Well, as a fantasy novel, less than 100,000 words is really too few. I only saw the tip of the iceberg and can't write more thoughts.
I only saw the one above. Everything else can be corrected, such as the name, the character, oh, by the way, and the long paragraphs of yours that I am a little tired of looking at. Maybe it's because I read too many articles today, and my eyes are a little tired. And you can simplify your modifying words a little. I love the gorgeous style very much, and I love the simple style even more. The semi-gorgeous and semi-simple style is not good.
As for Rui and Xiu, I just want to say that they are in good condition. I can't help but watch the interaction between the two of them again. It can arouse people's interest, especially Xiu's character. Don't collapse, don't give a devilish smile or anything.
OK, let's give a final summary and encouragement.
Overall control, names, paragraph by paragraph are the faults I picked out today.
The main plot and characters are okay, let's see how they develop in the future.
Set up great love, Xiu and Rui will have great love when they are not broken for the time being.
Already have a thousand words?
Finally, I'll make up some word count issues, book title issues, layout issues, and cover issues.
The title of the book is okay, I click it whenever I see it. After all, the word "mage" and the word "undead" are also my favorite points.
The copywriting looks a bit tired to me. Although it is a rant, it is still a bit too much. How about you reduce the font size by one size?
The cover... I'm sorry, I think it's broken, really broken.
Nice article, flowers support!
By the way, I like to laugh! ~Live a happy life~ Let the past pass.
I don't know why, but now I don't have much interest in romance novels. But! One of our own! We still need to support it. Anyone who doesn't support me will go to his/her house and kick in the door. Ps: If it's too far away, forget it!
Happy wedding! Be happy! ! !
Ning Lu loves you~~~! ! !
Haha, Xiao Ding also wants to have some space
Sika isn't born yet?
It looks good, it will be finished soon.
Counterattack failed! ! ! !
Am I the first reader of Little Pretty? Haha, I will always support my Little Pretty
Look at the clicks! Look at the clicks! No matter how the watch is changed, the art will still have shortcomings, and no one can make it perfect. If you pursue perfection so much, you will become mJ sooner or later~~
.... Squatting on the sofa... Is it a sofa...
Come on, come on, come on~~~~~
Ah, it's over~ Although I don't leave messages often, I still follow it.
What is Salazar-san's ability?
It's not long before I finish reading~ But I'll give you flowers first
Judging from Emperor Zhui of the Song Dynasty, my favorite among the emperors of the Song Dynasty is that Renzong and Xiaozong have always had a bad impression of Zhao Gou, thinking that he was incompetent, cowardly, and liked to scheme. The murder of Yue Fei in Dali Temple is very disturbing. I didn't expect that he and Yue Fei had such a good relationship, and their hearts are very complicated. Thank you, the author, for giving us a different Zhao Gou. Ps: Can he?
Come on! ! ! Support ! ! ! !
The emperor will die in a few years. The future of seducing the emperor because of your card princess is really bleak.
Xiao Di, come on, come on, come on~~~~ Take your brother Feng away
To be honest, this is the most enjoyable death article I have ever read. Of course it was when I saw Jiu Ze committing suicide~~~~~~~~ I still love tragedy! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Nothing to say, just like it. Send points
Let's write about Chen Zui and Qu Xiang clicking each other! ! Bar! ! ! !
The last sentence made me feel helpless. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Is this the end? The ending seems too sudden
Sit on the sofa to show your support ~ I hope the heroine's Xiao Bai Jin will be over soon, sweat
I like Derek very much~~~~~Looking forward to an romantic encounter←. ←Will you be beaten up by President Bei? . .
Then this classmate =-= it would be more beneficial for you to express your opinion. ． ． ． －－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－－ I came to visit the great Ms. Black and White, who was almost mentally exhausted from sending the victims of the 512 earthquake to travel through time and space to comfort the earthquake victims. You don't allow ginseng and cock - I'm not old! The non-duality in this article looks so scary that I can't even hide, so I don't dare to have an opinion. How to ensure personal safety if we get too close>_<Author's reply: Oh--I modified it =-=. ． ． ．
What a heartbreaking story this is!
It's a bit too descriptive of the plot, but not deep enough in the description of emotions~~~
I feel the same way. After watching the second part, I fell in love with Blair, especially when she persuaded Chuck to come back upstairs. I also liked that black girl, whose name I forgot, who was Nate's girlfriend. She was really strong at the prom. I hated Little J from then on. This is really hurtful, for a girl. Does Little C plan to hang out with this group of people for a while? I don't think it's easy to get in between them... And don't let any scandals happen~~ Think about it, every move you make may be exposed, this kind of life is really scary~~
This is the first time I read a Western fantasy novel in JJ. Because I feel that there is really no good fantasy novel to read in JJ. I usually go to Xiaoxiang or X point to read it. Now that I have read this article by Xiaochun and I like fantasy very much, I will continue reading. Let's start with the comments and criticisms, which are my personal opinions: The name problem may be due to my own reasons. I think the name is too complicated and difficult to remember. The first chapter is worth talking about. In fact, the description of the protagonist's past life at the beginning has been much more streamlined than your last article, and I didn't feel it was delayed, which deserves encouragement and recognition. But I feel it in the mother's belly, and even talking about the feeling of a baby is a bit surprising. This can be completely covered in one sentence, or directly written about time traveling to the time of birth. This is the edge of my imagination. Also, I hate men who hit women the most! By the second chapter, Rui's character first appeared, and there were only two sentences that moved me: "Don't beg them, I don't care." And "Magister, what's that?" A child who cares about his mother will always be a kind child, a child who doesn't care about rumors must be a strong child, and a child who can say that last sentence will have an unlimited future. I like Rui. Then, oh buy it! Rui's husband was so cool when he first appeared. His words "trash" pierced my cute heart. Just protect Rui like this forever! Then there is the interaction between the two of them. The performance is not bad. Xiu shows his strength and cares a little about Rui. Although this has not made me feel his love yet, it is the first time to meet each other after all, so take your time. I won't write out the following chapters one by one since they are not special. Anyway, I enjoyed watching them together, especially when Xiu put on a posture like 'you idiot', and when Rui had his hair blown up, he looked like a kitten, but not too willful. There will be a BOSS after every main line, and fantasy novels are about constantly getting stronger, killing small BOSSs, and finally killing the BOSS. This main line appeared at the right time, just a few days after Xiu appeared, and then Xiu felt that he was very familiar with him. This setting is very good. Then... Let's fight the BOSS. It's a normal fantasy novel, with a slow-burning emotional line. It doesn't have any characteristics, but I can't find any thorns in it. The plot can be said to be a bit bland. Maybe it's because I've read too many fantasy novels and am tired of aesthetics. But it can give me a little surging feeling when I'm passionate, which is still good. The name is a trivial matter, but I think the characters can be shaped well. If the writing fails without the characters in the future, it will still become a good article. Passion is not an issue. The key flaw lies in the control of the overall situation. As soon as you wrote about a crowded place, it became a bit confusing. I couldn't even imagine the situation at that time, so this feeling makes people have the idea of skipping it and not reading it, which is a big disadvantage. You need to overcome this, either by not writing some scenes so grandly, or by strengthening the overall control ability. The so-called control of the overall situation does not mean that you just write everyone. It will only make people feel irritated. I haven't written any grand scenes, only small gunfights at most, and I don't think the writing is very good, so I can't give you any more opinions on this aspect. But as a reader who often reads fantasy, I only suggest that you don't need to write everything in detail. You can use the protagonist's thoughts to set off the performances of others. This will be much simpler and refreshing. Well, as a fantasy novel, less than 100,000 words is really too few. I only saw the tip of the iceberg and can't write more thoughts. I only saw the one above. Everything else can be corrected, such as the name, the character, oh, by the way, and the long paragraphs of yours that I am a little tired of looking at. Maybe it's because I read too many articles today, and my eyes are a little tired. And you can simplify your modifying words a little. I love the gorgeous style very much, and I love the simple style even more. The semi-gorgeous and semi-simple style is not good. As for Rui and Xiu, I just want to say that they are in good condition. I can't help but watch the interaction between the two of them again. It can arouse people's interest, especially Xiu's character. Don't collapse, don't give a devilish smile or anything. OK, let's give a final summary and encouragement. Overall control, names, paragraph by paragraph are the faults I picked out today. The main plot and characters are okay, let's see how they develop in the future. Set up great love, Xiu and Rui will have great love when they are not broken for the time being. Already have a thousand words? Finally, I'll make up some word count issues, book title issues, layout issues, and cover issues. The title of the book is okay, I click it whenever I see it. After all, the word "mage" and the word "undead" are also my favorite points. The copywriting looks a bit tired to me. Although it is a rant, it is still a bit too much. How about you reduce the font size by one size? The cover... I'm sorry, I think it's broken, really broken.
Nice article, flowers support! By the way, I like to laugh! ~Live a happy life~ Let the past pass.
I don't know why, but now I don't have much interest in romance novels. But! One of our own! We still need to support it. Anyone who doesn't support me will go to his/her house and kick in the door. Ps: If it's too far away, forget it!
Happy wedding! Be happy! ! !
Ning Lu loves you~~~! ! !
Haha, Xiao Ding also wants to have some space
Sika isn't born yet?
It looks good, it will be finished soon.
Counterattack failed! ! ! !
Am I the first reader of Little Pretty? Haha, I will always support my Little Pretty