Didn't I just save a little brother on a whim, and then he was hit by a car, and my consciousness was knocked upside down. When I woke up, I found... I had traveled to... Want to know the content? Please read on for yourself~~~Oh haha~~~~~~ (Do you really deserve a beating?) Hahaha...
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So what -0- it's great to have the courage to write! !
So what... Basically Feitan is injured. . The heroine will not be allowed to live. . If there is no opportunity. According to common sense. The heroine should be instantly killed by Feitan= =|Although this fate is a bit tragic. .
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Fran is one of the candidates for the male lead ORZ~
All I can say is that if you haven't watched the anime and read this article directly, you will definitely not understand it.
In addition, there are too many typos. By the way, after you finish writing, won't you read it again to see if the sentences go smoothly?
This article feels like a plot synopsis, except that this synopsis contains a lot of dialogue.
The title of your article is "The Ordinary Journey of Kinomoto Sakuraxue". Your heroine is Kinomoto Sakuraxue, not Kinomoto Sakura, right?
From the beginning to the end, you are just telling the story, and then you insert a few words about the heroine. Most of them are talking about how Kinomoto Sakura is doing. Where is your heroine? There are no distinctive features at all, and there is not much description at all. It is solved in just one or two sentences.
Characters always come inexplicably, and then disappear inexplicably, just like Mei Ling, she flashed for a moment, and then disappeared again. For those who have never seen the animation, who knows who she is. There is no such character in the comics (I am referring to the original CLAMP Aunts, not the Chinese version of the comics based on the cartoons) To put it bluntly, instead of reading your article, I might as well watch the animation directly, that way it will be much clearer.
... So you still want to abuse me? [Rubbing face
All kinds of unhappiness=mouth=
So what -0- it's great to have the courage to write! ! So what... Basically Feitan is injured. . The heroine will not be allowed to live. . If there is no opportunity. According to common sense. The heroine should be instantly killed by Feitan= =|Although this fate is a bit tragic. .
□//Www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=833253 Fran is one of the candidates for the male lead ORZ~
All I can say is that if you haven't watched the anime and read this article directly, you will definitely not understand it. In addition, there are too many typos. By the way, after you finish writing, won't you read it again to see if the sentences go smoothly? This article feels like a plot synopsis, except that this synopsis contains a lot of dialogue. The title of your article is "The Ordinary Journey of Kinomoto Sakuraxue". Your heroine is Kinomoto Sakuraxue, not Kinomoto Sakura, right? From the beginning to the end, you are just telling the story, and then you insert a few words about the heroine. Most of them are talking about how Kinomoto Sakura is doing. Where is your heroine? There are no distinctive features at all, and there is not much description at all. It is solved in just one or two sentences. Characters always come inexplicably, and then disappear inexplicably, just like Mei Ling, she flashed for a moment, and then disappeared again. For those who have never seen the animation, who knows who she is. There is no such character in the comics (I am referring to the original CLAMP Aunts, not the Chinese version of the comics based on the cartoons) To put it bluntly, instead of reading your article, I might as well watch the animation directly, that way it will be much clearer.
... So you still want to abuse me? [Rubbing face All kinds of unhappiness=mouth=