This is a mistake.
The trainee priest has always been confused, and this is not the first time he has made a mistake. No one expected it at all. It's just to embarrass the summoned sacrifice, yes, it's you, please sit back and wait to be slaughtered.
The nanny of the baby dragon, the pillow of the little priest, the toy of the elf... Really, please wait to be slaughtered.
Conception:
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Taking into account the general situation of WW articles in recent years, I take a closer look at the orange...
So I won't say much about the copywriting. Let's use code to make the cover smaller.
After reading it five times, I found the following problems -
The first is the diary narrative mode of this article.
The advantage of the diary style is that it avoids the description of big scenes that I am not good at. The disadvantage is that it is easy to jump between some plots and the transition is not clear (if the plot development is regarded as a trinity relationship between dots, lines and surfaces, then the girl's article is just connecting the dots to form a line, but without surfaces). The overall feeling is that this article is more like an outline than a novel.
In addition, for Japanese comics with competition plots such as WW, the author can use their strengths and avoid weaknesses to write emotional dramas, and use the emotional entanglements and changes between the male and female protagonists to support the backbone of the article, thus getting rid of the problem of empty plots.
Secondly, what impressed Orange the most in this article was the author's persistence in [Purple].
"Purple", purple hair, purple eyes, purple elf, purple bracelet... Purple... Purple...
Every time the male protagonist faces the female protagonist, the word "purple" appears. The same thing is repeatedly described in the short story. I think readers are prone to aesthetic fatigue.
In addition, there is also the author's creation of characters.
Yukimura Seiichi in this article sometimes makes readers think that the male protagonist is an original character wearing the skin of the original character.
I really appreciate the author's description of Seiichi Yukimura in the first three chapters. His psychological activities are real and reasonable, and there is no sense of femininity in the male characters written by other fan authors. However, after the fourth chapter, the image of the male protagonist changed, and what was difficult for Orange to accept was that every time the male protagonist had an emotional exchange with the female protagonist, the author would have an emotional exchange with the female protagonist, and he would also continue to complain in brackets (to be honest, many readers did not like the author's appearance in the article, which would affect the sense of substitution). This self-defeating dialogue mode made Orange feel slightly chilly. For example, when Grandpa Tsukijo was selling his granddaughter to the male protagonist, Yukimura Seiichi was still very reluctant and uninterested, but soon the next chapter was about the male protagonist [I suddenly felt a little uncomfortable, and she was a little self-conscious at least, okay? She is now my female companion, and she is still daydreaming about Tezuka] [In this case , I will let you give up your love for Tezuka and throw yourself into my arms wholeheartedly]... Orange has a heart-breaking statement, we love these two-dimensional anime characters because of the character traits given to them by the original works. If we see the characters we like become unrecognizable in a certain article, we will definitely not feel good.
Finally, there are the details O(∩_∩)O that poke the orange thunder. I would like the author to consider a few of them.
[It's the pair of purple eyes that are similar to mine] [The seemingly ordinary little face] This sentence is repeated several times in just a few chapters.
[Her smile is sweet, as if flowing purple, and instantly smooth, her seemingly ordinary little face is made beautiful by a patch of purple] Orange went to Baidu to find out that the "flowing purple spread" is the original creation of Fengye girl. Orange understands it this way: smile → purple flowing (hair?) → Small face → purple. Could it be that the heroine and the Avatar are related? ! After seeing it, my friend couldn't help complaining: I know that if I put a blue plate underneath when taking pictures, my face will turn blue. So it's usually white. Then the heroine should have a purple base under her chin.
[Quickly releasing the "polyester" in my hand, I hold the hilt of the sword tightly, and the human sword becomes one] =Dan= No explanation, please imagine Ultraman shouting to the little monster, "Suffer death, you monster"...
[Master Yukimura, I may need to trouble you, because according to the positioning system on the lady's mobile phone, your current location is only 50 meters away from the villa. You just need to go southeast. Seeing this orange almost spit out blood, 50 meters! What is the concept of 50 meters? ! ! The male protagonist is looking for the female protagonist on a mountain road without street lights, and it turns out that "50 meters away" is the luxurious villa of the rich and powerful female protagonist! ! ! Heaven! Yukimura Seiichi, are you highly myopic and astigmatism, or are you suffering from blue and white presbyopia and cataracts? Can't you feel any light from this distance? Even if people advocate green environmental protection, save energy and don't turn on the lights, such a huge building is standing there, you can still see a little bit by the moonlight (50 meters, 50 meters, 50 meters, 50 meters...)
To sum up, if we can get rid of the problems of "upper body male protagonist" and "point-and-line plot", Orange believes that this article will still be very interesting. This is the opinion of the Orange GN family. If there is anything inappropriate in the comments, please don't point it out carelessly. Thank you!
Ah. . . The legendary pit? Why doesn't Mao Dada update? Please update quickly! !
It's really fun to read both long and short stories.
You are finally back... Uncle is such a waste...
Uh huh huh
Why is there still fog at the critical moment?
No, no, I want a clear version
Ahhh, I love this article~ Good luck to the author, I will keep following it~~~
Haha. Same as scattering flowers, and the same author's reply:
O(∩_∩)O~
But please open the lock. 5555......
How pitiful, alas, my dear, I feel like you have seen the plot somewhere in this question.
Ah? Can't laugh or cry? Isn't this called dumbfounding? This means that the sky should not be used and the earth and the earth should not work..
I also want to make a point. My article has only been updated to chapter 33. Why does TO look at the data from the scholar and see that it has reached chapter 50!
I don't understand very much!
If you want to frame this guy, find a clever way. At least delete all the data after chapter 33 and then post it again!
Suddenly for no reason
No amount of love will ever satisfy you
I miss your features, I think of them vaguely
It unknowingly poisoned me
Suddenly I need protection very much
If I still have sadness, let the wind blow it away
If I still have happiness
Maybe.
--Faye Wong's "Don't Stay"
The more you care about someone, the more careful you are in comforting them.
On the contrary, I can't even hold back a kiss.
I don't want to do this over and over again
Anyway, everyone is lonely in the end
I'm thinking about what kind of taste I need to have with my future girlfriend, sweat
It's just a matter of scoring...
Update the article! ! ! I can't wait! ! ! I want to read the article! ! ! If you don't have anything to show me, I'll go to shit! ! ! Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!
I'm also very cold, she's actually Ren's cousin
Is the water updated every week? ? ?
Anyway, let's update quickly
It's pretty good
Have potential
However
Gone?
No love. Why did Wanwan become like this? What a bloody soul-obsessed person. The author replied:
The point is that in this paragraph, the plot has finally developed rapidly, provided that it is under your supervision, hehe
Not bad, looking forward to future developments~!
Haha... It's such a sweet moment at the end...
Hehe~~
The weather is hot kiddoo~~~Drink more water... Don't look at the computer for too long...
Taking into account the general situation of WW articles in recent years, I take a closer look at the orange... So I won't say much about the copywriting. Let's use code to make the cover smaller. After reading it five times, I found the following problems - The first is the diary narrative mode of this article. The advantage of the diary style is that it avoids the description of big scenes that I am not good at. The disadvantage is that it is easy to jump between some plots and the transition is not clear (if the plot development is regarded as a trinity relationship between dots, lines and surfaces, then the girl's article is just connecting the dots to form a line, but without surfaces). The overall feeling is that this article is more like an outline than a novel. In addition, for Japanese comics with competition plots such as WW, the author can use their strengths and avoid weaknesses to write emotional dramas, and use the emotional entanglements and changes between the male and female protagonists to support the backbone of the article, thus getting rid of the problem of empty plots. Secondly, what impressed Orange the most in this article was the author's persistence in [Purple]. "Purple", purple hair, purple eyes, purple elf, purple bracelet... Purple... Purple... Every time the male protagonist faces the female protagonist, the word "purple" appears. The same thing is repeatedly described in the short story. I think readers are prone to aesthetic fatigue. In addition, there is also the author's creation of characters. Yukimura Seiichi in this article sometimes makes readers think that the male protagonist is an original character wearing the skin of the original character. I really appreciate the author's description of Seiichi Yukimura in the first three chapters. His psychological activities are real and reasonable, and there is no sense of femininity in the male characters written by other fan authors. However, after the fourth chapter, the image of the male protagonist changed, and what was difficult for Orange to accept was that every time the male protagonist had an emotional exchange with the female protagonist, the author would have an emotional exchange with the female protagonist, and he would also continue to complain in brackets (to be honest, many readers did not like the author's appearance in the article, which would affect the sense of substitution). This self-defeating dialogue mode made Orange feel slightly chilly. For example, when Grandpa Tsukijo was selling his granddaughter to the male protagonist, Yukimura Seiichi was still very reluctant and uninterested, but soon the next chapter was about the male protagonist [I suddenly felt a little uncomfortable, and she was a little self-conscious at least, okay? She is now my female companion, and she is still daydreaming about Tezuka] [In this case , I will let you give up your love for Tezuka and throw yourself into my arms wholeheartedly]... Orange has a heart-breaking statement, we love these two-dimensional anime characters because of the character traits given to them by the original works. If we see the characters we like become unrecognizable in a certain article, we will definitely not feel good. Finally, there are the details O(∩_∩)O that poke the orange thunder. I would like the author to consider a few of them. [It's the pair of purple eyes that are similar to mine] [The seemingly ordinary little face] This sentence is repeated several times in just a few chapters. [Her smile is sweet, as if flowing purple, and instantly smooth, her seemingly ordinary little face is made beautiful by a patch of purple] Orange went to Baidu to find out that the "flowing purple spread" is the original creation of Fengye girl. Orange understands it this way: smile → purple flowing (hair?) → Small face → purple. Could it be that the heroine and the Avatar are related? ! After seeing it, my friend couldn't help complaining: I know that if I put a blue plate underneath when taking pictures, my face will turn blue. So it's usually white. Then the heroine should have a purple base under her chin. [Quickly releasing the "polyester" in my hand, I hold the hilt of the sword tightly, and the human sword becomes one] =Dan= No explanation, please imagine Ultraman shouting to the little monster, "Suffer death, you monster"... [Master Yukimura, I may need to trouble you, because according to the positioning system on the lady's mobile phone, your current location is only 50 meters away from the villa. You just need to go southeast. Seeing this orange almost spit out blood, 50 meters! What is the concept of 50 meters? ! ! The male protagonist is looking for the female protagonist on a mountain road without street lights, and it turns out that "50 meters away" is the luxurious villa of the rich and powerful female protagonist! ! ! Heaven! Yukimura Seiichi, are you highly myopic and astigmatism, or are you suffering from blue and white presbyopia and cataracts? Can't you feel any light from this distance? Even if people advocate green environmental protection, save energy and don't turn on the lights, such a huge building is standing there, you can still see a little bit by the moonlight (50 meters, 50 meters, 50 meters, 50 meters...) To sum up, if we can get rid of the problems of "upper body male protagonist" and "point-and-line plot", Orange believes that this article will still be very interesting. This is the opinion of the Orange GN family. If there is anything inappropriate in the comments, please don't point it out carelessly. Thank you!
Ah. . . The legendary pit? Why doesn't Mao Dada update? Please update quickly! !
It's really fun to read both long and short stories.
You are finally back... Uncle is such a waste...
Uh huh huh Why is there still fog at the critical moment? No, no, I want a clear version
Ahhh, I love this article~ Good luck to the author, I will keep following it~~~
Haha. Same as scattering flowers, and the same author's reply: O(∩_∩)O~
But please open the lock. 5555......
How pitiful, alas, my dear, I feel like you have seen the plot somewhere in this question.
Ah? Can't laugh or cry? Isn't this called dumbfounding? This means that the sky should not be used and the earth and the earth should not work..
I also want to make a point. My article has only been updated to chapter 33. Why does TO look at the data from the scholar and see that it has reached chapter 50! I don't understand very much! If you want to frame this guy, find a clever way. At least delete all the data after chapter 33 and then post it again!
Suddenly for no reason No amount of love will ever satisfy you I miss your features, I think of them vaguely It unknowingly poisoned me Suddenly I need protection very much If I still have sadness, let the wind blow it away If I still have happiness Maybe. --Faye Wong's "Don't Stay" The more you care about someone, the more careful you are in comforting them. On the contrary, I can't even hold back a kiss. I don't want to do this over and over again Anyway, everyone is lonely in the end
I'm thinking about what kind of taste I need to have with my future girlfriend, sweat
It's just a matter of scoring...
Update the article! ! ! I can't wait! ! ! I want to read the article! ! ! If you don't have anything to show me, I'll go to shit! ! ! Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!
I'm also very cold, she's actually Ren's cousin
Is the water updated every week? ? ? Anyway, let's update quickly
It's pretty good Have potential However Gone?
No love. Why did Wanwan become like this? What a bloody soul-obsessed person. The author replied: The point is that in this paragraph, the plot has finally developed rapidly, provided that it is under your supervision, hehe
Not bad, looking forward to future developments~!
Haha... It's such a sweet moment at the end... Hehe~~ The weather is hot kiddoo~~~Drink more water... Don't look at the computer for too long...
When will it be updated?