I remember that the last review I gave to the same author was titled "Success is Plot, Failure is Plot", but the key word of this review is still "plot"! Ah Feng always speaks directly, so the author should be mentally prepared.
I don't know if it was because I didn't say it perfectly last time. Why do I feel that this time not only did I not escape the shackles of the plot at all, but I also fell deeper and deeper into it? Another aspect of the last article that impressed me was some of the heroine's strategies for finding a way out in the secret passage. But now in this article, all the old romance jokes and even bad ones have appeared!
Let's take a look at what this plot is about first! First of all, it is the time travel of the heroine. Of course, she must have shown some differences when she was a child, thus attracting the attention of others, etc. Blablabla~ Then, the heroine's Mary Sue journey begins from here: she met Yang Mo when she was a child, and two years later she met the eldest young master and the third young master (although it is said that these three young masters are the ones with broken sleeves = =), and after that, she should also meet all kinds of handsome, gentle, gentle and golden blablabla...
Then, let's look at some dialogue and descriptions like this:
"Unexpectedly, Lin Anxi suddenly grabbed Du Rongyue's hand and said, 'Mom, don't leave!'"
"Du Rongyue looked at him in surprise, only to find that he still had his eyes closed, but his brows were frowning at this time. Did he just say, 'Mom, don't leave'? Could it be that he was having a nightmare?" I couldn't bear to look at this bloody mess! Isn't Lin Anxi good at martial arts? What about the vigilance of martial arts practitioners? !
Another example: "'Come here every other day and stay here for two hours.'"
"'Huh?' Du Rongyue said in surprise, 'What? Why do I have to stay for two hours?'" I was really speechless after seeing such a vulgar conversation! Third Young Master, can you be any more arrogant? Hostess, can you be a little more naive?
Another example: "Another slap came, but it was very gentle, 'Master An Xi, did I say something wrong?'"
"'Call Xi brother!'".
"'Ah?" Du Rongyue looked suspicious, "'I must have heard wrong. I must have heard wrong." ' He covered his head again and said, 'Stop shooting! '"
"'You heard me right, I only have two sisters above me, and no one calls me brother. From now on, you can call me brother Xi. '"... Such a conversation - I completely fell to my knees! Third Young Master, are you really Duanxiu?! OTZ
So, author, you really have a bottleneck, are you over it, are you over it? ? ? ╮(╯▽╰)╭ What I want to see is not the plot, what I want to see is the cute characters! There are such old memes all over the streets! How can a character be cute? It's not expressed through those memes, but the unique details! In the previous article, at least it can be seen that the author put a lot of thought into designing the plot. The heroine seems to have some brains, but what is going on in this article? = =? !
What shocked me even more was that the author actually wanted to include a story about beauty in Mary Sue's novel! Moreover, the author himself said that he has never even watched Danmei. How can he write about this? Whether this is following the trend or adding a gimmick, I don't think BL should be added to an article that mainly focuses on BG! Because this kind of article will look nondescript, similar to the Four Dislikes, and it is very likely to hit the mark in all directions! Readers who are originally interested in romance will be shocked, and those who are interested in Danmei will never see this kind of strangeness!
Also, there are some minor issues in the article, which I have commented under the corresponding chapters. I hope the author will work hard and keep moving forward instead of retreating!
This review is produced by "Illegal Party|Long Review Shop"
By A Feng
虽然很想看长篇，但也不得不说：浓缩才是精华啊…鲜花鲜花
太治癒太可愛啦!!!!!希望可以再看到其他這種短篇
Complete the postcard=_= I really like Kiyomiko's character.><What the hell^^
That's it. . Tricked? ? ?
哇咔咔，喜欢。之前就看过啦，现在下到手机里面，有空再回味回味作者回复： 480页 我的啰嗦可见一斑啊！
肖然最终是幸福的，真好！
Has Weiyi still not found the goal in life?
倒计时了？总觉得还好远呢
男主快出現啊快出現
莫名萌感QAQ 其实我蛮想吐槽那个头发勒死楚轩什么的。 抑郁症母亲用头发就把楚叮当搞 死 了这不科学啊QAQ！！！ 大学男生挣不过他生病的妈这槽点好坑 绝壁弱受不解释 ……
I remember that the last review I gave to the same author was titled "Success is Plot, Failure is Plot", but the key word of this review is still "plot"! Ah Feng always speaks directly, so the author should be mentally prepared. I don't know if it was because I didn't say it perfectly last time. Why do I feel that this time not only did I not escape the shackles of the plot at all, but I also fell deeper and deeper into it? Another aspect of the last article that impressed me was some of the heroine's strategies for finding a way out in the secret passage. But now in this article, all the old romance jokes and even bad ones have appeared! Let's take a look at what this plot is about first! First of all, it is the time travel of the heroine. Of course, she must have shown some differences when she was a child, thus attracting the attention of others, etc. Blablabla~ Then, the heroine's Mary Sue journey begins from here: she met Yang Mo when she was a child, and two years later she met the eldest young master and the third young master (although it is said that these three young masters are the ones with broken sleeves = =), and after that, she should also meet all kinds of handsome, gentle, gentle and golden blablabla... Then, let's look at some dialogue and descriptions like this: "Unexpectedly, Lin Anxi suddenly grabbed Du Rongyue's hand and said, 'Mom, don't leave!'" "Du Rongyue looked at him in surprise, only to find that he still had his eyes closed, but his brows were frowning at this time. Did he just say, 'Mom, don't leave'? Could it be that he was having a nightmare?" I couldn't bear to look at this bloody mess! Isn't Lin Anxi good at martial arts? What about the vigilance of martial arts practitioners? ! Another example: "'Come here every other day and stay here for two hours.'" "'Huh?' Du Rongyue said in surprise, 'What? Why do I have to stay for two hours?'" I was really speechless after seeing such a vulgar conversation! Third Young Master, can you be any more arrogant? Hostess, can you be a little more naive? Another example: "Another slap came, but it was very gentle, 'Master An Xi, did I say something wrong?'" "'Call Xi brother!'". "'Ah?" Du Rongyue looked suspicious, "'I must have heard wrong. I must have heard wrong." ' He covered his head again and said, 'Stop shooting! '" "'You heard me right, I only have two sisters above me, and no one calls me brother. From now on, you can call me brother Xi. '"... Such a conversation - I completely fell to my knees! Third Young Master, are you really Duanxiu?! OTZ So, author, you really have a bottleneck, are you over it, are you over it? ? ? ╮(╯▽╰)╭ What I want to see is not the plot, what I want to see is the cute characters! There are such old memes all over the streets! How can a character be cute? It's not expressed through those memes, but the unique details! In the previous article, at least it can be seen that the author put a lot of thought into designing the plot. The heroine seems to have some brains, but what is going on in this article? = =? ! What shocked me even more was that the author actually wanted to include a story about beauty in Mary Sue's novel! Moreover, the author himself said that he has never even watched Danmei. How can he write about this? Whether this is following the trend or adding a gimmick, I don't think BL should be added to an article that mainly focuses on BG! Because this kind of article will look nondescript, similar to the Four Dislikes, and it is very likely to hit the mark in all directions! Readers who are originally interested in romance will be shocked, and those who are interested in Danmei will never see this kind of strangeness! Also, there are some minor issues in the article, which I have commented under the corresponding chapters. I hope the author will work hard and keep moving forward instead of retreating! This review is produced by "Illegal Party|Long Review Shop" By A Feng