This is my first completed work, please support me.
Although it is only a short story, I completed it with great care.
Thanks!
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Reader comments
Author, you are a bad guy, why don't you post the update quickly and the writing is so good, why don't you post it to VIP?
Oh~ I feel it, and I unconsciously brought it into Thorin's perspective. It was too difficult to get over the past experience. I feel that I have been very tough to persist until I entered the Order.
Very light feeling~~
Yes, it's the first time I've written it like this. I think it's very good, and I'm telling you so.
The beginning is good and it arouses my interest. Why is it only one chapter? Too lazy. . . . Come on, write quickly~~~~~~~! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Too bad it's too short....
First time writing? ! ! Very well written. As for why I gave you 9 points, I think your classmates and I hold the same view. Why should you add the last sentence superfluously? Wouldn't it be better to leave a little room for everyone's imagination? ! I don't really like reading short stories because I always feel unsatisfied (but the good thing is that I can read them all in one sitting). As for why I read the short story you wrote, I just want to encourage you as a first-time writer. After reading this, I would like to give you two small suggestions. The first is that I hope you can have enough self-confidence. The second is that I hope you can write this short story into a full length, so that I can enjoy reading it! ! Looking forward to it! !
Author, you are a bad guy, why don't you post the update quickly and the writing is so good, why don't you post it to VIP?
Oh~ I feel it, and I unconsciously brought it into Thorin's perspective. It was too difficult to get over the past experience. I feel that I have been very tough to persist until I entered the Order.
Very light feeling~~
Yes, it's the first time I've written it like this. I think it's very good, and I'm telling you so.
The beginning is good and it arouses my interest. Why is it only one chapter? Too lazy. . . . Come on, write quickly~~~~~~~! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Too bad it's too short....
First time writing? ! ! Very well written. As for why I gave you 9 points, I think your classmates and I hold the same view. Why should you add the last sentence superfluously? Wouldn't it be better to leave a little room for everyone's imagination? ! I don't really like reading short stories because I always feel unsatisfied (but the good thing is that I can read them all in one sitting). As for why I read the short story you wrote, I just want to encourage you as a first-time writer. After reading this, I would like to give you two small suggestions. The first is that I hope you can have enough self-confidence. The second is that I hope you can write this short story into a full length, so that I can enjoy reading it! ! Looking forward to it! !