[Death Fan] Watch Against the Wind

Catching insects, "not in harmony with the body shape"

Let's talk about the plot first, and we'll talk about the writing later. Probably because I have neither a childhood sweetheart nor a puppy love, so I lack resonance with the youthful throbbing in the article and can't help but be a little picky. The following are subjective feelings. The plot is told from the first person, so readers will be most impressed and intuitive with the heroine. To be honest, such a heroine is not my cup of tea. First, she said that she is optimistic, but she is always cautious in relationships. First of all, she has never experienced emotional trauma. Second, she has a healthy and well-protected relationship. It is a bit strange to develop such a character. If the male protagonist is too good, so she has low self-esteem and is cautious, this reason can be considered, but it is still a bit far-fetched. This is the disadvantage of the first person. Although she may not have done many careful things, she was seen to have many careful thoughts. Secondly, after reading the whole article, I feel that she has not grown up. She was taken care of by her parents, bamboo horses, and neighbors when she was a child. Later, a male lead often prepared food and cooked food for her. A man often came to see her and cook for her, but she could not find out that he liked her at all, which was a bit heartbreaking. . Apart from being sad with him, I don't know what she has done for him. . I didn't see what she had done for her parents. . Apart from liking that the male protagonist forced him to go to France with a fake cheating and then waited for eight years, I didn't see that she had done anything substantive for the male protagonist. . . Third, I originally wanted to comment on the fake cheating incident, but I was too lazy to expand on it, so let's do this for now. . . I just want to say that you believe that you and your male partner are pure, so you often hang out with him. You have a clear conscience. Then why do you ask your boyfriend to stay away from those women? He also has a clear conscience, but you still don't let him give them a chance to get close. It's such a double standard for a girl. . . The problem with other characters is stated in the writing section. What can I say about the writing style? The language is fluent and logical, and the basic skills are passed. However, the characterization and cover are not focused enough. Supporting roles and leading actors are relatively labeled. Let's talk about the supporting characters first. The female supporting characters are two typical female supporting characters who covet the male protagonist. They play a small role and don't have many requirements. The author may have injected real-life prototypes into the female protagonist's roommates, classmates, and best friends, but the article is short, so the supporting characters are not fleshed out enough. Finally, there is the male protagonist. I want to say that the male protagonist is not much different from the male protagonist in popular novels. He is a facial makeup. He is affectionate, he is paralyzed, he is gentle, he is rapeseed, and then what? I have no other impression except a boy who studies hard and works seriously. A complete character, he has living habits, some interests, some shortcomings, and some hobbies. These things can be naturally displayed in life scenes, allowing readers to even imagine his daily life out of thin air, achieving the effect of a character driving the plot rather than a character filling the plot. Of course this is a bit demanding. . . Character labeling is a common problem in many novels. I seem to be taking it too seriously. . . Generally speaking, the article is of pretty good quality for a new writer, and there are no major logical flaws. I hope to pay more attention to the characterization aspect, come on.

This cp is really funny :) but the writing is unexpectedly touching