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But I really feel that this version of Charles has the clearest emotional curve and learning curve. Although Alistair's long speeches are preachy, they are smooth and the character is well reflected. Cyril does not have such a background (?). Relatively speaking, his role as an observer and learner is clear. It's just that Charles's setting is different from the revised setting, which leads to a break in the connection between the context and the context, and... According to Whitehall etiquette, he won't not come to the meeting.
Well, the foreshadowing in this version is quite natural (relatively), it also has a sense of immersion, and the dramatic tension is more concentrated. A feeling of powerlessness against someone who is just playing the piano... Well, it turns out that the new version still sets a higher starting point for checking (actually I pushed too hard).
It's a mess, what am I talking about…
Well, I roughly know how to describe it, that is, this version is more unitary, the theme is more complete, and the foreshadowing and rendering are less rushed. That suffocating bureaucratic atmosphere, the feeling of powerlessness after trying again and again and hitting the wall, that deep and gradual realization - it's just not friendly to Cha...
How to describe it... This version of Charles's growth arc is passive acceptance, the latest version (written latest but not the latest) is from stubbornness to compromise, and the replacement version is directly from resistance to active thinking... Well...
Then the conflict in this version is concentrated (the rhythm is loose at the beginning and tight at the other), the new version is scattered (more balanced), and the replacement version is only at the beginning (the same)
The replacement version is based on Socrates' form... And then it's not written well, it's a mess...
No matter what, let's keep it this way, what am I writing in the copy here? In short, the replacement version of the narrative is more balanced and mature, and the reading experience is better, but I don't like it - as expected, I prefer the preaching mode... It's just information overload, but, I really like to overlap metaphors and so on... It's more systematic.
It's a pity that Charles' image is a bit thin...
But it seems that the image of the replacement version is also flat, the opening is um...
Maybe it's the difference between literature/drama/balance? It's just an exaggeration. After all, the writing power is not shown. I'm referring to the feeling I want when I write.
As expected, I continued to add "redundant" content to the replacement version... I couldn't control it at all. .
Intention: empty
