Let the bullets fly fanfic
Zhang Muzhi
A bloody ending rewritten!
The two happily went to Cannes to spend some time~
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While scrolling through Jinjiang, I remembered that Xuanseda had also posted in Jinjiang, so I searched it and found out that it had stopped a long time ago.
This is actually a text from more than ten years ago
Damn, is this going to be updated?
Okay, finally finished reading it.
This is my first time reading Danmeiwen. But, is this a beautiful article? I don't understand either.
No matter what kind of article it is, this is the first time I have read an article like Tongtong's. I think it's okay and I can read this kind of article.
Then, talk about other things besides the category of the article.
The writing is very good. I really can't imagine that such detailed and vivid writing was written by a little girl over thirteen years old. I don't really understand fujoshi and GG, and I don't like them either, but to be honest, the image of Tang Mo is pretty good. Ye Yinchen is also good. Lin Qian was very annoying. Bai Xuan was a little disgusted and disgusted. That man, Mo Xian, was treated as nothing, and Mo Qing was treated as a maid, for the time being.
Some scenes and detailed descriptions are also very vivid, and the descriptions of the characters' dialogues and actions are also very lively, and the characters of life are well shaped.
What impressed me the most was Tongtong's exquisite and wonderful layout of the emotions in this article.
In addition, let me tell you what I feel is lacking.
The emotional layout is good, but the emotions themselves in this article, I feel, are more than exquisite, but lack the atmosphere and the depth that love should have. The love in Tongtong's novels has a youthful and silly feel to it, and it feels very silly.
Of course, Tongtong is just a little loli and has no deep impression of true love. She will understand in the future.
In addition, I have also mentioned some small shortcomings in the emotional layout in the brackets in the article, just take a look. As for whether or not to change it, and how to change it, it's up to you.
In addition, regarding the psychological descriptions of several people in this article, I feel that Tongtong is slightly lacking, and the impression is not that deep.
Finally, in these last two sections, the plot always made me feel disconnected. Section by section, it gave me a headache and made me uncomfortable. If you are a general reader, you will not be able to stand this, so please be careful.
Well, although there are a lot of shortcomings, the flaws do not hide the advantages. Tongtong's ability to write so well really exceeded my expectations. Come on, Tongtong.
I'm very optimistic about you, Tongtong. I always feel that your writing is very spiritual and talented. If you like it, then write it down. Writing is not an easy and happy thing. Apart from hobbies, it is more boring and boring. I hope Tongtong can persevere, constantly improve the shortcomings, and work hard to write the article well.
Of course, I hope that Tongtong can grow up healthy, beautiful and happily, so that like Wen, she can improve her shortcomings, work hard to make progress, and become more beautiful, prouder and happier.
Tongtong, bless you. Be happy. Hehe.
——Ye Dufeng.
Ahhhhhhh. You still haven't updated it! ! !
I'll almost start writing a new article when you come back. I'm so drunk waiting for your updates every day, just play slowly~ I want gifts~ (╯3╰)
While scrolling through Jinjiang, I remembered that Xuanseda had also posted in Jinjiang, so I searched it and found out that it had stopped a long time ago.
This is actually a text from more than ten years ago
Damn, is this going to be updated?
Okay, finally finished reading it. This is my first time reading Danmeiwen. But, is this a beautiful article? I don't understand either. No matter what kind of article it is, this is the first time I have read an article like Tongtong's. I think it's okay and I can read this kind of article. Then, talk about other things besides the category of the article. The writing is very good. I really can't imagine that such detailed and vivid writing was written by a little girl over thirteen years old. I don't really understand fujoshi and GG, and I don't like them either, but to be honest, the image of Tang Mo is pretty good. Ye Yinchen is also good. Lin Qian was very annoying. Bai Xuan was a little disgusted and disgusted. That man, Mo Xian, was treated as nothing, and Mo Qing was treated as a maid, for the time being. Some scenes and detailed descriptions are also very vivid, and the descriptions of the characters' dialogues and actions are also very lively, and the characters of life are well shaped. What impressed me the most was Tongtong's exquisite and wonderful layout of the emotions in this article. In addition, let me tell you what I feel is lacking. The emotional layout is good, but the emotions themselves in this article, I feel, are more than exquisite, but lack the atmosphere and the depth that love should have. The love in Tongtong's novels has a youthful and silly feel to it, and it feels very silly. Of course, Tongtong is just a little loli and has no deep impression of true love. She will understand in the future. In addition, I have also mentioned some small shortcomings in the emotional layout in the brackets in the article, just take a look. As for whether or not to change it, and how to change it, it's up to you. In addition, regarding the psychological descriptions of several people in this article, I feel that Tongtong is slightly lacking, and the impression is not that deep. Finally, in these last two sections, the plot always made me feel disconnected. Section by section, it gave me a headache and made me uncomfortable. If you are a general reader, you will not be able to stand this, so please be careful. Well, although there are a lot of shortcomings, the flaws do not hide the advantages. Tongtong's ability to write so well really exceeded my expectations. Come on, Tongtong. I'm very optimistic about you, Tongtong. I always feel that your writing is very spiritual and talented. If you like it, then write it down. Writing is not an easy and happy thing. Apart from hobbies, it is more boring and boring. I hope Tongtong can persevere, constantly improve the shortcomings, and work hard to write the article well. Of course, I hope that Tongtong can grow up healthy, beautiful and happily, so that like Wen, she can improve her shortcomings, work hard to make progress, and become more beautiful, prouder and happier. Tongtong, bless you. Be happy. Hehe. ——Ye Dufeng.
Ahhhhhhh. You still haven't updated it! ! !
I'll almost start writing a new article when you come back. I'm so drunk waiting for your updates every day, just play slowly~ I want gifts~ (╯3╰)
My wife's Xiaoxue is awesome! Come on!!!