The Secret of Cutting Jade: Gold Inlaid with Jade

I had promised to write a review of "The Secret of Tailoring Jade" a long time ago, but I put it off until the end of the year, and finally found the time. So I wrote this article with more feelings than comments, and gave it to Xiao Luo. It can be regarded as a New Year's gift^^ The author has said that this article is not mainly about characters, just the story. I have reservations about whether the characters and the story can be read separately, but I am a good reader who respects the author (laughing crookedly), so I will not comment on the characterization this time. The following mentions of characters only focus on the parts related to the characters and the story.

Comments on "The Secret of Cutting Jade" I had promised to write a review of "The Secret of Tailoring Jade" a long time ago, but I put it off until the end of the year, and finally found the time. So I wrote this article with more feelings than comments, and gave it to Xiao Luo. It can be regarded as a New Year's gift^^ The author has said that this article is not mainly about characters, just the story. I have reservations about whether the characters and the story can be read separately, but I am a good reader who respects the author (laughing crookedly), so I will not comment on the characterization this time. The following mentions of characters only focus on the parts related to the characters and the story. Story I personally prefer strange and new things, whether it's people or stories. It is difficult to write an extraordinary work. The difficulty does not lie in seeking novelty, but in the idea and sense of proportion. Just like people can be strange, but not absurd; things can be strange, but not ridiculous. Otherwise, the original intention was to write a weird story, but in the end, it turned out to be a weirdo, which would really ruin the scenery. I think an article should be novel and unique, but also loving and cute. The first thing is how to start it, and the second thing is how to lift it up. The starting point of Taiyujue is quite interesting. The transformation of a golden corpse, the cry of a thief to catch a thief, although these things are not particularly weird in a mystery novel, they are even better when the cocoon is peeled off at the end, and they can keep attracting people to follow the plot and think about it. This is also "lifting", that is, the author's writing is strong enough to lift up the suspense thrown up earlier. It is at this point that Xiao Luo's strengths are fully reflected, that is, the extremely exquisite structure and good sense of the overall situation. He does not rely solely on the excellence of writing to support a work, but a very clear context and skeleton is piled up by a large number of plots. When beautiful words become blurry in memory, people who read them can still remember a story. Then there's the plausibility of the plot. For reasoning articles, logic and rationality are very important. The case of Cai Yujue is limited by the length. The entire framework is not large, and there is no particularly complicated inside story. Reasoning has always been what Xiao Luo is good at, so he seems to be very familiar with handling this case. But there's one thing I mentioned when I first watched it: autopsy time. In any homicide investigation, an autopsy is almost always the first step. However, after the murder occurred, not only did no one think of conducting an autopsy first, but the bodies were also buried. This was very unreasonable. To take a step back, even if the masterminds behind the scenes did this deliberately, since Tan Qiao and Fu Caiyu are set as smart people, they should not ignore this, at least they will feel strange. Later, when I read it for the second time, I found that the autopsy was arranged in Chapter 6, and there were twelve chapters in the whole text, so I understood a little bit: the reason for this arrangement is that if you go straight to the corpse at the beginning, the reader will guess more than half of it... Anyway, I feel that logic cannot accommodate the plot. This is putting the cart before the horse and weakening the foundation of the plot. Role When writing about people, I want to talk about Fu Caiyu. Putting aside the preconceived influence of "Qing Shang", Fu Caiyu's side preparation in the first few paragraphs of "Cai Yu Jue" is very successful, especially the comparison between Song Zizhi and several other people's evaluation of him, which is very ancient, and ancient is the ancient of Gu Long. It has enough suspense, enough cuteness, and full of aura of strange people and strange cases. But after Nanqiang died of starvation at a young age, there began to be some gaps with the previous articles. He lacked stamina and was unable to lift it up. He is always cute in silhouette, but when he is given a close-up, he inexplicably starts to lose his temper. In addition, I never understood why he would go to someone else's door to faint because he was half hungry. I thought there would be an explanation later, but there was no further explanation. It was a black line. And, after reading this article, I always have the feeling that Mr. Caiyu is alone and fighting alone. This is probably due to the incompetence of classmate Tan Qiao, who seems to have been fixed at the age of twelve, and the loss of the BOSS passerby. By the way, when I first opened the box and saw the corpse, I was thinking that this BOSS lacked the spirit of entertainment... I actually expected that besides the corpse, there would be interesting things like notes in the box. Well, this is my personal bad taste. Because detective themes are usually very tight, it will be very tiring if there is no adjustment. I think the BOSS is a character that should share the story equally with the protagonist. The BOSS is not powerful enough and the protagonist's wisdom cannot be highlighted at all. In this case, Fu Tan and the two of them were so overwhelming that the villains had no power to fight back, and they were all defeated in one fell swoop. Because everyone did not dig too deep, some important characters even received less ink than the likes of Cheng Shuang and Xiang Xiaoba. To add a sentiment that has nothing to do with Cai Yu Jue, it is reasonable that some characters' sense of lack in certain aspects is part of their personality. For example, if a character is set to be very stupid and naive, when he is really written to be very stupid and naive, this character is successful. Readers can despise this character, but they cannot say that the character is poorly written. There is also a sense of lack caused by the author. For example, when writing about a child, he can be immature, but he cannot be simple. It is untenable to use some aspects of the character's design as a reason for the thinness of the character. Style Style is like... Food (- -||), there is no such thing as good or bad, only whether you like it or not. I always feel that when discussing style and writing, most of what comes out is everyone's preference, rather than what is right or wrong. Xiao Luo's writing style is very elegant and elegant. There are beautiful words, but there are few metaphors and parallelisms, so it will not be flashy; there is occasional abuse, but it is never intense, so it will not make readers deeply involved. If you must give me an opinion, I think you lack a bit of clarity. It's not that it doesn't have its own style, but that the existing style is not deeply imprinted, and the characters and stories lack recognition. There are many things that are familiar and too few that are unique; there are many things that are clear at a glance and too few things that are thought-provoking. And sometimes the writing style that is too gentle also makes the article fluctuating without climax. The conflict may be intense in the setting, but when written it is as if it has been Photoshopped, with many things that should have been sharp and dazzling worn away. Just like telling a story, many things can easily be told in the reader's mind, but few things can enter the reader's heart. However, styles vary from person to person. Most authors identify their style by their sturdy writing style, while some authors identify their style by their bizarre plots. I feel that for you, many things are a matter of degree, not presence or absence. You have many things, but you just don't take an extra step every time you touch them. Others I want to talk about the ellipses………………||| "The old bureau boss was heartbroken and quickly sent someone to find Zhou Zheng, the manager of the Tan family. At this moment, a young man in rich clothes emerged from the side door. … Four days later, the Tan family really sent someone, but there was only one person. This person is Tan Qiao, Tan Zheng's eldest son, Tan Qiaoqiao's biological brother, and the sixteen-year-old Tan family's young master. " ——This kind of montage-like ellipsis is not only used for cutting jade, but also used to connect two scenes in most of your works I have seen. If you are making a movie, there is no problem in handling it this way, but if you are writing a text, the instantaneous switching often feels abrupt. Words are different from images. Images have this privilege because they are far freer than words. Take the above paragraph as an example. A young man in colorful clothes flashed out from the side door. This is the first appearance of one of the two protagonists of Caiyu. If there is a picture, everyone who watches it will have a rough outline in their mind. But using only words, there is no language, no description, no transition, and it jumps directly to four days later. This appearance is only clear in the author's mind. The readers still have no idea about Tan Qiao. If it weren't for those of us who knew about the previous relationship, we might not even dare to speculate that this young man in gorgeous clothes is Tan Qiao. ——This article is purely a complaint. I know it is difficult to break the writing habit. It is for reference only. Okay, I am the only one who picks people up as gifts during the Chinese New Year - I wish Xiao Luo a happy New Year and write more good articles next year.

Disgusting, the duck said seductively, how can I eat it in the future... By the way, a sister said today that when she was in school, she saw someone trample to death a soaked mouse, and she still remembers the tragic sight of the mouse. I said, it's really bloody. She said, the meat is also fishy... Why am I talking about this? It's the newspaper office~~~~~