The convulsive writing I wrote after I woke up from hunger in the middle of the night was full of resentment as I cried and wanted to eat steamed buns [[[
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Although it is short, it is very beautiful...
Title: "A Murder Case Caused by a Bun"
Reviewer: Embroidered Pillow
This review is not a professional review, please forgive me for any inappropriateness.
In fact, I was attracted by the title of this article, because I was deeply impressed by a murder caused by a steamed bun, so I decisively clicked in when I saw this article.
First, let me talk about the feeling the title and copywriting give me:
From the title of the article, we can tell that this is a BE. It is precisely because we know the ending that when I read the article, I no longer pay attention to the ending but the process. I want to know the twists and turns in the middle and who is BEing with whom.
The author's copywriting only has a very short sentence, and it is a sentence that seems to have little to do with the article. It seems that the author felt hungry at a certain moment, so he said "I want to eat steamed buns...", So the pillow always felt that it was from the heart of hunger (PS, actually, I am so hungry now, and I also want to eat steamed buns. Give me a big reward, tears.)
Secondly, let me talk about the overall feeling of the article:
Let's talk about the ending first. Although I know the ending, I still couldn't help but feel a little sad when I saw Brother Baozi die. When I saw Ah Ba die for love, I knew that maybe this should be the best destination for her, but Pillow still felt that such an ending was too reasonable but not unexpected enough. She thought that it would be better if there was a twist [this guy actually doesn't know how to make a twist...]O(╯□╰)o
Then, the person who is more resentful to the pillow is the poster who laughs on the first floor. At the same time, this is also the person for whom the pillow has some subtle expectations. When I saw the sentence "Then the host took Ah Ba back", my pillow tightened and my body shook, and I was shocked! I guess I visited the forum too much a while ago, and I immediately felt like I traveled back in time. Could it be that the heroine traveled to modern times and visited the forum? After reading the following, I realized that this person was the owner of Yixiao Building, not what Pillow had in mind. But it was this person who made Pillow's eyes light up, and he thought to himself, could this be the male protagonist? This is also what Pillow said before to pay more attention to when reading the article. So Pillow felt that the brilliance of the original poster deeply suppressed Brother Baozi.
In fact, this article spans quite a long time span. It covers the heroine's several stages of growth, from a little beggar to a senior female killer. It is considered a growth history. For a short story, this is quite difficult to grasp. If you are not careful, you will miss something. Therefore, some details in the article are not explained clearly, and sometimes there is a sense of disconnection. For example, "The little hooligan can't be arrogant for long... He was kicked aside like a corpse." Here, I felt a little dizzy after reading the pillow.
Overall, the article is still very good. I hope to continue to work hard and look forward to better works^_^.
Although it is very short, it is very beautiful... A bunch of flowers~~~I am asking for the braised oil... I occasionally write short stories~If you want to hook up with me, let me know╭(╯3╰)╮
It makes people really want to eat steamed buns>.<
The first time I read this short story was at least three years ago, but I didn't leave a comment or rate it at that time. Now I am ashamed to add it...
This is definitely one of the best short stories I have ever read. I feel so blocked but can't help but read it after it's over, and want to cry but feel so sad that I can't cry anymore. I really have nothing to do to torture myself...
Anyway, cheers up.
The capacity of three thousand words is enough to describe the lives of two people. Qianyejun is really good at writing!
But, I thought you would let them meet, but I didn't expect it would be this kind of meeting.
My favorite Baozi brother was just clicked away, and I felt resentful.
Although it is short, it is very beautiful...
Title: "A Murder Case Caused by a Bun" Reviewer: Embroidered Pillow This review is not a professional review, please forgive me for any inappropriateness. In fact, I was attracted by the title of this article, because I was deeply impressed by a murder caused by a steamed bun, so I decisively clicked in when I saw this article. First, let me talk about the feeling the title and copywriting give me: From the title of the article, we can tell that this is a BE. It is precisely because we know the ending that when I read the article, I no longer pay attention to the ending but the process. I want to know the twists and turns in the middle and who is BEing with whom. The author's copywriting only has a very short sentence, and it is a sentence that seems to have little to do with the article. It seems that the author felt hungry at a certain moment, so he said "I want to eat steamed buns...", So the pillow always felt that it was from the heart of hunger (PS, actually, I am so hungry now, and I also want to eat steamed buns. Give me a big reward, tears.) Secondly, let me talk about the overall feeling of the article: Let's talk about the ending first. Although I know the ending, I still couldn't help but feel a little sad when I saw Brother Baozi die. When I saw Ah Ba die for love, I knew that maybe this should be the best destination for her, but Pillow still felt that such an ending was too reasonable but not unexpected enough. She thought that it would be better if there was a twist [this guy actually doesn't know how to make a twist...]O(╯□╰)o Then, the person who is more resentful to the pillow is the poster who laughs on the first floor. At the same time, this is also the person for whom the pillow has some subtle expectations. When I saw the sentence "Then the host took Ah Ba back", my pillow tightened and my body shook, and I was shocked! I guess I visited the forum too much a while ago, and I immediately felt like I traveled back in time. Could it be that the heroine traveled to modern times and visited the forum? After reading the following, I realized that this person was the owner of Yixiao Building, not what Pillow had in mind. But it was this person who made Pillow's eyes light up, and he thought to himself, could this be the male protagonist? This is also what Pillow said before to pay more attention to when reading the article. So Pillow felt that the brilliance of the original poster deeply suppressed Brother Baozi. In fact, this article spans quite a long time span. It covers the heroine's several stages of growth, from a little beggar to a senior female killer. It is considered a growth history. For a short story, this is quite difficult to grasp. If you are not careful, you will miss something. Therefore, some details in the article are not explained clearly, and sometimes there is a sense of disconnection. For example, "The little hooligan can't be arrogant for long... He was kicked aside like a corpse." Here, I felt a little dizzy after reading the pillow. Overall, the article is still very good. I hope to continue to work hard and look forward to better works^_^.
Although it is very short, it is very beautiful... A bunch of flowers~~~I am asking for the braised oil... I occasionally write short stories~If you want to hook up with me, let me know╭(╯3╰)╮
It makes people really want to eat steamed buns>.<
The first time I read this short story was at least three years ago, but I didn't leave a comment or rate it at that time. Now I am ashamed to add it... This is definitely one of the best short stories I have ever read. I feel so blocked but can't help but read it after it's over, and want to cry but feel so sad that I can't cry anymore. I really have nothing to do to torture myself... Anyway, cheers up.
The capacity of three thousand words is enough to describe the lives of two people. Qianyejun is really good at writing! But, I thought you would let them meet, but I didn't expect it would be this kind of meeting. My favorite Baozi brother was just clicked away, and I felt resentful.