At that time, she slapped the mistress, stalked, caught her, cried, fought, and became the evil wife in Qiong Yao's drama.
Now, she smiles quietly, everything is in her eyes, and nothing is in her heart.
She and she have different bodies, but the same soul lives in her.
…
What would you do if you couldn't go back?
The sea and the sky are vast, you can do whatever you want!
What would you do if you suddenly went back?
Hmm...
Divorce you!
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Reader comments
The male idol still has too strong vocals, but his face makes up for it.
The writing style is a little childish, maybe because of insufficient writing power, or maybe because the wife is used to it. She feels that she could start with fewer exclamatory sentences, instead of always having a few "!!!" In a row. If there are too many of them, it will become cumbersome. Or simplify the psychological description of the characters. Although psychological activities do not need to be externalized, they are indeed a direction for character development.
The characters are flat, and it feels like there are many characters, but in fact the personality is quite different. This can actually determine one of the main characteristics of the character first. Of course, the wife may have been added temporarily, and the plot will be there first and then the character. However, this does not prevent the wife from slowly enriching the character image in the later writing and finding an anchor point for him to stand on. For example, Tan Youzhen, who is getting a lot of attention at the moment, I personally think that he is a very rich and generous person who likes to do things, is disrespectful to his elders, and is not very likable. So how to find a balance point in the middle so that Tan Youzhen can control himself and not really tease Yuanyuan? Because it is true that at present, we cannot fight and fight, and we cannot run. Let's talk about Song Tingyuan, the slightly paranoid male mother image? In fact, the inner demon was written a bit casually. Did this plot mean to let Song Tingyuan confirm his own mind? Or make Yuanyuan change his view on him? But judging from the current development, in this life, it is impossible for Yuanyuan to fall in love with him unless he has sex, is too close to him, and is too verbose. So, it feels like if Yuanyuan's heart is moved, or the chicken is moved, there must be a change first?
As for the plot setting, so far, the wife has not decided whether the main plot is mainly about cultivation or whether it is mainly about coaxing people around, so the plot is dragging. You must first determine the main line and find clues. For example, the level of cultivation can be described more carefully, because Yuanyuan just wants to become stronger, and everything else is for the sake of becoming strong and tolerant, or if he is not strong enough to survive for a while, then he must highlight his desire for cultivation and use this to advance the plot bit by bit. For example, that medicine, although it is said to be epinephrine, is at least useful. It may be too nourishing for the stomach. As long as it is digested and absorbed later, it will be better as the skill increases. This not only improves the cultivation level, but also does not need to be restricted by others. As for changing the map, is it to the abo world? So what is the function? To panic the people in the world of cultivation, and then overthrow the entire world of cultivation, or force their way into the abo world? So what kind of cultivation level is Yuanyuan at this time? It feels like after being pulled back, there should be a scene of imprisonment or something.
Some parts of the description are not clear enough. For example, at the beginning, from a six-year-old child to the adult Tang Yuan, I actually didn't understand it at first. I only understood a little bit later through the oral information of several people. When writing these, you can write them more carefully and leave a foreshadowing by the way. This will make it easier to change the map for later articles? Make foreshadowing.
The above is my personal opinion. Ma'am, please don't think I'm too talkative. I thought about reading it for so long and my wife sincerely asked about it in the comment area, so I wrote it. And it's because of the attractive points of the article that I kept staying and commenting sincerely. I think sincerity is a must-win.
I hope my wife will keep writing. Once you can put pen to paper, you will know how it will develop in the future.
Is it gone? I hope the author will write it soon! ! !
If you didn't write the curse, you'd be in trouble (put your hands together)
Is there any extra story about Qiao Yi after Qiao Mian's death?
When will it be updated?(?í _ ì?)
Is it true that Teacher has not updated since it's already been July?
Please comment, I beg you.
Where is Lafayette? After watching so much, I still didn't show up.
It's so good, so sweet
Haha, thank you in advance for the generous points~ (Blow a kiss)
Furthermore, the writing in capital letters is quite good. Although there are flaws, the beauty is not covered by the flaws!
I think Yao Ban is just a little brat who wants love but can't get it. She's a little willful and has low self-esteem, but she's still very brave and sincere at critical moments, so... Let's give it a try~
This chapter is very touching, especially the long passage by Min Zhi.
? ? ? Author, are you sure the ending is not because you don't want to write anymore?
The male idol still has too strong vocals, but his face makes up for it.
The writing style is a little childish, maybe because of insufficient writing power, or maybe because the wife is used to it. She feels that she could start with fewer exclamatory sentences, instead of always having a few "!!!" In a row. If there are too many of them, it will become cumbersome. Or simplify the psychological description of the characters. Although psychological activities do not need to be externalized, they are indeed a direction for character development. The characters are flat, and it feels like there are many characters, but in fact the personality is quite different. This can actually determine one of the main characteristics of the character first. Of course, the wife may have been added temporarily, and the plot will be there first and then the character. However, this does not prevent the wife from slowly enriching the character image in the later writing and finding an anchor point for him to stand on. For example, Tan Youzhen, who is getting a lot of attention at the moment, I personally think that he is a very rich and generous person who likes to do things, is disrespectful to his elders, and is not very likable. So how to find a balance point in the middle so that Tan Youzhen can control himself and not really tease Yuanyuan? Because it is true that at present, we cannot fight and fight, and we cannot run. Let's talk about Song Tingyuan, the slightly paranoid male mother image? In fact, the inner demon was written a bit casually. Did this plot mean to let Song Tingyuan confirm his own mind? Or make Yuanyuan change his view on him? But judging from the current development, in this life, it is impossible for Yuanyuan to fall in love with him unless he has sex, is too close to him, and is too verbose. So, it feels like if Yuanyuan's heart is moved, or the chicken is moved, there must be a change first? As for the plot setting, so far, the wife has not decided whether the main plot is mainly about cultivation or whether it is mainly about coaxing people around, so the plot is dragging. You must first determine the main line and find clues. For example, the level of cultivation can be described more carefully, because Yuanyuan just wants to become stronger, and everything else is for the sake of becoming strong and tolerant, or if he is not strong enough to survive for a while, then he must highlight his desire for cultivation and use this to advance the plot bit by bit. For example, that medicine, although it is said to be epinephrine, is at least useful. It may be too nourishing for the stomach. As long as it is digested and absorbed later, it will be better as the skill increases. This not only improves the cultivation level, but also does not need to be restricted by others. As for changing the map, is it to the abo world? So what is the function? To panic the people in the world of cultivation, and then overthrow the entire world of cultivation, or force their way into the abo world? So what kind of cultivation level is Yuanyuan at this time? It feels like after being pulled back, there should be a scene of imprisonment or something. Some parts of the description are not clear enough. For example, at the beginning, from a six-year-old child to the adult Tang Yuan, I actually didn't understand it at first. I only understood a little bit later through the oral information of several people. When writing these, you can write them more carefully and leave a foreshadowing by the way. This will make it easier to change the map for later articles? Make foreshadowing. The above is my personal opinion. Ma'am, please don't think I'm too talkative. I thought about reading it for so long and my wife sincerely asked about it in the comment area, so I wrote it. And it's because of the attractive points of the article that I kept staying and commenting sincerely. I think sincerity is a must-win. I hope my wife will keep writing. Once you can put pen to paper, you will know how it will develop in the future.
Is it gone? I hope the author will write it soon! ! !
If you didn't write the curse, you'd be in trouble (put your hands together)
Is there any extra story about Qiao Yi after Qiao Mian's death?
When will it be updated?(?í _ ì?)
Is it true that Teacher has not updated since it's already been July?
Please comment, I beg you.
Where is Lafayette? After watching so much, I still didn't show up.
It's so good, so sweet
Haha, thank you in advance for the generous points~ (Blow a kiss) Furthermore, the writing in capital letters is quite good. Although there are flaws, the beauty is not covered by the flaws! I think Yao Ban is just a little brat who wants love but can't get it. She's a little willful and has low self-esteem, but she's still very brave and sincere at critical moments, so... Let's give it a try~
This chapter is very touching, especially the long passage by Min Zhi.
? ? ? Author, are you sure the ending is not because you don't want to write anymore?