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The most arresting thing about this short story about urban supernatural beings is not the setting of "being able to see the voice of one's heart" itself, but the fact that it embodies the voice of one's heart into a barrage. Barrage is the most familiar visual symbol in the Internet era. It usually appears in videos as other people's comments, complaints, and spoilers; but here, it appears above people's heads and becomes a real-time inner broadcast that cannot be turned off. This switch is very clever. It not only lowers the threshold of readers' understanding, but also naturally brings out a sense of absurdity: you think you are having a normal conversation with a person, but in fact you have been watching his real thoughts passing above his head. The structure of the story is also clean. The first chapter uses daily neighborly relations to bury anomalies, the second chapter confirms abilities and introduces Chen Mo's disappearance, the third chapter shifts from personal confusion to organizational conspiracy, the fourth chapter enters a head-on confrontation, the fifth and sixth chapters reveal the truth about the "seeder" and nanoparticles, and the seventh chapter concludes with an open but warm ending. The pace is not slow, and the amount of information is advanced layer by layer. Instead of dumping the world view on the readers, Lin You leads the readers to discover together: it turns out that ability is not talent, but is invested; it turns out that "being selected" is just being used; it turns out that there is a colder conspiracy behind the so-called secret keeper. Character relationships are written with restraint. Zhou Yan is not a typical overbearing protector, he has his own concealment, wavering and price; Lin You is not a heroine who passively waits for rescue. She will be afraid, but she will also be able to ask questions, act, and press the button to change the situation. The emotional line between the two does not take over the spotlight, but it appears believable because they confirm each other in danger. Especially the words above Zhou Yan's head, "It's great to have her here." It's not a direct confession, but it has more aftertaste than a confession. If there is any shortcoming, the motivations of the villain organization could be a little deeper. The goal of "collecting human secrets" is a bit more conventional, and Chen Mo's ending also leaves a lot of blank space. But as a short to medium-sized novel, it has accomplished what a genre article needs most: a setting with memorable points, a clear line of suspense, and a world that makes readers willing to continue imagining it.