After transmigrating, Liu Xun found himself in the late Eastern Han dynasty. His father was the county magistrate of Zhen Ding County in Changshan Commandery, and a member of the imperial clan.
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Liu Xun could almost see Zhao Yun, Huang Zhong, Xi Zhicai, Guo Jia, and Zhuge Liang beckoning to him.
The world's finest talents will all be mine.
"My lord, it's cold. You should put on another layer." Ju Shou draped a yellow robe over Liu Xun's shoulders.
Many years later, Liu Xun sat high upon the imperial throne. Looking at the assembled court officials, he pointed to a hand-drawn map of the world and said with a sigh, "Reviving the Han dynasty three times is only the beginning."
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The foundation of this book is very good. It follows a realistic and enjoyable writing approach to the Three Kingdoms. The system is restrained and not overdone. There are no plug-ins such as explosions, summons, and thermal weapons that destroy the logic of the times. Goldfinger only has a four-dimensional attribute panel and a small amount of elixirs, which are only used as a backup. The core conflict relies on the identity of the Han clan, the protagonist's modern thinking, and the intrigues of various forces. The overall framework is very good, and it has the potential to become a masterpiece. Personally, I feel that if there are several details that are polished and perfected, the reading experience will be improved to a higher level:
1. The narrative rhythm is too fast and lacks pauses and psychological sedimentation.
The plot progresses neatly, but many important decisions, meetings, and incident resolutions are passed over in one go. It is recommended to appropriately increase the inner balance of the protagonist, to show the contradiction between modern people's thinking and the rules of the late Han Dynasty, and not to give direct results when encountering problems. Write more about the pros and cons, and review the pros and cons after the fact. There is no need to change the main plot. By increasing the blank space for thinking, the characters will be more three-dimensional.
2. The details of personal interactions and etiquette are rough.
At the end of the Han Dynasty, status was very important. There were differences in titles, gestures, and conversational propriety among clan members, civil servants, generals, princes, and lower-level officials. At present, some of the dialogues are relatively modern and lack the sense of the times.
You can refine meeting etiquette, dialogue wording, and the sense of distance between superiors and subordinates; as a time traveler, the protagonist can also write about his sense of violation in adapting to ancient rituals, and distinguish different attitudes towards noble counselors, battlefield generals, and hostile princes who are loyal to the Han Dynasty, and the sense of game will be stronger.
3. Insufficient psychological description of characters
Not only the protagonist, but also the hearts of his advisers and generals could be more profiled. For example, people like Xun Yu who care about the Han Dynasty have concerns when facing the protagonist, the concerns and loyalty of military commanders, and the suspicion and calculation of enemy princes. Don't just rely on lines to drive the plot, express the pull of people's hearts, and the atmosphere of intrigues and troubled times will be more realistic.
4. Goldfinger continues to maintain his current restraint
This is a great advantage of this book: the panel is used as a reference for identifying people, the rare number of elixirs is a life-saving trump card, and there are no super-standard abilities such as storage or unlimited resources. It is recommended to maintain the status quo, do not expand and add powerful system functions later, and maintain the realistic background.
5. Try to stabilize the logic of the force system
There are marrow-cleansing and marrow-cutting elixirs, but they only lay a foundation for the body and are not invincible in one step. The protagonist's strength improvement relies on acquired practice and battlefield experience, avoiding the stage where the soul of modern people directly crushes the veteran warriors, which is in line with the threshold of cold weapon combat in the late Han Dynasty.
Overall, the setting is very comfortable, and the machinations are online. As long as the details are completed and the human emotions are portrayed more slowly, it will be a very outstanding Three Kingdoms clan style work. Come on, author, it is rare for someone to write novels with heart!
Very good, come on, come on
The content is clear and structured without any problems
The words are gorgeous, the language is smooth, the structure is rigorous, and the intention is good. Praise!
If you write something of high quality and quantity, it will definitely become popular.
What can I say about the writing? More than 400 chapters is considered acceptable in a historical novel, and the pace is quite fast, but it feels like it is a waste of food and is a pity to throw away. Come on, I look forward to the layout of the protagonist before Liu Hong's death. I hope I can keep writing. Come on.
Don't people need to grow? How old is Zhao Yuncai? The military strength is 99, and the commander is 92. Wei Qing, Han Xin, Wu Qi, Bai Qi, Huo Qubing, Yue Fei, and Zhuge Liang are not so high as commanders at their age, and they have no experience. Xu Huang and Wei Yan's peak commanders are probably over 92, but I don't think Commander Zhao Yun can surpass them.
How to say it? There are countless similar templates in Chunshuang Wenba. The king's spirit was shaken, the counselors and generals bowed their heads and bowed. Liu Bei looked at the thatched cottage three times and was afraid he would cry.
Unofficial history of the Three Kingdoms, Zhao Yun's marksmanship is passed down from his ancestors
The foundation of this book is very good. It follows a realistic and enjoyable writing approach to the Three Kingdoms. The system is restrained and not overdone. There are no plug-ins such as explosions, summons, and thermal weapons that destroy the logic of the times. Goldfinger only has a four-dimensional attribute panel and a small amount of elixirs, which are only used as a backup. The core conflict relies on the identity of the Han clan, the protagonist's modern thinking, and the intrigues of various forces. The overall framework is very good, and it has the potential to become a masterpiece. Personally, I feel that if there are several details that are polished and perfected, the reading experience will be improved to a higher level: 1. The narrative rhythm is too fast and lacks pauses and psychological sedimentation. The plot progresses neatly, but many important decisions, meetings, and incident resolutions are passed over in one go. It is recommended to appropriately increase the inner balance of the protagonist, to show the contradiction between modern people's thinking and the rules of the late Han Dynasty, and not to give direct results when encountering problems. Write more about the pros and cons, and review the pros and cons after the fact. There is no need to change the main plot. By increasing the blank space for thinking, the characters will be more three-dimensional. 2. The details of personal interactions and etiquette are rough. At the end of the Han Dynasty, status was very important. There were differences in titles, gestures, and conversational propriety among clan members, civil servants, generals, princes, and lower-level officials. At present, some of the dialogues are relatively modern and lack the sense of the times. You can refine meeting etiquette, dialogue wording, and the sense of distance between superiors and subordinates; as a time traveler, the protagonist can also write about his sense of violation in adapting to ancient rituals, and distinguish different attitudes towards noble counselors, battlefield generals, and hostile princes who are loyal to the Han Dynasty, and the sense of game will be stronger. 3. Insufficient psychological description of characters Not only the protagonist, but also the hearts of his advisers and generals could be more profiled. For example, people like Xun Yu who care about the Han Dynasty have concerns when facing the protagonist, the concerns and loyalty of military commanders, and the suspicion and calculation of enemy princes. Don't just rely on lines to drive the plot, express the pull of people's hearts, and the atmosphere of intrigues and troubled times will be more realistic. 4. Goldfinger continues to maintain his current restraint This is a great advantage of this book: the panel is used as a reference for identifying people, the rare number of elixirs is a life-saving trump card, and there are no super-standard abilities such as storage or unlimited resources. It is recommended to maintain the status quo, do not expand and add powerful system functions later, and maintain the realistic background. 5. Try to stabilize the logic of the force system There are marrow-cleansing and marrow-cutting elixirs, but they only lay a foundation for the body and are not invincible in one step. The protagonist's strength improvement relies on acquired practice and battlefield experience, avoiding the stage where the soul of modern people directly crushes the veteran warriors, which is in line with the threshold of cold weapon combat in the late Han Dynasty. Overall, the setting is very comfortable, and the machinations are online. As long as the details are completed and the human emotions are portrayed more slowly, it will be a very outstanding Three Kingdoms clan style work. Come on, author, it is rare for someone to write novels with heart!
Very good, come on, come on
The content is clear and structured without any problems
The words are gorgeous, the language is smooth, the structure is rigorous, and the intention is good. Praise!
If you write something of high quality and quantity, it will definitely become popular.
What can I say about the writing? More than 400 chapters is considered acceptable in a historical novel, and the pace is quite fast, but it feels like it is a waste of food and is a pity to throw away. Come on, I look forward to the layout of the protagonist before Liu Hong's death. I hope I can keep writing. Come on.
Don't people need to grow? How old is Zhao Yuncai? The military strength is 99, and the commander is 92. Wei Qing, Han Xin, Wu Qi, Bai Qi, Huo Qubing, Yue Fei, and Zhuge Liang are not so high as commanders at their age, and they have no experience. Xu Huang and Wei Yan's peak commanders are probably over 92, but I don't think Commander Zhao Yun can surpass them.
How to say it? There are countless similar templates in Chunshuang Wenba. The king's spirit was shaken, the counselors and generals bowed their heads and bowed. Liu Bei looked at the thatched cottage three times and was afraid he would cry.
Unofficial history of the Three Kingdoms, Zhao Yun's marksmanship is passed down from his ancestors
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