A Straight Man Goes Viral After Linking to a Beauty System

The plot is okay, and the dialogue has a human-machine feel. I almost thought it was an AI article. After looking at it carefully, I found that it was not, but the author is very insensitive.

Let me rate it first. Well, how should I put it? The characterization is a bit thin and the dialogue is human-machine. It feels like a template that everyone uses in their dialogue. I have been reading Pomodoro for a long time, more than 4,000 hours, so I have read a lot of books. I often see this in new articles. This feeling, now I know it is AI feeling, but the author said at the beginning that he is working hard to revise it, so keep it up, it will be a bit uncomfortable to read later. For example, you can expand some of the dialogue yourself, and the author did not notice that it is almost all dialogue. Some actions and environments, but other elements you haven't written at all, and everyone's personality is different, you can try to create small habits or moods that are unique to a character. Of course, it may be a bit difficult, but try to separate them instead of Everyone gives me the same feeling. Well, here are some personal suggestions. After all, I have never written a novel myself, so it is not easy to work hard on coding. I quite like the type and setting of this article, so please work hard to improve, and don't be fooled. [Sending my heart] It's too late. I probably saw someone's comments earlier and worked hard to correct them. Think about it, I was very impressed by the good descriptions in Chapter 19. The chapters before that were all about the problems mentioned earlier, and then I didn't specifically note the chapters. There was a signature at the back and there was a bit of man-machine, and then it got better and better. Slowly, I felt good, and I could feel the obvious progress. Keep up the good work, the author 💕 third evaluation OK, this author really surprised me. From about chapter 30, from about that point onwards, I was really enlightened. I was so happy when I read it. It's so beautiful. It's so charming. It's super delicious. I love grandma. Please push hard, push harder, push harder. This world would be impossible without grandmas. It's super delicious!!!!!!

After reading a few chapters, the plot is actually pretty good, just like an AI comic. This conversation is all in my mind "What to do tomorrow" "Do it first" "What to do with the rest" "Pour it out, people can't be without conscience" "It's finally getting better" "Well, be steady" I suggest you change the dialogue

Gu Ye is quite nice, but I don't know why some people in the comment section are so mean to him. Is it because he doesn't like his love rival when he stands? The author's writing is quite good. I found some of the idiotic behaviors mentioned earlier to be exciting and touching. Am I the only one who feels that way? Even if it's 1vs1, isn't this a heartthrob? Is it normal for multiple people to like you? Come to Shura Field more. Isn't this what you want to watch when you are a heartthrob? Pull more arrows to make everyone like our protagonist's baby and fight for it. But haha, don't come with the deputy CP. The most annoying thing is that there is a deputy CP among the heartthrobs.

Hey, hey, hey, come and read this book! 1V1 does not explain, but Li Yang, a straight boy, is very cute at present, and it can be seen that his brother-in-law also dotes on him🥰To be honest, I think the author's writing has an AI flavor, which I think is okay. Maybe it's because I have friends who have this sense of man and machine, but they're really cute🥺

I have read both books, and they are both very good, and this one is also good. As for the AI ​​flavor mentioned in the comment section, I may have watched too many AI comics and dramas, and I am used to it. I don't think there is any big problem. Anyway, it is very good to read, and Xiaoli is very cute.

I think the setting is pretty good. I read the comments before reading it, and I was wondering how someone could understand it when I read the dialogue with handwritten AI. Hahahahahaha, it's really AI~ There is no emotion in speaking. The character has no other expressions and actions. The most written words are laughter and pauses. The word expressions are not rich enough, and there are no modal particles.

To be honest, their evaluation is somewhat reasonable. The writing is indeed very similar to an AI-generated short drama, but the structure and subsequent direction of the story are quite exciting. The perspective is also focused on the protagonist, not the protagonist. . . All in all, it is a suitable refreshing article, and it is very refreshing to read.

It's so beautiful. The protagonist is completely suitable for taking the no-CP path. I'll keep being beautiful! When I saw a cp in the introduction, I felt a little regretful. Can you please make a non-CP extra story~~

It's pretty. I think it's a great reward. Can't see the emotional line