[No romance / ensemble cast / group teams / starts as a fake apocalypse before shifting to infinite-flow / fast-paced early chapters; if that's not for you, please leave]
Note: The tags are wrong. By the time I noticed, the novel was already under contract and I couldn't change them. This is an infinite-flow novel, not an apocalypse novel.
Reborn fifty-eight days before the apocalypse.
This time, Bai Luoqiao has a storage space, supplies, and everything her whole family fought tooth and nail to stockpile.
She thought she had a chance to change the ending.
The day the blizzard melted, the real apocalypse had only just begun.
Then she discovered that the last letter from her grandmother hadn't been written by her grandmother.
Then she discovered that things that didn't belong to her had appeared in her storage space.
Something about this world seemed wrong…
Zombies tore open a rift, and electronic screens lit up amid the ruins.
Instances, points, rest areas, elimination rules: a complete game world.
Bai Luoqiao chose to form a team with her friends.
Even if they were just a group of ordinary people, they still deserved the chance to live!
Per Aspera Ad Astra. Victory is ours!
[Main character: Bai Luoqiao / Teammates: Mu Ju, Chen Cheng, Yu Lan, Lin Musen, Zhang Changle]
Finally, I have a book with a title that doesn't have the same synopsis as Wenqing. However, there are still problems. First of all, the first part of the introduction is about the end of the world, the middle part is like suspense, and the last part is about the game world. This middle transitional part really has a sense of suspense and conspiracy. It fails too much as a transitional content. It feels too disconnected from the subsequent game world. It is recommended to modify it. Secondly, I knew your problem just after reading one page. You can't divide it into paragraphs, and you like to write in big lumps. This is a common problem among newbies. There is also the problem of improper detail. The description of the environment is not even concise, almost no writing, and the character movements are incoherent. As soon as I opened my eyes, I covered my chest and gasped. Normally, I would sit up suddenly, then gasp for air, look around while gasping, feeling confused, and then cover my chest with my hands to calm down and fall into memories.
The pace of your story is so comfortable, not rushed, and it's so eloquent. It's clear that you didn't write "sad", but Bai can empathize with his family's worries. The protagonist's despair and depression are well described. Keep up the good work.